|Reviews for Just a cough|
| Totally-Out-Of-It chapter 15 . 3/13/2013
That was beautiful. You need more practice with punctuation (which you might have already, since this was back in '07), but the story was sweet, true to character, and filled with just enough drama. It was great. I really loved it. Good job.
| JoaniexJony chapter 15 . 2/10/2013
I really enjoy all your work, but sick Tony is probably my favourite.
Thanks for sharing.
| ConventionObsessive chapter 15 . 9/2/2012
Wow that was great! It moved along at a nice pace and you did a great job capturing all the characters which I really rare on fanfiction sites :) I was very impressed by Gibbs, the small things that made him so canon!
| Morrolan chapter 15 . 5/30/2012
| GeminiSoul01 chapter 15 . 2/4/2012
I love this story. Just the right amount of angst to make my day.
I love a good angsty story. And this one has it. Good story so far.
| Richefic chapter 11 . 5/6/2011
Just wanted to correct something raised in a review below - especially as I can't reply to it directly but also because it seems I hadn't made the point clear.
When it says "It was one time, DiNozzo," Gibbs played along, even though this particular game was always more entertaining when they had an audience. Kate's reaction had been priceless. McGee's pure gold. Ziva, predictably, had just shrugged. "I shot you one time and I bought you a new shirt." what i mean to imply was that at some time Gibbs and Tony had told the "Gibbs shot Tony" story to each agent and that were their reaction.
It was not my intention to impy Ziva was ever present at the same time as Kate. Those who know my stories will realise I do know the NCIS timeline better than that.
| e chapter 11 . 5/2/2011
how can kate and ziva be there in the story?"Kate's reaction had been priceless, McGee's pure gold. Ziva, predictably,had just shrugged."line 8-9...ziva doesn come in until after kate dies, the link being Ari,Ziva's half brother and Kate's killer...glitch, even for a fanfic...
| Long Live BRUCAS chapter 15 . 3/7/2011
I loved the ice cream bit and Gibbs thinking of Tony and Abby as his kids. They so act like it at times. I love them together.
Obviously Gibbs wasnt worried about germs w2hen he took a spoonful of Tonys ice cream.
Yeah! Go Ducky you tell her off.
Good thing the plan worked out.
The gifts they gave were so special and true to what each other mean to the other.
| traumeule chapter 1 . 1/4/2011
What a wonderful story! ) You did an awesome job in letting us see different yet credible aspects of each character that perfectly fit their personalities.
I enjoyed reading this story and I sincerely hope you keep on writing and sharing your stories with us. :)
Best wishes from Austria,
| sterno chapter 15 . 9/23/2010
WHAT A NICE CHRISTMAS STORY BETWEEN GIBBS AND TONY. WELL WRITTEN AND VERY ENJOYABLE. THANKS FOR WRITING AND POSTING!
| Net Sparrow chapter 15 . 6/5/2010
I love SWAK and I love hurt/comfort and I love your excellent writing. So I must love your story. Poor Tony but with Gibbs he will put through everything. Especially at christmas. Very well written.
| The Vampire's Liaison chapter 15 . 5/28/2010
Adorable ending. Although you seem to have gone to some lengths to cut out Ziva from our fic. Do you not like her or something? Or do you find her difficult to write? I can't imagine it. Anyway, very cute.
| BleakRememberance chapter 15 . 3/26/2010
At first, I read the title, I was like . . . oh shit. O_O I hope Tony doesn't die. D:
But its all good. :D
| msdarque chapter 15 . 3/22/2010
Very realistic and yet classic at the same time. Truly enjoyed reading it. :D
Congrats! Lots of stars!
| Guest chapter 15 . 9/28/2009
Just read this story in full, start to finish. I'm a fast reader and good stories catch my eye - good stories like this one. There's a lot of things that make a good story. For example, do the characters behave within understandable and comprehendable manners given what we know about them from the actual show (or their origin)? With your story: yes. Gibbs, DiNozzo... everyone is well in-character, with understandable (and I've got to say, quite well done, very good) dialogue.
Another is the language used: does the story have good descriptions? Good underneath the underneath implications and meanings?
For yours: yes. I absolutely love the description you've got in your story - its not overbearing, and it paints a very focused picture on the plot (and subplots). The description you've got is lovely, and so is the dialogue and... yeah, you get the idea.
Yet another is the grammar and spelling. And this is the point at which I've got to make a contention. Not to you, but to another of your reviewers, because reading their review really struck a nerve with me, perhaps because of the harshness and abruptness of the review, or maybe because of the rude way it was done. Maybe because they went too far, in my opinion, and, in reality are almost completely incorrect with what they were saying. Personally, I thought it was quite obvious that you had either proofread this story very thoroughly, or were such a good speller (and good at grammar) that you didn’t need a great deal of proofreading.
I know full-well that you write with European spelling, as do I because I’m an Aussie. However, I don’t pick on spelling errors very often, mostly because of the differences between different English language varieties. I’m well aware of the differences, as well, which is why, on my beta profile page (yeah, I’m a beta reader) I state that I’ll do spelling for either European or American versions of written English. Which is why I know that curb is a word, and kerb is a word. And you used ‘kerb’ because that’s the way you learnt it, simple as that.
Sorry. Just reading back through that, sounds like a rant. I guess that review annoyed me, which is a bit of a rarity to be honest. But anyway, you’re not wrong; ‘whilst’ and ‘leant’ are both words – to that anonymous reviewer, if ever you read this, look it up. They’re both words.
However, that reviewer must have keen eyes, because a mistake was picked up that I didn’t notice until I’d read the review. In one sentence, you’ve got:
‘“No-one to ask any awkward questions when they need to loose the occasional kidney or donate some bone marrow for good ole Uncle Sam…”’
Obviously, here you meant ‘lose’ not loose.
I think also at some points with some sentences you miss out on a couple of commas. For example (from chap. 5):
You put the sentence: ‘Except that, since he had recovered from the plague insurance of any kind had become a mind field’.
Now you missed the comma that should be after the word ‘plague’ because the comma needs to separate different ideas (in a sense). I noticed you did that a couple of times in your story.
Overall however, I thought your spelling was brilliant, and the same with your grammar. I mean, come on, you had over twelve thousand words for your story, so one noticed spelling error and one qualm with regards to grammar is absolutely nothing.
Basically, I think you’ve done a great job with this story, and I do want to say well done, great job, I loved it.
Congratulations on an excellent piece of work.