Reviews for We Need to Talk
Psycho Rooster chapter 1 . 3/6/2007
-hernia-

I love you.
flufflebooty chapter 1 . 3/6/2007
oh my gah. That was cute on so many levels. I loved it

omgah AMAZING. cdl;v mflkhgmsd;x'h

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Rogue0fVoid chapter 1 . 3/5/2007
Sweet, very sweet. Good fic!
x.E.C.H.O.x chapter 1 . 3/4/2007
AH! YAY! that rocks my socks right off! you are so awesome! go you!
1066716 chapter 1 . 3/3/2007
For the record, ffnet sucks and I hate it. I have no idea why they refuse to send alerts and PM's and reviews at least twice every three months. It irritates the hell out of me, especially seeing as how I could have read this /yesterday/ and it would have made my day so much...so amazingly, magnificently better. Because...I don't know if I can pick which one of your stories is my favorite, because they're all so beautiful. Beating Hearts almost made me cry out of love for you, Form Drawing made me blush and squeal in joy, Public Transportation made me gasp, Tame made me wish to be a child again, Sausage and 99 Bottles and How I Paid For College made me laugh and jump and near tears in the sheer amount of happiness they brought me. I don't know if I can choose a favorite one, but...at the moment, I think this one might be it. Because...maybe because it almost reaches sadness at times. Maybe because Zexion's feelings shine through so perfectly. Maybe because Demyx is so loving - he wants to be loved but even more than that he LOVES. Maybe because the style you wrote it in is...wonderful. Beautiful. I'm an english person, a literature person, and when people take liberties with the style of writing, when they don't stick to one style, when they do different things, I love it so much. And you do that here. I don't know how to describe it, but...you don't write as a narrator, you write as /Zexion/, and even though it's 3rd person it's so much more heartfelt and emotional than most 3rd persons turn out to be.

But those are just vague feelings and responses to this beauty. Just...oh. I need a minute to become more objective so I'm not reduced to just hitting random keys in a strange mix of joy and happiness and...sadness? No, it's not sadness...yearning? I think that comes close, but I don't know why...yeah. The first scene. Zexion. I don't know...you write him...so beautifully. Perfectly. Aw, dammit, I wish there was a way that I could just...send my feelings, instead of trying to describe emotions. The way that Zexion describes him, describes the line of his neck, the phrase 'a nocturne for him only...' They're just so /beautiful/. And...how he /knew/ that Demyx couldn't swim, he didn't even think about it, he just /knew./

I mean...'he woke up wrapped in blue.' And then Demyx brought him coffee, Zexion was 'dizzy in blue. Hangover'...'what a fucking waste.' I don't know what to say about that, but it...it's just beautiful, you know? I know I say it so much about your pieces that I'm sure the words are losing their worth by now, but I say it because it's the /truth/, because I honestly /mean/ it, but this one is even beyond that, because the way you pick words and phrases...they way the words match up, the way they resonate and ring in your mind, the way the words create images, more than I've ever seen in any single work of fanfiction with the maybe/half-way/possible exception of 'ALHR' by Twig, and that one's my favorite among any fandom, among every work of fanfiction or fiction, and this one...it's just as /good/. I've never said that about anything. There are many good authors on this site, and I've always counted you among the best even among /those/, but I'll say it honestly when I say that no other fanfiction ever made me /feel/ more than ALHR did, but this one DOES. You can tell, because I'm so completely...wrought with emotion right now that I've become completely uneloquent, and I've got the sneaking suspicion that this last paragraph was, like, 3 huge run-on sentences. I mean...almost every single one of your fics has moved me to tears, whether out of sadness or happiness, but this is the first time I couldn't stop myself before I actually started crying, and dammit but that's embarrassing. But it's worth it, you know? Because...I don't know if I've ever read a KH fanfic so beautiful. Any fanfic so beautiful.

Dammit. I'll continue, I really will. 'It started with a kiss.' That line was pretty in and of itself, but...this story isn't /linear/. You don't really understand, you don't know why Demyx did it until the end. You don't give the reader clear answers, you don't give them every bit of information immediately, you withhold it until...until the time is /perfect/. Perfect. As in, there is /nothing/ about the pacing or timing of the fic that I would change, ever. There's the meeting, Demyx kisses him, Zexy thinks, and then you find out /why/, and it's like you've been sucker-punched in the gut with the explanation, but...but it doesn't /hurt/, but it makes you cry anyway. In happiness and joy and that strange bit of longing and yearning that I can't help but feel, though I still can't figure out /why/ I'm feeling it.

Yeah. "Zexion wasn’t a morning person, but Demyx just placed a hand on his cheek, opened his mouth, and sang so fluidly, a morning whisper of song washing over him, easing the transition into the waking world." How am I supposed to describe that? How am I supposed to...to tell you how much I love that sentence. Everything, actually. Heh. I'm...I'm really failing at this review, aren't I? I want to wait a few days, to calm down a bit and look at it objectively before I write, but I can't do that, I want to tell you /right now/ how much I love this.

And the way that you describe Zexion, as trying to pick out the flaws in Demyx, trying, honestly trying...'pointless, pathetic, a bother.' But Demyx sang to him...'dirty in the purest of ways.' Honey...I don't know how you did this. I don't know how you /do/ this. How you can pick the lines...the lines that are more perfect than any other line in the whole entire world would be. Like the line was made for this fic, instead of this fic being made of lines.

"Sometimes, after they lay panting for breath, Zexion turned and looked into the mirror, seeing what he supposed other people meant when they called them “Zemyx”." In a few days, or a few weeks, I know that I'm gonna look back at this line and squeal in joy, because.../Zemyx/ But when I first read it I just started crying even harder. Damn, this is really very embarassing. Pretty things always move me to tears, beautiful things always make me want to cry, but I don't, I really /don't/ ever cry, but now I am and I can't find it in myself to stop because...because /Zemyx/, because you're creating these two /people/, because for the space of a few minutes, of 30 minutes, of however long it took me to read this and re-read it, they weren't characters, they were /people/, you created /people/, and when I looked back and realized that, "no, they /aren't/ real, they /aren't/ alive," it honestly came as a shock. As if I was expecting to wake up in the morning and have a blond boy knocking on my door, telling me that his periwinkle-haired boyfriend was waiting downstairs. Damn. I sound like an idiot, I'm sure I do, but...But.

"Now when Zexion looked down at the figure beneath him, graceful limbs sprawled, swan’s neck arched, the scent of ocean and white flowers tugging at his every pore, he saw that Demyx was begging to be loved. Loved!" I don't know what I can say about this line. I think...I think it was my favorite. Out of every line, this was my favorite. Begging to be loved...loved! I don't know if it was the repetition that appealed to the part of my brain that loves literary techniques like that. I don't...I don't know. But...heh. I started crying harder. I'll stop this, I really will! You just watch, tomorrow morning I'll be better and I won't be crying anymore.

I want to stop...I'm working myself into an emotional wreck. Demyx. The way he kept the slip of paper in his back pocket. For months. And he was so scared when he set the pants to wash. He was so scared, you could /feel/ the way he seized up, you could /feel/ the shock that darted through him in that moment. And then...and then it was okay. Zexion stopped thinking about it. He just...stopped. And he loved him. And...and it was okay.

I hope you read this.../knowing/ that I'm not like this...I /don't/ cry this much, I really don't, I don't work myself into a state like the one I'm in. But...but. My favorite, this is my favorite among anything, among everything, the only thing I've ever read in my entire life that compares is a thousand pages long, and you accomplish what she did just as beautifully, just as gorgeously, you picked the words so /perfectly/. Okay. I'm stopping now. Please...please don't think that I'm normally this emotional, this girly, this much of a kid, this much of a...of a brat. But right now I can't really help it. Maybe it's 'cause I'm sick, or I'm tired, but this just resonated, it just struck me so much, it really...I don't know what it did exactly, but whatever it did, it /really/ did. It did so much that it almost hurts, my chest feels funny, and I don't think I've ever been so happy and...and something else that I just can't place, dammit...but I've never been so much of both at the same time. I really do love you with all my heart, you know. F'rever and ever.

-Dual
ChaosHarbor chapter 1 . 3/3/2007
I love me some Zemyx fics!

Keep shittin' them out for us!
Celendiar chapter 1 . 3/3/2007
I LOVE LOVE LOVE YOU AND THIS ONE-SHOT AND ZEMYX. Lucky Dual! ;D
Sorceress Fantasia chapter 1 . 3/3/2007
Sweet! I particularly liked how Zexion asked Demyx to marry him when he had to write something 'nice'. XD His definition of nice is not quite what I have in mind, but it works too. Especially when Demyx agreed so wholeheartedly. XD
Smyde chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
This was so beautiful. I loved all the emotions displayed in the story, especially by Zexion. In my mind I could literally image the last scene. The detailing was quite good too. Not an extent of too many long complicated words but not common ones you would usually see in a one shot. Also the fact that you dedicated it to Dualism makes it more special, not only to Dualism I bet, but also to your fans and readers.

Great one-shot love
Lisa chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
i loved it, its one of my favorite demyx/zexion fan fictions yet
Not-HereXXX chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
Aw, thats so sweet.
Gray-Rain Skies chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
Ohh...

This was SO cuute. I loved this oneshot. It really pulled me in, from the second I started reading it, and the ending was just adorable. The way you tied in that note to the first kiss was very clever. This oneshot was just amazing.

Good job.
Metal Chocobo chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
This was amazing. I was so certain that Zexion was going to try and break up with Demyx simply because he didn't want to get too attached. I'm so happy that note changed Zexion's perspective.

-MC
bealullaby chapter 1 . 3/2/2007
*sniff* so beautiful... _

I love all of your Zemyx fics D and aw that last bit, when zexion finally said those 3 little words...*sighs* so romantic~!
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