Reviews for Butterfly |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I like the way you ended it. I liked pretty much the whole fic, honestly. Was quite a good read, despite the length. I usually read absurdly long things, but when you're searching for a pairing like this you really don't get much in the way of options. I'm glad for that- I likely would've passed this by if there was a plethora of longer dics. Really excellent. I like your characterizations, particularly of the lesser characters in the source material- Lavender, Parvati, Padma, etc. Remus having a wife and kid was sorta odd, considering the instance where that's dropped is one of like four scenes including him, and I think the only one where he has any significance really. I feel like you really glossed of Remus and Tonks just for the sake of pairings. And where was Sirius in the epilogue? Did I miss him, or was there actually just no mention of him in it? My only other complaints are that the pacing is somewhat odd. You really glossed over a lot of descriptions, and that's sometimes a good thing, but it left any scene with actual battles feeling rather weak and lacking. Since there's about three of them, this is also a fairly minor issue. Oh! This has slightly bugged me since I read it originally- silver doesn't rust. You mentioned the Black family silver rusting awhile back. It's probably already been pointed out, but I dunno. Thank you for this delightful read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent beginning. |
![]() ![]() Hindi girl? Are you kidding me? Hindi is a freakin language; one of the hundreds in India. It's Indian girl. Jeesh. No offense, but a bit of background reading helps |
![]() ![]() Awesome! |
![]() ![]() ![]() An interesting idea. Let's see where you go with it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Disappointed Harry and Parvati did not name their daughter "Lily." What do u mean by "Harry and Parvati paid off all their debts?" Harry *has* no debts. The Potters were and are filthy rich. How on Earth could Rose Weasley he 8 years-old, already? That makes no sense. Ron and Hermione are only 24 and 25, respectively; and, you said they had her at, like, 21 years of age? That's impossible math, lolz. Magic can very easily heal Lavender's father of his cancer. I really wish that Luna featured more in this story. :( Good story. I'm glad you finished it. So many stories nowadays are unfortunately abandoned. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol. Solly Parvati. U should have taken ur heels off, yep. Hehe. :) I'm glad that Voldemort is dead. He was an A-Hole lolz xD. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Grr. I hit post in the last review before I was ready. I ALSO meant to ask, "what kind of joke is this?" Harry would EASILY wipe the floor against Malfoy. This story just lost all credibility, no offense. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Harry could *NEVER* lose to Draco Malfoy in ANYTHING, *ESPECIALLY* a Wizard's Duel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am impressed, among other things, by your research for Indian things. Quick question, are you Indian? |
![]() ![]() Tonks and Remus are to very different characters and even though they might be well together they really shouldn't Bond like that they're more friends and people to me so I agree that they belong separated having a kid between them it's just so weird they should just remain friends not hook up thank you for saying it that way |
![]() ![]() I love the story so far but I feel you need a sort of dark twist |
![]() ![]() Dumbledore fucks in everything in fanfics |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the story up until the end your rushed it. Your AN makes it sound like you just got tired of the story so you ended. I am sorry to be negative but there is nothing more disappointing then a great story being ruined by a rushed ending. |
![]() ![]() Someone really needs to cave Rons ugly face in, seriously. |