Reviews for Becoming Whole |
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![]() ![]() ![]() She accepted the ring a lot more graciously than she did in Eclipse. That was cool. Her dreams are also interesting. In Twilight they seemed almost prophetic. It's clearly centered around the wolves. We'll se where they lead. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Its easy to forget Jacob is only 16. Yeah, him proposing does sound kind of weird. The differences in the two pov stories is interesting. Edward's pov gets their thoughts since he's a mind reader, and that act made the whole convo more dramatic. I do think there was more detail in the actual conversations in Bellas pov. Edward just seemed to skim a lot of stuff. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It does make you wonder gow different things would be if Edward could have heard her thoughts all along. He wouldn't be so insecure, and probably wouldn't have made the same mistakes. Course the flip side being that not hearing her thoughts probably helped draw him in in the first place. Still, in this story it really helps their relationship. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Jacob definitely was scary in this chapter ... and its interesting that Bella actually recognizes that. In Eclilse even when he sexually assaulted her, I don't think she ever really scared her. Esme threatening to kill Jacob is interesting. I wonder if that's a bluff, or if she actually can take him. All that said, Jake technically has a point. The treaty does forbid the Cullens from turning someone, which is exactly what they plan on doing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The situation with Jacob and Victoria at the school sounds very fishy for a lot of reasons. I definable there's more to it. Also, I initially disliked the idea of Edward being able to read Bellas thoughts. I felt it took something away from their dynamic. But it work in this story. Its nice to see Edward know for sure how Bella feels |
![]() ![]() ![]() I already read the first couple chapters of this story from Edward's pov, and was hoping that reading this part from Bella's would make more sense. But it doesn't. No reason whatsoever for the Cullens to leave Bella completely unguarded. Even Victoria was wondering where Edward was. The Cullens were written horribly negligent in this part of the story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Jacob is such a stupid prick! he broke the treaty just to try to get one up on Edward? |
![]() ![]() ![]() if my mother had been anything like Renee I would have run away from home. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Exelente historia |
![]() ![]() ![]() este es el final? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful story so glad it wasn't taken down! |
![]() ![]() ![]() esme should have killed him when she had the chance. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Perfect was the first word that came to my mind after finishing your awesome story. Then I thought Bella has too many powers. Now I am kind of sad the story has ended. Thanks for writing it and sharing it with us. Xoxo Alice |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for writing it all in a chapter! Wow! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Finally she gets it. Hunting and fucking go hand in hand. |