Reviews for The Lie I've Lived |
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AFanWhoFeelsThings chapter 3 . 3/26/2007 *bats eyelashes* Can I be a part of that team? Seriously, this is def getting better. The memories from James are my favorite part. Those are pretty seemless and easy to take as fact, where sometimes I find James and Lilly written in other stories a little hard to swallow. They were very young, after all, and the way you've written them did not make me screw my face up and go "Eh...I dunno about that..." like usual. Still having trouble getting in bed with Harry. He just seems so...distant...merely a narrator in something that is not his life though he keeps saying "I..." Perhaps this first person thing is just not my thing, but it might take me a few more chapters to be certain exactly what it is that's bugging me. Look-bottom line is: you have a really good, fresh outlook (IMO, though admittedly I don't read as many fics as I should, having said that) on Harry and his experiences. Your dry, witty take/analysis of the people surrounding him (goddamn I thought I would spit out my chocolate milk when Hat called Dumbledore a lemondrop-sucking so and so!), his situations, and the amount of seemless detail you use to make the wizarding world a real, take-it-as-it-is place is fantastic. My main problem with this fic (and, in general, I guess, your writing) is just that: MY PROBLEM, not yours. There is no way possible, IMO for someone like me...a *girl* like me...to get inside an adolescent boy's head. Oh I can try...and maybe even pass, though just barely. Harry, your Harry, and others' version of him that are kind of alike, just rubs me the wrong way. Reading him here makes me remember why I hated boys in grade school, junior high, and high school. But I remain eager to see where this story goes, and what fun stuff you have planed for the Triwizard Tournament. ...sh...the monkeys... |
AFanWhoFeelsThings chapter 2 . 3/26/2007 Well, I am finally submitting my review. Late, late, late, I know I'm sorry. So...I definitely was taken aback by the sorting hat. I'm sure you've heard this like a thousand times already, so I'll just say that despite it being a bit over the top, it was damned funny. I just had to get used to such things coming out of those folds of old fabric that make up Mr. Hat's mouth...it's probably a good thing that I went away and then came back a couple months later to re-read this. I took to it better this time. Harry...his first person feels a bit...off to me. It's not something I can easily put my foot on. First person has never sat well with me, I don't think. Everything seems flat and maybe...hollow? When he gets angry, I don't feel the anger...when he is surprised or upset, I can't really sympathize with him in this. Perhaps it's still to early to tell, perhaps I'll read the next chapter and feel differently. For the moment, though, I'm not really feeling first person. I do love that you aren't giving Harry instant supreme knowledge, that you are giving him two companions that are NOT Ron and Hermione (a wacky bunch they may be, but it's very intriguing-Harry, Sorting Hat, and Dobby)to converse and study with over the summer. I'm looking forward to the verbal exchanges between this disgruntled hat and this confused/agitated Harry. I'd say, overall, the direction of the plot (with the newly revamped Tournament and James/Harry stuff) is really good, and I'm anxious to read more. Only try to make Harry a little more...how can I say this? Real? Unless this story is intentionally supposed to be removed and meant only as an observation... I'm rambling...let me move on to the next chapter before I further embarrass myself... |
erin chapter 3 . 3/26/2007 Wow - kudos for an (as far as I can tell) original Sorting Hat. Very interesting take on the "you've got so much of your father in you, Harry" theme. I'm facinated, and I can't wait to read more. (Just please don't stop working on BitJ!) Thanks :) |
The Lady Reaper of the Shadows chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 well... it's bery intriguing! eagerly awaiting the next! |
Merle chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 Another very good chapter. This is an interesting premise that James was somehow incorporated into Harry; I can't wait to see how you rationalize that! The Lily/Remus thing was the best explanation for the lack of trust in Remus I've heard, and takes a shot at St. Lily. Have you heard of Rorschach's Blot favourite curse? Perhaps James could have used it on Remus. And maybe Bellatrix could have been James' first? That would be quite the twist, with Harry having memories of that inside his head... Looking forward to the next chapter! |
Kokuyo chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 Gods, I just love your humor. I know it sounds silly but I almost hope you'll never finish your stories and instead just continue writing until the end of time ;). No, seriously, making Harry and the hat pals in this strange kind of way is just ingenious. I don't think that has been done before and that says something with so many stories floating around. |
Vetus Animus chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 your nuts u know that. absolutly insane. See ya next chapter |
Kokuyo chapter 1 . 3/25/2007 As much as I like your third story (yes, you're getting on my favourite authors list... hasn't happen in years), you need to pay more attention to your tenses. You keep mixing up past and present. |
icedragon925 chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 your best yet |
Aoejajentocpa chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 Also good. I hope you can juggle three stories and update them all frequently. Preferably this one and Bungle in the Jungle. ;) Meghan |
Tilius chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 Liked the new chapter. |
Jarvey chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 Excellent story so far. The review system was down, so I waited a whole day just to review! |
rune1806 chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 hi this is a very different take on the story but i do like it. the man in a boys body, the whole if i knew then what i know now will give you a wide range of things to play with. |
davy83815 chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 Very interesting, I really like the way the hat is portrayed. |
illachi chapter 3 . 3/25/2007 I like it. Any changes in Harrys character can now be put down to him being James (possibly). The tenses in the first chapter were a bit confused (even in the same sentence) but it was still extremely readable. I like your Hat although I wonder if he would really be as rude as all that to Harry in the beginning if he is already on probation. Surely he would save his frustrational rants for Dumbledore and merely be uncooperative without the excess language with mere students until he got to know them? Still it did get him where he wanted to be and moved the plot along nicely. |