Reviews for DS: Draft
Namikaze14 chapter 4 . 10/28/2007
oh wow nice story can't wait for the next chapter! :D
cybermage chapter 4 . 10/27/2007
It has potential. hopefully not the same storyline as the original naruto e.g. wave arc
Zecrea chapter 4 . 10/24/2007
It's interesting. I'll add it to my favourites!
WannabeFireFox chapter 4 . 10/21/2007
sugoi! i cant wait to see everybody's reactions! xD awesome! first time seeing a genetic produced naruto o_O lol
cybermage chapter 3 . 10/12/2007
It's decent. But I think it needs more character development in later chapters
Dapster chapter 2 . 3/21/2007
Uh, a locust is an insect, a lotus is a flower.
taintedlegacy chapter 2 . 3/17/2007
Interesting so far, you plan on having any pairings?
Shaedow Kitsune chapter 2 . 3/17/2007
Really good story so far, kind of strange though...
Lyra the Heretic chapter 1 . 3/1/2007
Good first chapter. Hiniateru's a super-wierd name. You should change it to Haruka or something... Ooh, look.

sunny place: Hiatari, Hinata

sunny spot: Hidamari

to be sunny: Hareru

One of those would fit the Hyuuga main family naming theme.

You could also name her Iyanami or something... Well, what I'm saying is, don't make it up on the spot - it never, ever works. (and yes, I know you made it up. How? Because it doesn't show up in any translator (I've checked) and it doesn't sound realistic.)

(Read: Hanabi means fireworks, Hiashi means 'spreading of a fire', Hizashi means 'sunlight' or 'rays of the sun', and Neji... well, his name means helix or spiral, so it's more in theme with Naruto's name (was named after the Naruto whirlpools as well as the fishcakes).)
sweetdiss69 chapter 1 . 2/26/2007
sounds interesting...can't wait for the next chapter
Krokedans chapter 1 . 2/17/2007
Good story! You should add a bit more on there feelings and thoughts though... Update ASAP.
stringer13 chapter 1 . 2/17/2007
Naruto isn't Arashi's son?
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