|Reviews for A day at the office|
| KaiDranzerBladeRevolution524 chapter 1 . 10/8/2007
that was cute. i liked it.
| akatsuki-NIN-itachi chapter 1 . 3/14/2007
I love it, yah!
Update soon please!
| Nedunque chapter 1 . 2/21/2007
A very nice, quiet look into the everyday life of two people in love. It's sweet how Rei on the one hand tries to 'behave' yet one the other can't help but to kiss Kai again. I like it a lot (like so many of your other stories - I really should do something about that backlog of fics to review).
There are a couple of typos, though:
- missing a space
if you took you keys with you. - you your
More importantly, you're not punctuating speech properly. It may seem counterintuitive at first, but when followed by a speechtag you need to use a comma instead of a full stop. For instance
“I just came to ask if you took you keys with you.” Kai murmured softly should be “I just came to ask if you took you keys with you,” Kai murmured softly
I know it's a small thing, but it often bugs me.
And lastly a matter of personal taste. I like how Kai refers to his mother with the familiar "mama", but to me Rei's use of "your mama" sounds odd. But I'll be the first to admit that I'm not at all good with voice.
Rest assured that this was an enjoyable little snippet of KaRe-ness.
| starshards chapter 1 . 2/20/2007
I absolutely adore stories that are like a snippet of their lives.
It's so tender and clever.
And in my own opinion no angst, or epic story can beat a fic like this... where I can walk into their lives and walk right back out with a smile.
Thank you )
| CatharsisInBlue chapter 1 . 2/20/2007
Yay! Very cute! I liked it alot, good job! Writin' another one soon? XP
| Ikustizen chapter 1 . 2/20/2007
So...is the co-worker jealous? I think it was good, except the ending is kind of ... blah.
-This is the worst review I have ever written. Jetlag does that to you-