Reviews for the unexpected pirate
snoopykid chapter 5 . 2/25/2007
Good job keep it going
Aldea Donder chapter 3 . 12/31/2006
You need to use paragraphs whenever you switch speakers in dialog or express a change in thought. They're not just for show. No paragraphs makes what you've written next to impossible to read. It's also a huge turn-off to your readers when they click on a story and see an enormous wall of text looming in front of them.

Try and update chapters one through three with proper paragraph rules in mind, or at least format them into chapter four.
Takato.Hiroshima-1993 chapter 3 . 12/29/2006
Cool! I guess the Juria royal family aren't little angels after all. Misaki, a pirate, didn't see that one coming!