Reviews for Breaking the fall
HardyGal chapter 10 . 8/7/2013
Ok genius… I'm waiting on a precipice over here, and it's been almost six years…
HardyGal chapter 6 . 8/7/2013
Twenty-six? Thanks for the insight; Tony's age has been bugging me big time
HardyGal chapter 5 . 8/7/2013
HOLY GEEZ I WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT TURN!
Laying a bit thick on the Ziva mistakes… She does make the occasional funny mistake, but not this much.
I think you already know this, but Tony's father is Anthony DiNozzo Senior.
HardyGal chapter 3 . 8/7/2013
There always was something about Tony that reminded me a bit of Joe Hardy…
HardyGal chapter 2 . 8/7/2013
It's one thing to read a story that isn't a movie or a TV show you're hooked on. It's quite another reading a fanfiction of a TV show. It's sort of weird reading these words in the exact voices, with their frustration, enthusiasm, or anger…
I'm so worried about Tony… I'm assuming this is an Alternate Universe, because, in the show, though DiNozzo Senior wasn't the nicest guy in the world, he wasn't abusive… I think…
HardyGal chapter 1 . 8/7/2013
OH, MY GOSH! AN NCIS FANFICTION! THANK YOU! (My very full of ideas mind is starting to make a Hardy boys/NCIS crossover… oooooh)…
IAMNOTAHAM chapter 10 . 3/12/2012
Wow
Izzy Jizzy chapter 10 . 11/24/2011
I like it. Cotinue. I wonder how Tony willbreact when he finds out that Gibbs is his dad. And it's spelled McGee not MeGee
joig chapter 6 . 1/31/2011
Oh my . . . where to begin?

Well, the original premise to your story sounds like an interesting one, but you throw so much major plot points into the mix at one time that it's hard to keep everything straight. I like the idea of Gibbs being Tony's dad as much as the next fan, but this is all happening way too fast.

Next, in chapter 5 you had Tony's dad state that the last time he'd seen Tony was 20 years ago, when he was 18, which puts Tony at 38. Then in chapter six, you stated that Tony was 26. I'm usually pretty easy-going about ages; I can read a character at any age the author wants, but it does need to be consistent.

Finally, you may want to consider a beta to help you with your work. They can pick up on misspellings like 'strait' instead of 'straight' (strait is a body of water). They can also recommend good line breaks and suggest pacing to let your story unravel.

Again, the overall idea is a sound one and one I'd be interested in reading, but the execution still needs some work. Good luck with future works.
Patricia chapter 10 . 2/12/2010
Please update soon cause Gibbs really needs to get to Tony.

Patricia
YaoiGirl1997 chapter 10 . 10/5/2009
please update!
sakuravision chapter 10 . 7/21/2009
I know it's been nearly a year since you last updated, but the stories pretty good so far.
beth chapter 10 . 7/1/2009
OHWOWOHWOWOHWOW! Hurry and update; I can't wait until the time Tony finds out Gibbs is really his father!
Ann chapter 10 . 4/16/2009
I hope that you haven't given up on this story. I hope they rescue Tony soon. Would like to know how Tony reacts to Gibb's being his father. Hope you update soon.
ddamato chapter 9 . 1/6/2009
Oh man, I completely forgot about this fic, but I also forgot that I reviewed every chapter, except this one, since I didn't know, or forgot there was an update.

Anyways, I don't really like how you make Ziva out to be so illiterate. It's just the american expressions that she doesn't know, like 'Don't have a cow' or 'don't beat around the bush', you know? So I hope you update soon, and try not to make Ziva look so stupid. *sheepish*
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