Nice to see un update, but it's 17 for a driving licence in the UK.

Whoa! The update emails must have gotten buried in my inbox! These new chapters are great! I did not expect your changes to the Ministry scene at all, that was really creative. Having Sirius still alive should make for some interesting plot possibilities. I'll definitely be waiting for the next chapter!

Thrice defied him... that could be a lot of people, but I'm guessing Harry in this case. They will rise again... does this mean the Death Eaters? It seems simple enough... except for the plural usage of those who have been destined, implying that more than Harry will be needed to defeat Voldemort. Anyway, eager to read the next chapter!

Okay! Review time! First off, I want to say that the first time I read your story I don't think I gave a review. Shame on me, I know. I think chapter 18 was the furthest you were the first time I read it. Now up to 24! Go you. I found your fic when I was browsing for interesting pairings that most people (IMO) wouldn't consider and found yours to fit that.

I'm not going to just lavish praise on your work, however. As an author myself I know how much we love hearing that stuff, and with as many reviews as you have I'm sure you've gotten tons of it. So I'll give you my opinions on it and hope that will satisfy. Please don't think I'm flaming you, this is supposed to be both uplifting and constructive.

First off, I'll say that my overall impression of the story is good. For the most part the chapters are each well structured and the plot is moving at a good pace. I also applaud you for not doing a detailed lemon. People who want to read lemons should look for one-shots in my opinion. A good romance has no room for them. This is only my opinion, mind you, but I think that was about as close as anyone should ever get to lemon unless they like the idea that some weird depraved people are going to be pleased to read it in ways we don't want to dwell on. Gross. So kudos to you for that.

As far as the pairing believability goes, I'm all for it thus far. Harry's subtle movements from brainless git I want to strangle to hey I think he's learning something about intelligence are going well for you. I believe canon Harry is way too emotionally clouded and watching your writing push him gently into seeing that some things need to be more thought out is excellent. I applaud you for that too. Very little is known about the Patil family, and the way you are fleshing her character out is also believable. I'll leave my own personal thoughts about it to myself though, I don't want them influencing your interpretation. I want to see where YOU take her.

Now, if you skip this paragraph, then you fail as a writer. No pressure. _ This is where I get to give my opinions (and they ARE opinions only) of where you could improve. The pace of the story is good, but the rhythm of it needs work. I can understand the concept of trying to get to the better parts or skipping over areas where there is little difference from the canon, and if that is what you are doing, so be it and take this however you wish. From the perspective of a writer though I would say it would be to your advantage to smooth out the rhythm so that it isn't so jumpy. A person less familiar with the canon story would have gotten lost many times. Best example in chapter 24 is the comment of Ron and the brain issue, which is not explained what happened before or after the fact and therefore would be confusing to a fan who did not read the books (as the scene isn't in the movie at all).

For the character's themselves, I have little to say. Much of what makes them who they are is as believable as ever in your work. I will make this comment though: In character language, keep in mind that last I knew the brits didn't use the same kind of curse words that, say, the americans use today. This point is me nitpicking, so ignore it as you see fit. It won't hurt my feelings in the least, and it won't really affect my opinion on the story as a whole.

Well, I hope that you are still reading at this point and didn't delete me so quickly. I would like to finish up with two things. One, I know I have only one story published and it isn't very long. If you want to believe my opinions are rubbish that's fine. No need to tell me if you do. Just because I only have one published story (which I know the last chapter if nothing else needs some work smoothing some of the transitions) doesn't mean I don't know a lot about writing. Doesn't mean I do either, so take all of this however you want to. Two, I believe in your writing ability. If I thought you were crap I wouldn't bother reviewing this work. I'm not going to sweet-talk anything I don't believe in, so know you are getting only my honest opinions. I will finish with this: You are doing great! Don't let my opinions discourage you. Either accept them for the constructive criticism I mean them to be or discard them as rubbish. I'm adding this story to my alerts and look forward to seeing where it moves. I really am enjoying the plot. Poor Seamus.

- Xilore

Sounds like a good start, when is the full chapter coming? (sorry for the late review, the announcement got a bit buried in college emails. You really don't want to know how many messages I have in my email's inbox...

When are you UPDATING?

AN?Something?

Can't wait to see what happens next!

Hmm, I don't know. I have two dissapointments in this chapter. The main dissapointment is that there is no confrontation between Dumbledore and Voldemort.

The second is Harry and co creating Floo in the room of requirement. I don't think this is possible. Two main reasons for that really. For floo to work, it must be put in the floo network. This is done at the ministry. So while the room would be able to make a fireplace it couldn't be connected to the floo network. It's like creating a computer but the internet connection must still come from outside.

The second Reason is that if that indeed were possible than Malfoy would have used that feature to get the deatheaters in Hogwarts.

very good chapter, I love this story as it continues to be interesting keep it up

david

Enjoying the story very much. Nice to see Harry in a relationship with somebody other that Ginny/Luna/Daphny/Hermione.

Bit shocked with the death of Seamus

Strong chapter. I was surprised to see Seamus die. I hope that Lavender stays so that she could be ready to fight on his behalf. You did a great job on this chapter.

wheres luna you have given her the shaft not even a mention other then i like where you are going

sweet

ii hope lavender will be okay

thanx 4 not killing sirius off

ii hate it when hes dead

ii hope that harry and parvati will be okay

update soomn please

great chapter ]

I LOVED THIS CHAPTER, UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

I can see why Harry feels a bit alone and wants to be apart a bit, though that's not the best way for him to be imo, and will be curious as to what might happen concerning his self-imposed exile, especially if things get worse.