Reviews for Reiworld
Dartz-IRL chapter 1 . 6/3/2007
I remember reading this and liking it when you first posted. The idea definitely made me smile... and it's something original for an SI...

Most of your issues are style related, a few run on sentences her and there and the such, but it's a minor glitch. It's a style thing, which should improve the more you write..

I would ask that you make use of scene dividers where necessary, instead of just 'meanwhile...'. It doesn't stand out enough, and the sudden jump can be a bit of a shock.

What I'd really ask you to do though, is update this. It's a clever idea deserving of life... Just be careful with your charecterisations, read it through a few times before posting, and get going.

EvSoc: Dartz

Slan Leat
Fifth Horseman chapter 1 . 5/27/2007
The amount of havoc (or good) that Rei could cause is limitless. Could be funny as hell to.
Midnight Lost chapter 1 . 2/17/2007
LMAO thats funny, cant wait for more
Krimzonrayne chapter 1 . 1/21/2007
gah! What an amazingly brilliant idea!

I can wait to see more, although... Rei, wouldn't she give it to commander Ikari to help his world domination schemes? Becareful with that line of thought...

until next time then
Cryoxe chapter 1 . 1/20/2007
Ah nice little story, Drunken Chocobos are what make the world go round
Ai Zhao Dao chapter 1 . 1/19/2007
Ai yai yai! What have you done! You know that the evilest ones never talk. *sigh* Well, guess I'll just sit back and watch the world crumble around me...
Dark-Plague2863 chapter 1 . 1/18/2007

This looks like it'll be a fun ride, I'll be keeping an eye. xP

-Da Plague
dogbertcarroll chapter 1 . 1/18/2007
NefCanuck chapter 1 . 1/16/2007
Oh I suppose this *could* be worse... If the Psycho Fraulein ever got *her* hands on that notebook.

Of course if I'm Shinji, I'm afraid... *very* afraid right now :P
WorkingClassNinja chapter 1 . 1/16/2007
The next thing Rei wrote into existence was a highly... subserviant Shinji.

*wink wink nudge nudge*
ttoad chapter 1 . 1/15/2007
wow...this could get interesting...and why is your chocobo drunk, don't you know how tiny their livers are?
Hamstadini chapter 1 . 1/15/2007





...You get the idea. X-] Hope to see more...
Alucard180 chapter 1 . 1/15/2007
a very interesting idea, put make coming chapters longer and more detailed and this can really be something

update soon
Lord Cynic chapter 1 . 1/15/2007
Oh great, now Asuka will be a super brat... meh. Great start so far. I'm expecting awesome things from this story. Like Gendo doing ballet or something...
ZeroSinRaid chapter 1 . 1/15/2007
dude sweet. thats all i can say sweet
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