Reviews for When the Knight met his Squire
The-Halfblood-Ginger chapter 24 . 7/26/2013
OH MY GOSH. I CAN'T WAIT UNTIL THE NEXT CHAPTER. *anticipation*
MEGAANIMEFREAK27 chapter 24 . 2/17/2013
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LaughsWithTears chapter 3 . 1/16/2011
Oooh... This could get interesting... :D
LaughsWithTears chapter 1 . 1/15/2011
Absolutely, positively, not-a-slim-chance-of-hatred, LOVE this story so far.
MysticSorceror chapter 24 . 10/4/2008
Things I liked:

Great characterisation

Aww Momiji-kun _

Like the character interactions

Wow, Kaki-kun is scaring me

I like that line: "You better take damn good care of her"

Like your writing style

Ways to improve:

Spelling error: "precautious"

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

I still don't like how they're all buddy buddy with Kyo but that's just me

Author Notes

Is thrusted a word?
MysticSorceror chapter 23 . 10/4/2008
Things I liked:

Aww, it's so cute how concerned Tohru is _

Poor Yuki-kun T_T

I like the interaction between Tohru and Yuki

Lol, good characterisation

Nice amount of drama

Yay go Kaki-kun and Momiji-kun XD XD

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Author Notes
MysticSorceror chapter 22 . 9/7/2008
Things I liked:

Lol, LotR characters 0.o

Wow, that story does sound pretty funny

It's sweet, how concerned about Tohru Kyo is

Wow, it's that song *flinches*

Yay, I'm glad that Tohru has Uo for company

Ways to improve:

Spelling error: "doo-doo from a plae" "hillarious" "unfortunatley" "blankley" "Eye am" "happend" "theif" "somthin" "cookoo" "fustration" "suprise" "immediatley" "uncontious" "anwser" "mannor" "cowaring" "badley"

Spacing error: "noone" "eachother"

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Author Notes

Too many random characters

For some reason I don't exactly feel sad about Hana

Overuse of the word said

Was a little hard to follow thsi time
MysticSorceror chapter 21 . 8/18/2008
Things I liked:

Wow, Akito sure is sadistic but what do you expect

Great character inteactions

Akito's layed-back attitude made me laugh

Yay Kaki-kun seems so clueless XD

Lol, I want that book!

Ways to improve:

Spelling error: "happend" "trhone" "know clue" "somthing" "definitley supsicious" "ingnoring" "suprise" "immediatly" "looney" "suprisingly" "unfortunatley" "fustration"

Grammar error: "dont'" "noone" "infront" "infact" "whoevers"

It looks like the drama's just begun _-

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

"supposed to do fro Kyo"

Author Notes
MysticSorceror chapter 20 . 7/29/2008
Things I liked:

It's cute that Kaki-kun can help protect Tohru

Excellent characterisation

Fantastic descriptions

It's so sad what happens with the dragons but I imagine this made Akito happy

Aww T_T poor Tohru

Ways to improve:

Spelling error: "wispered" "Unfortunatley" "sentance" "immediatley" "somthing" "thi"

Grammar error: "Your the guy"

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Author notes

"ironically seen a cave" - "yelled once he seen" :: should be saw
MysticSorceror chapter 19 . 7/27/2008
Things I liked:

I like the "action" scene here.

It's cute to see their concern for one another

Yay! Kaki-kun XD

Excellent descriptions

Ways to improve:

Try reworking your sentences so they're smoother to read

Spelling errors: "definitley" "somthing" "sentances"

Try to condense your thoughts so that you don't ramble

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Author notes

"They were shouting, Sir Kyo, and didn't even care that Tohru..."

Pace seems extremely rushed

Some words are in the wrong tense
MysticSorceror chapter 18 . 7/27/2008
Things I liked:

Lol that conversation was so funny

I'm kinda worried about what Akito might do but then I'm very suspicious

The Kyo-Tohru relationship looks really good

I like the back story with Kakeru and Machi - apart from it is pretty sad

Fantastic descriptions

I love the ring

Great cliffhanger

Ways to improve:

When the number is small think about writing it out

Spelling error: "starring"

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Author notes

This will sound really weird but I get this vibe that this chapter is lacking something but I'm not sure what

Maybe too much information pushed into one chapter
MysticSorceror chapter 17 . 7/25/2008
Things I liked:

Yay! I really do love Yukichi!

Cute Kyoru scene XD

Stupid door!

Kaki-kun XD XD

A handshake will show manhood?

Lol, that song was so weird - yeah I know it's from Mulan

Ways to improve:

Try not to repeat words or phrases

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Repetitive structure

Author notes

"why did that damn Yuki chose me" - should be choose
MysticSorceror chapter 16 . 7/25/2008
Things I liked:

Aww I love how much she thinks of him and how considerate she is - just like Tohru

Excellent character interactions

Poor Momiji-kun and Rin

I love how you portray Momiji-kun in this chapter

I empathize with Tohru at the end

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Author notes

"Tohru seen band aids and bruises"

"He needed to the man"

Wrong form of to "she was ready too"
MysticSorceror chapter 15 . 7/25/2008
Things I liked:

Excellent characterisation - except for Kureno and Yuki

Great writing style - seems polished to me

Cute Kyoru scene o

Ways to improve:

Spelling error: "badely"

Try to find other ways to refer to characters than just first names

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Do you mean blow to the head rather than blow in the head

Author notes

"cannot hear be around you"

Wrong form of their "They're army is huge"
MysticSorceror chapter 14 . 7/24/2008
Things I liked:

Nice writing style and I love the Kyoru moment

Aww I like how Tohru just wants to be with Kyo-kun

Poor Tohru-chan and Yay Kaki-kun! *just put a Kaki-kun picture on as her icon*

I love how you've characterised Kakeru

Ways to improve:

Try not to repeat words or phrases

Read over and try to find the skipped words

I wonder what's going to happen next but I like Kakeru

~Myst

Things that I didn't like:

Sometimes you lose structure in the sentences - disjointed sentences

"he watched the girl's eyes from crystals"

Overuse of the word said

"What could Tohru but leave him alone?"

Author notes

Grammar errors
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