|Reviews for Deveronvale Presents: AD 2172 Core Crisis|
| nero922 chapter 4 . 11/30/2014
Y R there over 7 chapter2s o.O?
| The Arsenal 3.0 chapter 8 . 4/9/2009
This story hadn't caught my eye until just recently. My apologies, seeing as how it's been here for some time.
That said, I'm definitely interested and would love to see more.
| Talon Silverwolf chapter 4 . 7/31/2007
I was actually surprised I stuck with this fic, I normally don't read others past the first page or even the first paragraph. Although there are some improvements I think you can do to make it more enjoyable.
1. Descriptions. They were a little lacking in some spots.
2. Please, please, please...don't have characters speak Japanese! It's annoying. I don't speak Japanese and some of these characters don't speak it. Most anime fans do this because it's "cool".
3.A deeper point of view can make a story flow and get deeper into what's really going on, otherwise it's just dull.
4. Write for the love of it.