You have portrayed Snape as too weak in his powers as an Occlumest. He could withstand the mental probing of Dumbledore and Voldemort, the greatest Legilimens in Britain.

This is dumb...psychological torture porn

Wow! I don't read much stories that have been written before DH, but I stumbled into yours and had a great pleasure reading it! The characters are intense and difficult and real. And your Snape is a git but still does the necessary thing, which is difficult balance in Snape mentor Harry fics. Rufus is a delight, very good job on him. I think I would have liked more involved Ginny, but well I can't have everything perfect) thank you!

Someone has stolen your story

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Martin Luther King Jr Joined Apr 10, 2013, id: 4655634

Extremely well-plotted story with a more canonical Snape (for an AU) and a truly sadistic Voldemort. Dumbledore bashing, but not to a point that was truly OOC. Great, vivid, sometimes horrifying descriptions of Legilimency.

Nice chapter, Snape's ambitions are dangerous ones.

Very smart, Harry.

It would be interesting to see Scrimgeour as their ally.

Severus is trying to stop the danger threatening his life, the Dark Lord, how he does this, by putting his life in what will probably grow to be even more danger, well at least he's fighting for himself and no one else, sure. I wonder if he really values doing something for himself this much, or if he has another reason he'ss not ready to accept.

Isn't he just going to be accused of kidnapping, that's a dangerous gamble he's taking, sure he could have glory, but that strongly depends on Harry and what he says to others, he's trusting his fate on Harry not back stabbing him?

I'm 100% sure he will fail, for one the potion won't most likely work, but I'm curious about the rest.

I have the impression that the draugh will be inefective. But then won't Voldemort posses Harry?

Wonder what Severus is thinking.

Friends are such helpful things when it comes to foiling ennemy plans.

Yep, fun.