|Reviews for Release|
| Lilychan chapter 1 . 2/28/2007
This is a unique piece, unquestionably. I admire the style you used to write this:
- elaborate sentences punctuated with short, powerful statements
-the unchanging tone that doesn't accentuate anything on its own, allowing the words themself to catch the eye of the reader
-the repetition of "I am looking for my mother."
-and, lastly, the soft imagery that flows well without being redundant or blasé.
Secondly, I saw the same comment, "this story is so great, write more stories like this one " a few times and I'd like to say comments like that are nice, but when it's just a copy & paste job, it's really just rude.
Also, to answer janey-in-a-bottle's question, I believe "I remember that there was a before," was meant to be used as a noun itself, meaning "a past." (I understood that loud and clear by the way, so don't worry about clarity)
Keep up the good work! (in case you're not noticing, I'm looking through your stories)
| Ceaka chapter 1 . 2/7/2007
this story is so great ,write more stories like this one
| janey-in-a-bottle chapter 1 . 2/7/2007
Nice to see the situation through the eyes of the 'soul'. And I like how you managed to portray the child's feelings.
One thing though, you seemed to have missed a word at a point:
"I remember that there was a before,"
What was there before?
Apart from that, it was a great little story.