Reviews for Past vs Presnt
narutard45 chapter 3 . 8/2/2007
HI MYSTERY PRSON! *cough cough* awesome story, i really like it tho as some of the reviews said it has some typos. keep working on it nd i'm sure it'll turn out great :D
MMchik429 chapter 3 . 4/5/2007
! love it! Keep up the good work! You know it's so hard to find good ShikaxOC stories and in my opinion this one is really good so i hope you keep it up!
Tiernan Hunter chapter 3 . 4/3/2007
lol, i love it. shikamaru fangirls...boy is that a scary thought. keep updating its getting really interesting!
SalemProphet chapter 1 . 3/15/2007
Nice story. But the paragraphs look stuffed. You should start a new paragraph everytime a diffent person speaks. It is really hard to read this chapter because of its size.
Sakuia chapter 2 . 2/25/2007

Yay you didn't put the quotes in a paragraph this time!

Also, I found this one more interesting than the first which shows that you're improving.


You had quite a few typos. (I thought I was supposed to be you're better reader! :9)
Xia Momo Capernicus chapter 2 . 2/24/2007
This looks really good. Just remember to keep the same tense (-ed not -s)and said is dead.

But I really like your style of writing; it is hard to follow at times, but it's always interesting.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Jya ne,

Sakuia chapter 1 . 2/17/2007
Ok so since you did this to me...


Good job with the story so far!


When you are putting down quotes, don't put them together into paragraphs! It's very confusing! Put each quote seperate from eachother.

(sorry if I'm being harsh)
Tiernan Hunter chapter 1 . 2/16/2007
that was cool...kinda confusing though. keep posting, its good!