|Reviews for As I Fall|
| hmmmmmmmmm chapter 3 . 2/6/2007
-drums- xXnekoxX's here to boost your ego! Not like you don't get enough of that from the othres, but I'm mentally unable to wirte so praising it is then :) And ya, I'm a new reviewer...sort of...(-has left annonymous (where's my spellchecker when I need it? x.X)reviews for two of you oneshots)...tackleglomp me, but be gentle. I'm a fragile thing, ya know? -glares at Kura- And don't even think about making fun of that. I'm also a violent thing armed with a Thermo Spot (r) frying pan and not afraid to use it.
On to the praising!
The strangling!Jou sequence was...touching. Really(yes, my ideas of "cute", "touching" and "zOMG so col!" are messed up). What can I say? I'm a drama addict :)
The mou hitori no Yuugi drowning part was absolutley hillarious. -pats his head- Don't worry. You'll see the fishies some other time XD And yes, I don't see the point of a Pharaoh learning how to swim either. Heck! -I- never learned how ot swim!
-scrolls- Oh! That's a nice piece of Bronzeshipping you have there! -pokes the Bronzeshiping piece- -pice bites her finger- Ingrate! I was making a compliment! Malik has weird effects on fics he's in o.O
The Jou-Kura interaction is great and feels real, not too rushed (unlike the action in some fics out there in the great fandom -.o (you don't mind if I steal teh lil' smiley, do you?:D) ). Jou's sincerity is funny, especially since it's directed to our beloved, paranoia-filled tomb robber XD
Tomb robber: zero"
Poor Kura-kins...how come he always loses? He loses to Yami all the time, he lost to Kaiba (well..sort of...they didn't get to finish the duel) and...oh, let's not forget! He loses to Malik(Yami no Malik, dark Malik, etc, etc ,etc...Ra! This guy has a lot of names o.O )too. And now Jou has an advantage of two points? No wonder he's messed up...Ok, I'll shut up now.
The ending was...just...so...D'oh! I can't find the words to describe it. So it's -insert fancy praise word-. Yeah...that's a good word -nodnod-
I have searched the insanley long pairings list until my eyes starting bleeding (not really...but they hurt a lot) and yes, spazzshiping is the official name for Jou x Kura :))
I forgot what I wanted to say...write...whatever...oh well. I guess I'll just go and skim your profile. I've got a hunch I'm going to find some interesting stuff around there -hint hint-...-hint-...-hinthint?-...-.- Gods, I gotta stop talking...writing like this. Nobody ever understands what I mean!
I'm faving you. And the story.
Oh, and please excuse any spelling and/or grammar mistakes I may have. I'm dead without my spellchecker and English is my second language so...ya.
The real Ja ne!
| Sagira98 chapter 3 . 2/5/2007
Your january's like mine. On a good note I finally got my license:) but... my uncle died 3 days after that. Then the stupid bishop decides to close my school and two others and combine them into the most gay sounding high school ever. So when I graduate next year my diploma will say "Holy Redeemer High School"(Catholic high school my foot) yeah so january sucked big time. Oh wait I'm supposed to be reviewing the chapter...oops. Well all I can say for the chapter is that you must really like torturing people. Well at least you didn't mess up Marik like you did in SOA.
| PaladinDragon chapter 1 . 2/4/2007
this is a great start i can't wait to see what happens next
| nayades18 chapter 3 . 2/4/2007
I love it.. it was an excelent chapter !
it seems like It's going to be very dramatic like "the deep" ,(that was one of your best !)
kura and joey are very different from each other and that is a good thing ! I like the relationship between them
They can help each other in many ways ...
i hope you are ok , give us an update when you can _
| Isolationist chapter 3 . 2/4/2007
Wow, there's more interaction between Bakura and Jou in this chapter than I expected. So Bakura's addicted to heroine? That can't be good. BTW, I couldn't help but notice a few typos here and there in this chapter. About two or three if my memory serves me right.
I hope everything turns out better for you in your real life. Must be hard on you right now...
| Tenne chapter 3 . 2/3/2007
my bro did heroin...continue, this should be good.
| DomesticatedWerewolves chapter 3 . 2/3/2007
Hmm...Koinu's mad at me...nothing new there. I have no idea (though it could be for many reasons). Anyway, i praise people O_O. I just thought i was another one of those annoying reviewers that never leave you alone and basically would bow to you if you ask.
(rereads chapter) Aw, Kura, dont be mad. Its not...right. Dont hate me... Dont be mad because you're FUZZY
Bakura: (thinks: 'fuzzy'? WTF?)
| HieiWannabe chapter 3 . 2/3/2007
I'm not sure what I think of this story yet, so I'll just comment on your writing style. Comparing this to some of your earlier stories, I can't help but notice how much your writing has matured. The stories themselves were always good, even the ones whose contents made me ill, but you've gotten a lot better at narration. The ratio of action to speech has gone up considerably. You still don't describe settings very much, but that's improving too.
It looks like you did some research, since you got the withdrawal symptoms for heroin right. Withdrawal tends to do the opposite of whatever the drug did, so a depressant would be likely to cause severely pinpointed pupils and vomiting. I remember my accidental withdrawal from codeine, which is similar. I was in worse pain than was in before I started taking the stuff, and in places I had never been injured. So not fun.
| MarshmallowPeepGod chapter 3 . 2/3/2007
Hello...yeah...weird messed up chapter. And your life has been pretty hectic lately. Well, hope it gets better, bye.
| xxx.Jenn.xxx chapter 3 . 2/3/2007
YES! Teh Ferris Thing! -tackleglomps- Fwee! x] I shall try to remind you. If I remember, that is. o.O Wish me luck. I swear I WILL get around to replying soon. I'm just currently full of work and various other shitty things. But I will. Yes, and I'm full of excuses too but... Yeah. I'll get there.
Ah. D My poor 'Kura! -pats- Heh. I can imagine how "WTF?" he would be with Joey hanging around being all motherly and everything. Wait... Motherly? HAHA! -grins- Joey's being motherly! -cackles-
I'm sorry to hear about what's been going on. [ I hope it gets better for you soonishly. My gran who lives in France has been sick for a while (she has leukemia and a few other things) and she was sick with something so she went to the hospital (duh) but the stupid French doctors don't tell anyone anything so noone really knows what's wrong and they just sent her home. To die. So my mom's going to go visit her in... April I think. So ja. In a way I kinda know what you're feeling. In that sense. -huggles-
I shall speak with you soon!
| Rogue1979 chapter 3 . 2/3/2007
Yay, nice long chapter! I love the interaction between Joey and Bakura! It's going quite well, don't you think? (Kura and Joey glare at each other then turn away from each other in a huff) Sweatdrops! Er, maybe not.
Anyhoo, hope things are going much better for you these days! And I can't wait for the other chapters of the other stories!
| dragonlady222 chapter 3 . 2/2/2007
Good chapter. I hope Joey can help Bakura more now that he knows. It's tough to get off heroin but with the Ring and Joey he should be able to.
Poor Joey, I guess being a nurse to Bakura is good for him too.
Yami needs to learn to swim. I love Yugi's orders to him they were cute.
I hope your grandma is better and your dog can walk again. Support your friend but don't hurt yourself while doing it.
| Mishirith chapter 3 . 2/2/2007
Woah this chapter seemed very long. xD It was really good! I feel kinda bad for Bakura, for being so weak and all. :(
| Sporky- queen of the sand chapter 3 . 2/2/2007
, I'm happy, despite how sad the chapter is... Anyway, good chapter! keep up the good work!
| Silver Mirror chapter 3 . 2/2/2007
Awsome chapter! Ah, yes the drugs. Evil stuff! But good chappie! Thought i had to log on 3 times just to review. is giving me trouble! Anywho, I can't wait to read more chapters on any of ur awsome fics!