Your writing is incredible. This first chapter reads like a brilliant novel. I'm in love already and I've only gotten through chapter one

Shoulda stayed gone

"The phone call came at sixty miles an hour somewhere near Flagstaff on the fourth of October, 2005." This. *This* is how you write the first line of a book. Catches you right out of the gate, and the whipping of the wind outside the car carries the ring of the phone to you and sweeps you into the story.

And this, "He's not gone any more," that is how you end a book, with the wholly-earned and satisfying wrap-up of the theme that has been echoing throughout every chapter. Well done.

"The Crow on the Cradle" is a compelling and highly original story. What a brilliant spin on the time-travel/fix the future/etc premise! Telling it through Dean and Jess's eyes (and what a vibrant, believable character your Jess is!) was a masterstroke because it took your interesting premise and forced the reader to become engaged in trying to puzzle it out.

I grinned from ear to ear in triumphant exultation when Sam mentioned the iron under the floor as the backup to the chalk on the ceiling. Oh, that was amazing. And I loved Sam dragging them all out to see the semi at the end and beaming! You have a way of making your characters earn their happy endings that makes them thoroughly satisfying.

As I read, I had two minor quibbles: the first is that while I appreciated your semi-stream-of-consciousness writing style (it suited the story and gave it a wonderful flow and pacing), I thought that occasionally the sentences tripped off of "stylistic" and landed in "run-on." The second is that I think Jess's perspective, especially, might have benefited from some more vocabulary variation (I say Jess's only because she likely has an advanced vocabulary and so could use it, even in her head.) So, for example, the words "tired" and "f-d up," appear often. Sometimes they're very effective; sometimes I thought different word choice would have brightened the mental image and made the other uses of those words stand out more.

Thank you for writing "The Crow on the Cradle" and for keeping it posted here. I've read it twice now, and will definitely read it again in the future!

I love this so much. i love that sam doesn't get "fixed".

ah, this already seens amazing.
ive read a similar story and sam is never found, i hope this isnt the case in this

Just. Wanted to let you know that I loved this.

Another great story. I loved seeing Jessica interact with all the Winchesters and how she never gave up on her love for Sam. I can't find you on live journal, but if you still have other spn stories out there, I would love to read them.

Still astounded by the characterizations.

Riveting

Skin?

Still facinated

Omg, I would never be able to control myself like Jess is. I would have been screaming and hitting.

Your characterizations are wonderful.

Loved the first chapter. Do you have this fic posted somewhere else? I couldn't find the link.

That was frigging amazing!
How did yoy even think of something like that?
God! There were so many times when I wanted to stop and review, to express my anger when Sam never came back, when they were chasing after his shadow!
Then with Sam being slightly screw loose, even if he was faking some of it, and all but bloody hell when we saw Gabe I knew it was that bastard even before he said Deano and it was just SO good.
This whole thing has been EPIC!
I just really wish that now there was a way for Sam not to see the other timeline but I doubt that that can ever be fixed.
Sam now is what he is but everyone is alive and hopefully now with the demon dead the visions will stop like before so he will have less to deal with...
But wow...That was awesome.
I love it. Thank you.

ive read this story three times already, and im still struck by how beautiful some of your writing is. the end of these past two (three?) chapters, when Jess realizes how much she loves Sam, is just perfect.