this is AMAZIIIIIING
are you secretly jakkid166 from the past?

If you are a troll: Congratulations, NekoJessica is a Mary Sue to the level of Enoby Dementia Dark'ness Raven Way or whatever order it is in.
If you're not: ...

Ok, if this was meant to be funny let me tell you it really wasn't. If you had used far better grammar and had used 'prosecutor' instead of 'persecutor' which irritated me to the point where I wanted to tear my hair out.

I hope it's okay if I quote you on some of this. Seriously, this is better than "'I must defend the clients!' - 'No, Phoenix, you are the clients!' - And then Phoenix was a hobo."

Ignore this comment in the event that you were seriously trying to wright.

LOL, I saw this on the kink meme! You really took on the request of badfic and made it a really bad fic (which is good for the OP!anon,) but still, LOL

This. Was. Epic.

Best story ever, A, would read again.

Fuck the what now?

It's pretty funny as a parody, but I don't think that was your intention... I read it that way though and I was entertained. If you pass it off as a parody more people would like it, I think. Then again, I'm easily amused.

"Persecutor"? I'm going to PRAY you're kidding. Even if the entire fic was intended as silly stuff, it should have been upty-three times as long. (Hehe, oops, 'Umpty-three' is my word for 'lots and lots'.) Horrible spelling, horrible grammar, horrible descriptions, just...generally horrible. For example, I'm sure you know you're supposed to start a new paragraph every time someone sspeaks? If you don't believe me that this story is blatantly BAD, just take one look at this sentence:"nekojessica did a raelly cool animation and pointed at maya and said "You have no defense you pathetic lawyer!" and phoenix said "Objection!" and everyone clapped and phoenix said "I have a defense" and she said "oh" and the judge looked." One, it's a run-on (like every other sentence you wrote). Two, what the heck does 'You have no defence' even mean? Three...Actually, I'm gonna stop there, because otherwise this review's going to get humongous. Point being, this fic is BAD.

"persecutor"

oh god did i laugh at that! XD

any way assuming this is actually how you write. SLOW THE HELL DOWN this story should be at LEAST 5x as long to tell this story O_O

...Where to begin?

Am I to believe that this story was written with the intention of being taken seriously or not? This has to be a joke. The main conecpts of writing a fanfiction are the plot, the characterization, the spelling, and the grammar. Missing one of these essentials is understandable. Completely disregarding all four is just pathetic.

Are you five?

Are you mentally disabled?

Oh my, this is horrible and you are most rubbish. Please, fix it. PLEASE. ASHKDNVFMiahfkz.

Fic that's bad on account of plot issues can be mocked and enjoyed. Even the occasional grammatical error can be taken in stride-it's not as though ficers have professional editors at their beck and call-but producing something that is nigh unreadable based on a wanton disregard for the conventions of written English is unforgivable. Punctuation: learn it, use it.

At the very least, if you insist upon further butchering of the English language remember to capitalize proper nouns.

This story gave me "Full Life Consequences" vibes. It was fun to imagine how it would have been if it were animated.

Please go and kill yourself. Thanks, hon.