|Reviews for Lost soul|
| Danfiction chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
Nice story. I can't wait for next updates, i wonder how everyone will react to him. Just a thought but i think hinata in the story shouldn't be coupled with anyone but if you already have plans then, it was jusst a thought. Till next chappy.
| G chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
Very short. And don't even mention pairings again. If you decide on a pairing in the future (or has already decided) then go with it and stop telling us that naru/whatever is not going to happen. You're the author, go with what you've got, pairing or no pairing and ignore any attempt to make you change your story into a romance/drama-fanfic. Looking forward to the next chapter. But take your time and make it longer, please.
| Kingdark chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
oh boy i seriously begin to DISKLIKE the council... Maybe naruto can get a crush or something?
Can he talk to the fox?
| bolko7 chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
PLZ update soon :D
| HarbingerLady chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
yeah, want to read more
| The great Khali chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
damn so short... i can't wait to read more all of your stories have reached an epic length so I'm looking forward to this one
UPDATE UPDATE UPDAtE
| galilean chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
The start of this chapter is HILARIOUS! Kakashi's reputation as the "Icon of Lateness" finally took its toll. Then there's the part where he remembered what Ibiki and his gang did just to verify his identity. Cavity check...eh heh hehehehe (I'll stop laughing now, I might fall ill if I don't)
Then there's the "take a kunai and pull an Itachi" line. Clever, I say, real clever. Hinata here is not bad, but I do hope she loses some of her coldness.
All in all, I think this story has a future (unless you decide to end it by stopping to write, that is). I believe there are certain things that can make readers stick to reading a story: (a) an interesting plot (b) interesting characters (c) grammatical and spelling correctness (believe me, some stories are so messed up spelling and grammar-wise they become a pain to read, even if the plot is good. so please be very careful with these) and(d)clever writing. I think you've achieved these so far. I'll be waiting for the next chapter, so don't take too long...
| Tmb04 chapter 4 . 3/13/2007
It was an OKAY chapter... I think the kakashi thing being early and then being interrogated was a bit far fetched. Sasuke seemed O.K. But Hinata seemed the most out of character out of everyone. I understand that you can be a beast if you tran since your young. But Hinata isn't that type of character at all, regardless if its a fanfic or not.
One more thing, Out of all the 300 chapters of Naruto that there are, there was only a little information on his past. The only thing we know is that he was alone and didnt have any family at all. But isn't it funny how just about 95% of all fanfics that Naruto is Abused so so much. Abused so much that the council in every story thinks he should be dead. Now I think that is 110% out of character.
Also where was Naruto during the Uchiha Massacre? He was there when Iwa Anbu tried to steal the Sacred scroll or whatever, but where was he when Itachi killed everyone?
Also you gotta realize that if you changed the past that the future will be COMPLETELY DIFFERENT. Meaning that the Uchiha Massacre probably wouldnt have happened. Their First mission to the Wave country wouldn't be the same, actually I cant even imagine it happening from the story so far. Also the chuunin exams would be different, The rookie Nine would possibly be different, and there would be NO WAY IN HELL that Orochimaru could beat the current Naruto, Meaning that the Sandaime Would be saved. Naruto Wouldn't Train with Jiraiya, (not that he needed to...) And Tsunade would probably not become the fifth.
but you know, you can go ahead and continue writing you way...
| blackangel chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
Hinata's changed, I like that!
| random reader chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
Wow, Team 7 started of wonderfully!
Now, how to proceed from there...
| dragondancer123 chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
It was pretty good. I laughed when Kakashi was being tortured by Ibiki because he was early/on time. I can't wait until the next chapter.
| horusdragon chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
| Wolf among sheep chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
Good chapter I liked haow you changed hinata 7/10.
| GouberMan chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
one thing please make your chapters longer
| DORK FATTY chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
HAHAHHA loved the beginning the Kakashi part hm...not Hina pairing...good cuz there are a bit too many around but still loved it Awesome