|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Story by Dad|
| Lunaris-wind chapter 138 . 3/8
The story is impressively detailed, and, for the most part, covers all it's different angles very well. Despite the problems I have with it, I have found it a mostly enjoyable read, and look forward to the next chapter. I hope for the best for Jerry.
| Lunaris-wind chapter 135 . 3/8
Um... What? Harry's bogart changing to an angry Hermione makes no sense. A dying/dead Hermione, or still the dementor, but an angry one?
Also, I was going to wait to make this comment, but your version of Voldemort and his Death Eaters is extremely soft since the Harry funeral, even considering the attack at the jewelers. I feel like I'm reading about an normal opposition political party at times, and not a terrorist organization.
| Death2Ignorance chapter 14 . 2/26
I'm still kind of in shock. not only is the whole dating thing not something to be skipped, but setting aside the… unusual breakup/ confession, setting aside that you don't go from friends to fiancé in the span of literally 2 minutes, you most certainly do not plan a wedding in a week, especially if you want a 'muggle' wedding. i just, I'm so thrown right now. the first dozen chapters were amazing, it looked like you had a wonderful vision, and the length of the story indicated that you were not shying away from extensive character development (and by extension relationship development) but these last two chapters… I'm still just waiting to read the line 'and then hermione/ginny woke up from her dream/nightmare'
| Death2Ignorance chapter 13 . 2/26
uuuuuuuuuuuuummmm, what? this chapter came out of no where. the way ron and ginny just set up their girlfriend/ boyfriend up with eachother was odd, and incredibly hard to move past, but then just like that they are engaged? there is a massive difference between being friends and being in a relationship. ill give this a few more chapters because it has been amazing thus far, but i don't know if i can move past this. i honestly felt like i was reading a whole new story throughout this entire chapter, and i liked the old story.
| Death2Ignorance chapter 12 . 2/26
haha ooo i love dobby! and thats saying something because i disliked dobby in the books, the last scene where he says how many books are in the book case was beautiful, dobby was so innocent, so happy to please, and so, so over the top. this chapter brought some much appreciated happiness :)
| Death2Ignorance chapter 11 . 2/26
| Death2Ignorance chapter 10 . 2/26
i teared up last chapter, i cried this chapter
| Death2Ignorance chapter 9 . 2/26
i actually teared up a few times this chapter, good chapter… saying this was a good chapter makes me feel like a horrible person
| Death2Ignorance chapter 7 . 2/26
did i miss a scene?because last i heard about ginny was harry had broken up with her, and here he is snogging her?
| Death2Ignorance chapter 1 . 2/26
your introduction was very helpful, gave all the info i wanted without spoiling the plot. you are right about HHr fanfics though, usually ron and ginny are portrayed as less than pleasant and even less intelligent, I'm glad you don't plan on doing this, i like ron as a character and hate it when authors murder (sometimes literally) his character, ginny simply wasn't developed enough in the books for me to have a strong opinion but the level of antagonism towards her can be a little overwhelming. nothing really happened in this chapter other than some house keeping so not much to comment on but i am excited by the prospect of this story. the first step of a million word journey :)
| AzureNemesis chapter 138 . 2/25
What an amazing story! I'm really looking forward to future updates. Keep it up!
| Publicola chapter 26 . 2/23
Oh. Just realized something. You make mention of a 'traitor at Hogwarts', whose only tie to Voldemort is through Nott Jr., and then three chapters later introduce a new character who looks to play an integral part in future events and chapters. Yeah, pretty sure your new 'big bad' is the Transfiguration Professor.
| Publicola chapter 8 . 2/22
Perhaps you do this later, but even if you can't take photos from within a pensieve, you could always have Tonks use her metamorphmagus skills to mimick each Death Eater, and take a picture of that instead. Easy solution to identifying them all without taking everyone pensieve-diving.
| Vegasman59 chapter 138 . 2/22
Voldy is going to get really pissed off with Harry now. Buying all those kids Christmas gifts is some thing he would never think of. The loyalty of his people is going to waver even more. Its getting to be fun.
| SirKaid chapter 138 . 2/22
Oh, Jerry, you should have known better than that. No one leaves Voldemort's service and lives to tell about it. Though, I am a little surprised that Voldemort doesn't do more suicide attacks, given how easy it would be to kidnap a Muggle, slap a bomb vest on him, and Imperio him into Gringotts. He's shown before that he doesn't care about collateral damage if his target's in range. Maybe he's unfamiliar with suicide bombers? I don't know when that tactic originated, if it was after 1945 then it's possible he wouldn't have heard about it. If he did hear of it he might have dismissed explosives as too Muggle, but a wizard under an invisibility cloak carrying a Mandrake would have the same effect, and if the wizard had earmuffs on it wouldn't even have to be a suicide attack. Maybe he thinks that kind of indiscriminate attack would erode his support? He'd probably consider it worth it if it killed Harry, though.
During Voldemort and Jerry's conversation, (Tom and Jerry, hee hee) you misspelled auror as aurer twice.