Reviews for Hinata's Guardian
saiyanvegeta1648 chapter 6 . 7/13
We're you 5 year old when you wrote the story.

Seriously, I can't read further then this.

Not that your style is bad or anything on the contrary it's quite good actually.

But you are writing this as you are a kid no older than five.

Naruto is super strong and no one can defeat him.
Even with kyuubi he isn't that strong. He had to learn which takes years and experience which your Naruto already has in three years and is like a God.

And quite frankly he is arrogant in the fic. Even me who is not that great of Naruto fan can see he is out of character.

I'm a super big Hinata fan but this Hinata is make me Me rethink my choice.

And quite frankly every character is out of character here. So I am not getting the feel like I get when reading other stories.

Also whole fic is like a comedy series.

Also sasuke will die rather than let Naruto help him and train him.

Also they don't know each other that much in this fic.

So the part where Naruto trains sasuke is off beat.
Naruto rather train Hinata can't see they know each other and trust each other so take her to other dimensions and tell everything.

But no such bonding was made with sasuke so the friendship is not have a real like feel.

I am not writing it to criticise you rather these are opinion of mine after reading the fic.

The fic is not helping in connecting with the characters on intimate level like the other fic I have read made me feel.

It's like well a off beat composition.

Hope any further fic you write can provide depth which this fic lacks.
QGTheKing9 chapter 48 . 3/30
Sorry about your grandma
p.s. You are one if not my favorite fanfiction writer
naruheram1fan chapter 3 . 1/11
g gets with naruto
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Update all ready man
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Castle town
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A and b
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Boy and girl and that get tsunade back
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A Come to Konoha

C Goku fights Orochimaru

D Vegeta fights Orochimaru
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