|Reviews for I Am Negima! ?, AND SO CAN YOU! Act I|
| Medinoc chapter 5 . 7/14/2009
Hey! You spelled "Smash" wrong!
| Zephyrus Anemoi Fiction chapter 5 . 1/4/2009
Negima, Pani Poni Dash AND Sonic. You're too much man. I am to be HONORED to be in the presence of one such filled with epic win like yourself.
| Zephyrus Anemoi Fiction chapter 2 . 1/4/2009
Dude, EPIC. Nuff said,
| Zephyrus Anemoi Fiction chapter 1 . 1/4/2009
Two crack-induced animes, invlolving child teachers, and school girls? Why didn't anyone think of this before?
| Person With Many Aliases chapter 13 . 12/31/2008
So, finally finished reading like you asked. It took me a while.
Over all, it was readable, but it was hard for me to continue to try and reading to the end.
Over all, I think you had good ideas, but the execution couldn't keep up.
I like Cygnus, and I like the concept, but the writing is basic, and the breaking of the 4th wall didn't segue naturally with the regular writing.
Your humor is alright, but I think it needs work. The use of internet memes... it didn't feel natural again. Like it was inserted just for the sake of using Memes for jokes, and to see if the audience could "get it". Sometimes it was funny. Mostly felt just inserted.
It was an interesting choice to use the ! continuity. Ever since reading the Manga, I prefer it. A much better battle system.
Anyways, over all, it was an alright read. Good idea, but the translation to written form didn't do frenetic comedy justice. Practice, and I think you can do better.
| Eternal Longing chapter 14 . 12/26/2008
Yay, there's one review left for me. So... comments. Ahem.
I like this new version more, but there are some things that I'm glad you didn't change. Final boss fight with Eggman still rocks (Insult/retort/and all that good stuff).
The reading was very smooth and, of course, immensely satisfying. Randomness adhered to some semblance of plot is apparently your brand of awesomeness embodied. It's been awhile since I've read any Fanfiction. Good to see something like this grip me again.
Well, you know my thoughts on Scheme. Now, it's time to move on to Nightmare. One story closes as another opens.
| ZXwruwe chapter 14 . 11/1/2008
Nobody reviewed chapter 14? But that was the best chapter! Just kidding and all. I was recommended to this story, and my own personal interest did bade to approach.
Then... Yowzha! The story captivated majority of my interest. Fun action sequences, crossover elements, and sheer jovial insanity of it! (Despite that I am still in need to read at least four more chapters.)
If you can spare some time for me, I would like to ask a favour.
Can you provide me somepointers on how to write in random and referencial style like you? I started on my own allusional and haphazard story, so it would be appreciated if you can do so. Then again, how I dare to ask favour for a member of Train Station! Then again, it was someone else who suggested me to ask you...
| donkeykong75m chapter 13 . 10/28/2008
(claps hands) wow that was awsome and whats even more awsome is that there is gonna be a sequal seriously this was the funniest thing I read and I am one of the rare breeds that could understand every single referance but still the funniest part was the Bad Dudes refference awsome job
| Tsutomu Teruko chapter 13 . 10/28/2008
Bravo, bravo! (And, encore?) Congratulations on bringing this crazy saga to its close once again. Your skills as a writer and a humorist have grown a lot since the first draft, and the story feels that much meatier now. Your handle on the frenetic energy of the (at times off-the-wall) plot is very good. Reading this was like riding a roller coaster; exhilarating and up-and-down and absolutely everywhere, but with knowledge that the architect knew what he was doing. Good job!
Great improvements in this version were, of course, the last few plot developments. The final battle was much better-supported and felt even more fulfilling this time around. (It really had the feeling of beating a final boss in a game, didn't it?) I also enjoyed the denouement of the plot better in this version. Sending the Peach Moon girls home not only added a cleaner sense of "closure", but made for a better read, with the sweet scene between Becky and Negi. (Aww, I am so only here for those two)
I'm very excited about what's to come, both Scheme 1.5 and Act II. The little lead-ups (Konoka is releated to Mokou?) really spark my anticipation, so I look forward to seeing what you have next to offer!
Thank you once again for such a fun read, and good luck with future works!
| Tsutomu Teruko chapter 11 . 10/20/2008
I liked this chapter; I enjoyed the beefed-up Gensokyo segment and the inclusion of this cute Windia girl (I googled her and she is very cute looking!) as well as the (6) and the rest of the tengu family; it made for a more exciting part of the story overall. The writing was also fun to read.
My only big problem with this chapter was that after the exciting, big boss, One-Winged Angel-like ending of the previous chapter, this doesn't really deliver on the feeling. This is, obviously, because it's a complete departure from the events of the last chapter, which was a little troubling for me because I went in thinking "All right, Boss Battle time!" but instead got something, while not bad at all, totally unexpected. This isn't really a bad move or anything, but it does sort of break up the reader's attention which could damage the overall effect in the end.
Which I guess is to say that the next chapter should hurry and appear soon, yes? After all, this chapter was Robotnik's chapter with no Robotnik in it!
| donkeykong75m chapter 10 . 10/11/2008
Again awsome badass chapter and the fact that eggman was the true villan I honestly did not see that coming (And I am not one eaisily shocked either)
well if this chapter was like this then you must have one helluva finalie planned I can't wait
| KonoSetsuna chapter 8 . 10/1/2008
LMAO. I laughed alot at the KonoSetsu fans part. I am very fond of your writting style. It kept me entertained for the entire story. I can't wait to read more like this!
| Shujin1 chapter 7 . 9/12/2008
I was a bit apprehensive about reading this since I had no idea what Pani Pony Dash was but I sucked it up and read anyway and I have to say this:
The writing style is full of humour. From breaking the fourth wall, to an over dramatic announcer voice speaking through, it stretches credibility and somehow fits perfectly with the fic.
You could stand to use a little more description of things, but not a lot though since it wouldn't fit with the aforementioned stlye all that well.
Keep it up though!
| donkeykong75m chapter 6 . 8/23/2008
Three words funny as hell it had to be the YOU FELL FOR MY TRAP CARD that got me.
On another note Shadow finally makes his debut
Next chapter please
| KonoSetsuna chapter 5 . 8/16/2008
Epic chapter. I'm loving evil Konoka and Setsuna. lol