Reviews for Becoming Whole
nolbernabeyahoo.com chapter 8 . 12/26/2021
She accepted the ring a lot more graciously than she did in Eclipse. That was cool.

Her dreams are also interesting. In Twilight they seemed almost prophetic. It's clearly centered around the wolves. We'll se where they lead.
nolbernabeyahoo.com chapter 7 . 12/26/2021
Its easy to forget Jacob is only 16. Yeah, him proposing does sound kind of weird.

The differences in the two pov stories is interesting. Edward's pov gets their thoughts since he's a mind reader, and that act made the whole convo more dramatic. I do think there was more detail in the actual conversations in Bellas pov. Edward just seemed to skim a lot of stuff.
nolbernabeyahoo.com chapter 6 . 12/26/2021
It does make you wonder gow different things would be if Edward could have heard her thoughts all along. He wouldn't be so insecure, and probably wouldn't have made the same mistakes. Course the flip side being that not hearing her thoughts probably helped draw him in in the first place.

Still, in this story it really helps their relationship.
nolbernabeyahoo.com chapter 5 . 12/26/2021
Jacob definitely was scary in this chapter ... and its interesting that Bella actually recognizes that. In Eclilse even when he sexually assaulted her, I don't think she ever really scared her.

Esme threatening to kill Jacob is interesting. I wonder if that's a bluff, or if she actually can take him.

All that said, Jake technically has a point. The treaty does forbid the Cullens from turning someone, which is exactly what they plan on doing.
nolbernabeyahoo.com chapter 4 . 12/26/2021
The situation with Jacob and Victoria at the school sounds very fishy for a lot of reasons. I definable there's more to it.

Also, I initially disliked the idea of Edward being able to read Bellas thoughts. I felt it took something away from their dynamic. But it work in this story. Its nice to see Edward know for sure how Bella feels
nolbernabeyahoo.com chapter 1 . 12/25/2021
I already read the first couple chapters of this story from Edward's pov, and was hoping that reading this part from Bella's would make more sense. But it doesn't. No reason whatsoever for the Cullens to leave Bella completely unguarded. Even Victoria was wondering where Edward was. The Cullens were written horribly negligent in this part of the story.
celajwhitney chapter 11 . 9/14/2021
Jacob is such a stupid prick! he broke the treaty just to try to get one up on Edward?
celajwhitney chapter 7 . 9/14/2021
if my mother had been anything like Renee I would have run away from home.
valentina.delafuente chapter 24 . 2/4/2021
Exelente historia
KiraFanny chapter 23 . 4/28/2020
este es el final?
HappyEndingLover chapter 24 . 7/31/2019
Wonderful story so glad it wasn't taken down!
celajwhitney chapter 5 . 12/8/2018
esme should have killed him when she had the chance.
Devora13 chapter 24 . 2/16/2017
Perfect was the first word that came to my mind after finishing your awesome story.
Then I thought Bella has too many powers.
Now I am kind of sad the story has ended.
Thanks for writing it and sharing it with us.
Xoxo Alice
Devora13 chapter 16 . 2/13/2017
Thanks for writing it all in a chapter! Wow!
Devora13 chapter 15 . 2/13/2017
Finally she gets it. Hunting and fucking go hand in hand.
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