Reviews for Unbidden
The Random Reader and the Wolf chapter 62 . 6/14/2010
Loved it! Thank you very much for this and congratulations for the good work!

Good luck.

Ray Laé Àlfori - Rayla
FungusWitch chapter 1 . 4/30/2010
I'm enjoying this story so far, and its cool to have a soundtrack for some entries. I will try to review every chapter. XD
SituationalExtrovert chapter 62 . 7/28/2009
This was abso-bloody-lutley brilliant! Mind you, I love your Snape so very much, that your Kingsley story totally pissed me off. How's THAT for obsessing!

I think Rowling made a mistake of biblical proportions by killing him. I mean, after all the shit he put up with, for how many years, and she repays his devotion to Lily (and by extension Harry) by leaving him a bleeding mess on the filthy floor of the Shrieking Shack? WTF? Where is the respect? Yeah, so he was a selfish, murdering prick when he was younger. He repented! Bring him back to life, JKR!


Oh, in amongst my Snape-love, did I mention your story was brilliant? Ah, yes, I did. You rock!


etherian chapter 62 . 10/10/2008
A very beautiful story. Leah was a terrific character and you brought her to life so very well.
VRAS chapter 62 . 6/25/2008
Honestly, I truly enjoyed reading your story.

It was nicely done.

And I thought that you added a soundtrack to it was the cutest notion ever. Also, it helped the reader relate further.
Robyn Hawkes chapter 62 . 12/23/2007
Well I finished reading "Unbidden" and I must say I like your story and ending much better than J.K.'s. I'm still annoyed with her for killing off Snape and Fred the way she did. She could at least have had them killed by death eaters. Oh well it is just a story and we can dream and read alternate endings. Keep writing-you have talent.
Robyn Hawkes chapter 17 . 12/22/2007
I just found your story this afternoon and I am hooked. Probably wont review till the end as I am enjoying it to much to waste time reviewing.
Pippin1973 chapter 62 . 11/19/2007
Wow, what a cute story. I thought it was very well written and I just could not stop reading...I wish there was some more were really funny and clever too. Good job!
Moghedien17 chapter 62 . 8/26/2007
Wow... fantastic story! I am a huge Snape fan also and you really did him justice while allowing us readers to see his softer side as well. Thank you!
iCraft chapter 62 . 8/23/2007
aww yay! i'm really sad that this is the last chapter that i'll ever read of this story, but at the same time, it was so adorable! also, i absolutely ADORE Israel K's version of Somewhere Over the Rainbow. it makes me cry almost every time i hear it!

i lovedlovedloved this scene! and sev's letter was amazingly touching! kudos!
seiyaferret chapter 61 . 8/23/2007
I don't know if you have ever been in love or not. But after reading this chapter, you have definately hit the nail on the head. One particular paragraph is exactly how I currently feel with my fiance. And in case you are wondering which paragraph it is, I have copied it below. Thank you for the perfect words that so reflect my feelings of utter joy.

Seiyaferret aka Jeanna

“Not at all, you misunderstand me,” Leah said gently, shaking her head. “You know me. I’m always in control. I recognize that I, alone, am responsible for my own happiness. But no matter how hard I might try, I can’t be in control all the time. It’s exhausting.” Leah leaned across the table for emphasis as she revealed her secrets. “From the very first moment I met Severus, something strange happened to me that had never happened before. I was happy to follow his lead. He fascinated me, and somehow I knew he had my best interests at heart. Now, I don’t mean he drags me around by the hair, telling me what to do and how to do it, but he knows what I need. And he always manages to give it to me, even if he has to fight me to do it. When I need to be in control, he encourages it. When I need him to be in control, he is. Like everybody, we have our share of problems, but we do our best to get it right.” Leah let out a slight laugh. “That doesn’t sound very romantic, does it?”
iCraft chapter 61 . 8/23/2007
AW happy birthday sev! lol. i liked leah's little remark. "Can you NOT die before then?" that sounds like something i would say! i was a little surprised severus didn't punch kingsley after what he said about moping around on his birtday, but then again, sev isn't really the punching type. he'd probably come up with some witty and intelligent, yet insulting comeback and then walk away. but i'm glad he kept his cool. :) and i'm glad he had a happy birthday with a happy ending.


sorry i didn't review this sooner, school just started back for me and since my mother has blessed me with the gift of the motor vehicle, i now am in need of income to support gas and such. :) so far every day after school i've been job-hunting. i haven't been very successful because most places won't hire me until i'm eighteen, and i REFUSE to work in fast food.

also, it's the first week back at school, and we already have a test. on friday. on the Crucible (which was a TERRIBLE book. every character was STUPID and by the end of the play i wanted to punch ever single person in the face. as soon as i finished reading it, i threw it against the wall and cursed Arthur Miller for all he's worth. all that book was one huge allegory to the 1950's. it wasn't about the salem witch trials. it was about Miller finding some way to indirectly complain about the situation of the country in the 50's. ugh.)

hopefully the entire year won't be as bad as the first week has been. i'm remaining cautiously optimistic.

but i'll stop complaining now. if you haven't noticed i have a tendency to ramble. shame on me. this is why i fail every single stinking english paper.

and now i'm off to download that version of "i put a spell on you" because i LOVE that song!

veelasiren chapter 62 . 8/23/2007
This story was one of my favorites. Please continue to write Snape stories because you do it so well.
Holly Ilex chapter 61 . 8/20/2007
Now, girlfriend...

You KNOW you have to do another story...the continuing Saga of the newlywed Snapes.


Tell you what; you wrtie some more of this story and I'll work on another one for mine, a kind of "GAP" year story

What do 'ya say? Deal?

Anyhow, this was a really light, easy read and neat idea for a post HP/LV showdown fic.

Looking forward to hearing from you with another story

Your friend from MD

Holly Ilex
Ellyanah chapter 59 . 8/20/2007
I loved the new chapter, as was to be expected. I read twillight during my vacation and as soon as I find my way to an english bookstore I will purchase the others. Is it me or does that book contains the perfect love story? Anyways thanks for recommending it.

I still have your two next chapters to read, so bye.
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