|Reviews for Jasper in Gym|
| lita.in.the.sky.with.diamonds chapter 1 . 6/12/2008
OMG. I loved this! I was about to say "Wha?" when I read about Jasper being jealous of Edward. And then you threw in the curveball about it being Bella's first day at Forks, and then I was like, "Smart."
Oh, in case you didn't see it, there's a typo in the paragraph about Carlisle's sensible rules that kinda looks bad. "Playing basketball with humans was like *driving owning* Porsche"... just in case you'd want to do something about it.
I loved this oneshot. Gah, I wish I could write like this haha.
| TwilightObsessedMell chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
Loved it ]
| OfficiallyDazzled chapter 1 . 6/4/2008
Wow...that was really good. I loved the part where Jasper made Emmett's team distracted and depressed. I really liked your characterization (not even sure if that's really a word :P) of Jasper.
| nyckiii chapter 1 . 6/2/2008
Nice- poor Jasper... excellent writing, and it was SO in character! Great job! ;)
| turban chapter 1 . 5/27/2008
Wow, good story :)
| Verticalness chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
That was amazing. You captured Jasper's voice fantastically. Loved it :D
| MoonlightShadowOfADarkDream chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
It was great! You really caught Jaspers struggle!
| summersgirl2526 chapter 1 . 5/12/2008
ooh I like this!
| alice and edward cullen chapter 1 . 4/24/2008
that was fantastic D
| Mizra chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
I feel so sorry for Jasper, really. I mean, the guy tries so hard to be good and I am beginning to wonder why it is truly so hard for him. I mean, I'm sure he killed alot of people, but was it that much?
Very nice scene in explaining Jasper's point of view!
| The Real Blue Eyed Demon chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
This really gets into Jasper's head, good job.
| The EarthSong chapter 1 . 4/5/2008
You really ought to do more Jasper! Love Jasper, can't enough Jasper and you do SO well! Thansk.
| TheMainThingIsNotToPanic chapter 1 . 4/5/2008
okay if that was bella you should continue and talk about how Jasper is surprised to see Edward loose control. that would be a really good premise for a chapter, i have always wanted to hear jasper's reaction to Edward's control. i love all your stories, update the PE one soon please.
~TheMainThingIsNotToPanic - Embrace Your Inner Masochist
| Philippa chapter 1 . 3/27/2008
That was great! I'd never considered the problem of Jasper in gym, but you've done a great job of exploring the various aspects. Poor guy! I also sympathize with his annoyance over Edward and Alice's "paired omniscience" - it must be awful to live with, especially when you feel you're always falling short of the mark.
| Bookflower chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
Oh, this is written so so well! I loved it, and I love the way you get into Jsper's head.