Reviews for Guilmon, Keeper of Precepts
Soulfire72 chapter 2 . 10/9/2014
While the individual tidbits in this chapter were nice, several things just stroke me as inaccurate or confusing. First thing; when Edel describes pollution in America, his statement makes no sense. Why would pollution have anything to do with keeping digimon 'in shape'? From what I know, America's pollution isn't that bad; this seems more like Beijing or something. And the power cord thing? I just think this statement needs to be removed completely.
Then Guilmon and Renamon's conversation goes back and forth between believability. Sometimes they say things that make sense, then suddenly give a depressed or offensive reaction that seems out of place. Renamon also seems to maintain that she doesn't have romantic feelings but still addresses him as 'My dear Guilmon' as if she was. She wouldn't say that in this situation whether she did have romantic feelings or not.
Soulfire72 chapter 1 . 10/9/2014
So far from reading, this story has some potential, especially for Edel (though couldn't you have used a more original digimon for his partner?). There were a few grammar mistakes: for example using 'women' instead of 'woman'.
It's also quite hard to keep up with the flow. The opening paragraph starts out like its a narrator directly addressing the reader, but halfway through it transits to Rika from seemingly out of nowhere. These things make sense in her context but actual examples of her interaction with others would help to illustrate these internal thoughts.
The dialogue is fine on its own, but there's not natural flow between speakers. There's barely any reactions displayed, and it's difficult to tell who is actually speaking, especially when Edel meets Rika and Takato who only starts talking upon entering the scene without describing him walking in at all. You need to add things like "..." He added/responded.
DWrightManForTheJob chapter 5 . 10/11/2011
more chapters please!
The 5th Dragon Guardian chapter 5 . 7/15/2011
Good story
SG-Cynder chapter 5 . 10/6/2010
this story is very good. I know that the last update was along time ago, but this is very good.
drakonis51 chapter 1 . 9/16/2009
When you will update this story its very long since your last update, i want to see what happen to the digimons(look like it will be funny)
Hola chapter 3 . 6/11/2009
Esat muy bonita la historia, sigue asi de bueno

Te doy un 10 estrellitas
luke chapter 5 . 5/27/2009
pls hurry up with the next chapter cant wait
luke chapter 5 . 5/26/2009
pls hurry up with next chapter
markus chapter 5 . 5/26/2009
pls hurry up with next chapter
luke chapter 5 . 5/24/2009
pls hurry up with next chapter
connar chapter 5 . 5/24/2009
pls hurry up with next chapter
ace chapter 5 . 5/24/2009
i like the sound of things in this and i cant wait for the next chapter
metal dog chapter 5 . 5/24/2009
i like this story so far pls hurry with next chapter
lucas chapter 1 . 5/23/2009
i like the story i just cant wait for the next chapter pls hurry up and finish it.
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