|Reviews for Changes|
| Blazingnyancat chapter 16 . 12/29/2013
Anyone feel bad for Chi-Chi?
| thewonderingman chapter 16 . 7/5/2012
Great story I realy enjoyed it, It is a bit sad, but none-the-less A good story.
Anyways I would like to see a panxgoten pairing, I know there family but they look so cute together, and the whole panxtrunks angle is used way to much, and poor goten is always stuck with a crapily made oc or by himself, I say its about time somebody gave that poor boy some loving. But you appear to already be pairing her with trunks so nevermind (but if you could do that that'd be awesome). Anyways I thought the story overall, was well writen, with a nice smooth flow to it. The characters were well rounded, and each had there own little quirk. So yeah, amazing story looking forward to the next chapter.
| massey chapter 16 . 7/6/2011
Great story, I hope that you would finish this soon.
| Nessa671 chapter 16 . 6/9/2011
Please update soon.
| chorky chapter 16 . 5/5/2011
You shouldn't just let her forgive trunks that easy he really hurt her and he could have made up for it anytime he wanted. And why were he at her school with an cheerleader?
Bra she shouldn't be forgiven easy either she left pan alone with her feelings and let their friendship die.
Now as for Gohan and Videl they should really pay the most I would hate for her to come back and just let them be forgiven that fast. Her Parents should have loved her. Videl let her get beat and abuse for no reason how could she believe that was ok because she's saiyan she have to be beat, it wasn't that way befor. Gohan should have to suffer befor he is forgiven he did violate her and he did sort of raped her by given oral sex to his daughter, thats not easy to get over.
Pan is 28 now she can move out the house and leave them she should move to CC or atlease hide her ki and live away from them all for awhile.
I know I wrote alot lol but I would hate to see her forgive every that fast because they apologize she should make sure they mean it befor she accept it.
| famoso chapter 16 . 12/1/2010
I'm glad your updating alot faster then alot of other stories your doing great.
| KarinKurosakiHitsugaya913 chapter 16 . 11/30/2010
Cool can't wait to read more. I will be waiting for the next chappy.
| Pan-chan34 chapter 15 . 11/15/2010
I love this story so far. Mirai Trunks and Pan get togethers are one of my fave stories to read. I really want Pan to end up with Trunks from her time though, cuz I can tell he really loves her. Pan just doesn't see it, and Trunks can tell her the truth as to why he pushed her away. She should wake up from her amnesia eventually too and realize who she is, and start falling for Mirai Trunks. And then be torn between Mirai Trunks and the Trunks from her time. A love triangle is always good. Anyway, I love how this story is going. And can't wait for the next chapter!
| famoso chapter 15 . 11/10/2010
Great story I love it and very original.
| marai pan chapter 15 . 10/17/2010
i think its quite interesting and i hope you continue. as for the whole thing with gohan it makes me a bit sick. no daughter should have a father like that. if this ever happened in real life i think i'd possibly hurt him any way i but it just pisses me off.
| intrinsic chapter 14 . 6/30/2010
update soon! interesting storyline...dark, disturbing and original...i like it (even if it does creep me out)
| Alexeigirl chapter 13 . 5/31/2010
this history has left me in shock, of good form. Of beginning it did not understand because almost all tartaban to Pan of this form, having like only one I support Goten, Bulma and it vegetates, why Trunks in spite of calling it "your Pan" does not seem to have the best of the relations with her either, but what I leave to myself with the open mouth was Gohan, the truth costs me work to imagine it beating and abusing its own daughter... a strong, but valid, slightly worrying and interesting resource, why it is understandable so Pan will want to Flee, and change everything, although he should know that like mirai, you can change the past, but yours does not, creating so an alternate line...
I continue in schock after reading the latter chapter, but I have been interested in this history so the follow with taste, and certainly, the new name of Pan is interesting, and I hope that Mirai or Trunks... should help to cure .
| Jaedeon Sierra chapter 13 . 5/31/2010
Ok once again not bad.
If you feel that that discription is enough for the story then it is. You can always go back to it if you need to clairify something else later on.
We can assume trunks's sayian moon situation with pan; even though what he did was never told just implied. Presuming at this time Pan had not been feeling any effects/affects...ok not remembering which word is which at the moment.
Basically its ok that its open ended...only use it if its necessary and so far your feel for that is good.
Its nice you're asking us what we'd like to read next; but you should let the story naturally lead you.
You say you're stuck. How so? Guessing its not so much writers block per se but the gap of time since you started this story and maybe you forgot the origional "feel" and where it was headed.
Best advice I could give is just take your time and re read what you have up til now...you may start remembering or come up with an idea where to go. IF that is whats going on.
Keep up the good work.
| Jaedeon Sierra chapter 12 . 5/31/2010
hmmm short version review since I just cleared it.
Like I said before your dividers are appreciated. I hadden't realized how much so until a couple days ago when I started reading another story. It's good but with no scene break indicator a bit confusing at times until one realzes it.
Dont worry about length. You were doing just fine. Everyone has their own style and your's works for you. If the chapter feels complete to you then it's probably long enough.
Some chapters may be longer and some shorter but usually most are about the same size (length wise-remember Quality over Quantity...lol its my main motto while writing). Your length average is usually set in the first few chapters (once you're into it you kinda naturally set this standard-varies from story to story too)
Well there you go on to the next.
| Jaedeon Sierra chapter 11 . 5/31/2010
Ok your revised chapters are a lot stronger and flow better now with just a few errors to mention but I've forgotten where they were actually.
Oh wait 'cept one that stuck in my mind and that was minor but lol gave a slight hick up and chuckle. It had something to do with Vegeta's sudden fist...lol minor trust me ...just the word sudden was in a slightly wrong spot or you missed a word or two while you were typing it in-even I do that from time to time...silly mind anyway...wish the fingers could keep up with it.
Your pacing is also quite good as are your visual breaks (I appeciate the lines when a "scene" change happens. Have one story that I'm reviewing, the writer's doing well except there are no indicators of a scene change which causes a moment of confusion and then realization.
Amazing how something so simple aids in reading. Makes me reaize how in novels sometime story breaks are indicated by, not lines, but the addition of extra spacing between the chapters.
So far you have a strong storyline going here; ahhh I see the problem...you started this a while back so you have a gap or two in here...well let me see your new stuff after all you may be doing just fin.