Reviews for Better
TheRoadgoeseverOnAndOn chapter 1 . 8/2/2009
A great story. Very good.
paynesgrey chapter 1 . 2/10/2008
Aw. How sad and bittersweet. A very enjoyable oneshot.
Magus101 chapter 1 . 2/10/2008
You PM'ed me about this story.

I think this story had a good start. I think the focus of the story was the relationship between Wolvie and Jubilee and how strained it would be.

Towards the end, the story focuses on internal monologue. I don't feel that's a good way to go, especially with the interesting image here:

"He undid the ties of his left boot and redid them tighter, not that they were loose to begin with. He finished with his shoes but still wouldn’t look at her. He couldn’t. He rest one arm on each knee and slouched slightly. His neck arched down as he looked at the pattern of the wood between his feet."

I think you should end with a stronger image than fading into darkness.

Eh you do what you gotta do, I'll gladly add this to the C2 Archive.

Much luck with your writing,

Magus101
Luciferus chapter 1 . 5/9/2007
Nice! Haven't read Xmen fanfics for a while, but I love how you portrayed the both of them!

I never thought Jubes and Wolvie were a couple, but very very VERY good soulmates...and you've made that shine nice!

Kudos! XD
B Oots chapter 1 . 2/7/2007
I really like the story. I hope to read more of your stories in the future.