Reviews for The Thirteenth Hour
Wrandom Writer chapter 1 . 11/25/2009
Wow, I am not sure why you want a beta reader. You are an exceptionally author! I haven't found very many of those on this website.

(To your disappointment, I'm sure) I don't have any pickets right now. I couldn't really see anything that you obviously needed to work on.

I do, however, have some praise. You have a very natural way of writing. What I mean to say is that I love the way you phrase things. I also love the voice that you give to Hansel. I wonder, how did you come up with this story idea? It is very interesting.

You also use wonderful similies and metaphores. They are original, simple but wonderful. They add a nice touch to the story. :)

Sorry that this is just an "OMG LOVD iT!11!1" review, but I can't really think of anything at the moment. I'll check back on the story and see if I can see anything.

Keep Writing,

verity candor chapter 1 . 7/19/2009
Hm, really interesting! I would really like to see more of this.
alexcleoegypt chapter 1 . 2/7/2007
Hey, this looks great!