Reviews for The Heir Of Magic ADOPTED
cyiusblack chapter 7 . 12/29/2016
update soon
zackie1987 chapter 7 . 5/13/2015
I really love this story
Othinus chapter 2 . 3/3/2013
Just so you know if you don't know already. The format is crap.
Dault3883 Barron Backslash chapter 7 . 8/23/2012
i like this story i really wish you would continue it again

and who was the girl that went to primary school with him?
EmmaRandomAs chapter 7 . 12/20/2011
awesome story, i love it! i know you havent updated in many years, but i hope you decide to continue this one... its far too good to leave unfinished
samaelfell chapter 1 . 9/2/2011
Noooooo you cant just quit writing it at 7 chapters its not right especially since you adopted it from someone else who quit on it. pleaaaaasssssssee finish it.
eyeofhurriance chapter 7 . 5/13/2011
awesome story so far! excited for more!
WhiteElfElder chapter 7 . 9/22/2010
Good beginning with some obvious changes by you. It is always hard to take over another's work as it will seem like plagerism until you make massive changes.
Wttlewd chapter 7 . 5/5/2010
Black Durion chapter 7 . 3/1/2010
Dalwyn chapter 5 . 1/24/2010
Fun story. I especially liked the letter from Luna, "No No No!", and the sentiment within.

A few weaknesses. One is the lack of formality in the OWL scores and letter from Minerva. Worst there is the OWL letter mentioning Hagrid at all, but the bits "scoring higher than" would more likely have been stated as "breaking the record of", if they mentioned a name at all. Most likely would have been "breaking the previous record set in ."

In Minerva's letter, "your curfew will be non existent" would be better worded as "you would not be subject to curfew." Mention of Snape and Dumbledore would not have happened, Minerva simply doesn't bad-mouth other professors especially in writing. Well, unless the Fawkes incident in the prior chapter has led to a complete falling out with Dumbles. And so on.

In other letters you got the characters' voices much much better, for example in Ron's, Hermione's, and Bellatrix's letters later in the chapter.

Thanks for writing.

Thanks for writing.
ravenknight117 chapter 7 . 12/11/2009
hey i know you may not read this but if you can keep this story going i'll appreciate it.
kin-kinna chapter 7 . 12/3/2009
Cassandra30 chapter 7 . 10/8/2009
Excellent! I hope you can come back to this story soon! :)
Cassandra30 chapter 6 . 10/8/2009
Good chapter! Nicely done! Never occurs to Dumbles that Harry actually did send the letter as misinformation and smoking out Ron? Very cool!
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