|Reviews for Sonic the Hedgehog: Future of Flames|
| Frozen Nitrogen chapter 2 . 7/15/2009
Eh, again, I feel something of a drought in the descriptiveness here. You've got fireworks, and then, 'Oh, suddenly, the altar's being bombarded by missiles'.
As azngirlchibi frequently lectures me, multisensory description is good description. Your 'description' of the missile bombardment extends only to a statement that it is happening. It can be made all the more vivid to the reader through the off-key whistle of approaching rockets, the blossoming light of explosions, the tactile sensation of pulverised shrapnel whizzing through the Princess' hair, the sulfurous stink of deonated munitions. And... err... the taste of... something.
OK, perhaps not taste. But more in the way of "BOOM! FLASH! POW!" would be pretty useful here, in my humble opinion.
Liked your little SA2 nod in Sonic considering doing Chaos Control up to the Egg Carrier, and deja vu from SA1 with the whale pen. Pan-series continuity connections ftw!
Regarding the very end, with Eggman climbing into the Egg Cerebus; isn't the entire point of that boss that Eggman's controlling it remotely, thus the smash-the-transmitter-on-its-head tactic that gets used in at least one of the boss battles?
| Frozen Nitrogen chapter 1 . 7/15/2009
Well then, O Great Master of the Forums, let's see what's going on here at long last! :)
I did very much enjoy your foreshadowing italicised opening here, with all the stuff about the flames and the rectification of the past. The random irregular capitalisation threw me a bit in the subsequent post-funerary section, but it's not a great quibble.
I was a little underwhelmed by the dream-presence of Iblis. "Suddenly the sky became black and in the middle grew a large flame. A monstrous beast seemed to appear out of nowhere consumed by flames. The flames then spread consuming all of Soleanna." ... meh. Where's the "incandescent behemoth, wreathed in unquenchable, killing fire; and the relentless, murderous Flames of Disaster, spreading from the beast in crimson waves, flash-boiling the sculpted canals to plumes of superheated steam; reducing Soleanna's alabaster beauty to blackened ash as Iblis roared with incomprehensible rage!"? Eh?
The transition from dream to reality was a little abrubt, although I had to grin at the servant's blase attitude towards her princess' CRAZYNESS. :)
| manicfan40 chapter 5 . 5/24/2009
Great story keep up the great work.
plz make more of the story
| nobodiez chapter 5 . 11/5/2008
what a good story, but there seem a bit of anger between sonic and elise
| xxxxxxxxxxxx21 chapter 5 . 6/14/2008
I love Mephiles the Dark! He's frickin awesome! Shadow was made kinda stpid and Sonic is a retard as usual... blah,blah,blah...
love from my flames and shadows,
| TailsWiseGamgee chapter 4 . 12/6/2007
nixce adapation as usual. Just a question I never got the chance to play sonic rush and i already knew who blaze was before this game but i was wondering in sonic rush did they mention at all that she was from the future. cuz unless they did the old memory wipe i never understood why sonic and blaze acted like the never met in this game
| DangerousRockstar chapter 3 . 9/10/2007
Nice job! I haven't played the game, so it's good to read a fic of that game from someone. Keep it up!
| dragonskidd chapter 2 . 9/2/2007
Please write the rest.
| MammaWashu chapter 2 . 6/12/2007
Loving it! Keep it up!
| Ash Bartlett chapter 2 . 5/18/2007
HOLY CRAP! I've played the game, but reading this story made me feel as if I was right by Sonic! PLEEASEE get the next chapter up soon! ;)
| wassup chapter 1 . 2/10/2007
Fantastic! Please keep going, this is an excellent adaptation.
| Cam3leon chapter 1 . 2/9/2007
Not bad. It was a little on the short side, however, and it could have focused more on vivid description and building up the story in addition to dialogue. Otherwise, this is a nice start. Can't wait for the next chapter!
| ultima weapon338 chapter 1 . 2/8/2007
Pretty sweet adaptation. Least Im not the only one addicted to the game. And about the Knights of Kronos thing, it might be a piece of downloadable content at the marketplace(all there is so far is Very Hard mode. Its acctually worth playing. And its only 200 points for each.)Keep up the story. Oh and is there any easier way to make more rings in sonics episode? I finished all of the missions and I still need the purple gem.