|Reviews for Save Me|
| God's Joy chapter 6 . 4/6/2014
awsome! More! More!
| indiefilms chapter 6 . 3/17/2010
What Hiei did to that punk was cool. I would have done the same thing- especially if I had known what he and his father had done to Kiarra. That was well played by Hiei. Very detailed and precise in dialogue content as you smoothly weave the aspects of Kiarra, her graphic past and the power she has she is scared about. This creates helplessness in the reader when they learn of Kiarra's past in detail because they wish they could have done something to prevent such events, yet powerless to stop it because it has already happened. This creates a stirred reaction which MUST be done to get readers to relate to Kiarra and try to understand, from a compassionate perspective, where she has come from and why she is the way she is today. You have your work cut out for you, I'll give you that. Looking forward to chapter 7.
| indiefilms chapter 5 . 3/16/2010
You did a good job with going even deeper into Kiarra's past. The way she dealt with it is most common with victims during such brutal acts of rape and other types of physical violence. It actually hit a nerve of mine... Excellent subliminal messages about the lack of coordinated efforts and proper functional disciplines of foster home organizations. You really hit the nail on the head with that one- you hit it HARD. Good work. Thanks for this.
| indiefilms chapter 4 . 3/16/2010
Good way in bringing Kiarra's past to the forefront- setting the stage for why she is the way she is and showing a catalyst for her pent up rage. This is now giving a three dimensional aspect to the lead role/protagonist. Destroying countless city blocks is evidence enough- evidence of a build up from constant hell of someone's past if not vented correctly. When it comes to Kurama or Hiei, it's a toss up. Both have their moments. However, I would have to say Hiei as my choice- Hiei/Kiarra. Hiei is more focussed, mature, serious and in control. I would lean more toward Hiei when it comes to the pair up.
| indiefilms chapter 3 . 3/15/2010
Excellent... Simply excellent. Kiarra obviously, by the looks of it, doesn't want these special powers and she doesn't know her own strength- yet. For now she just a frightened girl in a confusing and complex situation, unaware of what to do next as her power begins to resonate. Not knowing how to control these special powers scares her. The color codes with the various papers (determining different levels and strengths as such) was cool and original. The testing rooms- the punch meter was especially hilarious. One punch and the thing goes flying into a million pieces while the blast sends her backwards off of her feet. lol. The fight sequence on the next level was an especially interesting one. The jerk got what he deserved. Yet, when Kiarra lit up like a star in the room of darkness and blew him to 'kingdom come', she felt bad for killing him as she detests it. The descriptions of how her body reacts to certain perils and ramifications was especially a visceral and colorful touch. Between Hiei and Kurama as to what might transpire?... Well, Kiarra DID cry out to Kurama, did she not? This obviously means something- almost like an instinct. That's my take on it. Good job. Keep it detailed on all aspects right down to a strand of hair.
| indiefilms chapter 2 . 2/26/2010
"She had just managed to destroy about twenty city blocks of residential homes"? TWENTY CITY BLOCKS? Holy crap... Talk about energy the size of a tone of TNT.. I don't blame her for having a panic attack. Who would? Especially if she really had no idea what was going on.. Good character intro at the palace, giving the reader a chance to meet the characters and see what they are all about.
| indiefilms chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
Good work. Simple, yet apt. The details of the action sequences is well personified and dialogue- delicately weaved and smoothly executed as you set the stage for upcoming events and tribulations between characters. You don't waste any time before cutting straight into the action.
| Dyani91 chapter 6 . 3/4/2009
please update this story i like it too
| Dyani91 chapter 4 . 3/4/2009
hiei hiei hiei hieihiei have hiei fall 4 her
| 2animefans chapter 4 . 4/25/2007
the story is great. i can't wait to read the next chapter. i really think it should be a hiei/kiarra fic because u already have hiei starting to have feelings for her. i also think that u should make it so eventually they find out that she is some type of demon, like the last of her kind, that way it can sorta explain the reason wuy she has so much spirit energy. u could even make it like such a rare demon that has can turn their demon energy into spirit energy.
| TheBlessedDemon chapter 4 . 3/31/2007
please please please please PLEASE let it be a HieiOC story! PLEASE? oh and i love how the story line is going so far, your writing it out very well and i cant wait until the next chapter comes out _
| Scarlet Path chapter 1 . 3/27/2007
Love your work as always! :3 Remember, if you stop writing stories, I'll have to come over there myself, and kick your but. :P Nyaha! What are friends for!
| Hikari-Kayko chapter 3 . 3/27/2007
i don't care WHAT the paring is... JUST KEEP WRITING! _ P