Reviews for Charlene and The Chocolate Factory
Person chapter 5 . 12/23/2016
Tell me the pencils were Harry Potter inspired! Sugar quills!
Person chapter 2 . 12/23/2016
Actually, from the summary it was quite obvious she was already a legal adult, you said the little boy was replaced by a young woman, if she was the same age, you could have just said little girl, it's called being fairly straightforward and being honest. I don't know why you would have had to explain it, also, she is working. How many children do people see with actual jobs? Don't mean to be rude here just pointing out the obvious, even if it did take reading between the lines a little! I need no apology, I already made the inference that she was older than 12, you needed no apology! You were doing just fine!
hateme101 chapter 9 . 5/18/2016
I like this but why do you keep changing the font? I would understand if its a thought or a flashback of some kind but its not. The font just changes all a sudden
BryannaB709 chapter 18 . 4/30/2016
Awww... I'm sorry, I couldn't finish the story, and then I wasn't at the computer for nearly a week!
Still love the story!
BryannaB709 chapter 17 . 4/23/2016
I love your use of those lyrics in this chapter!
However, you might want to credit Disney for them, I just don't want you to get flamed!
BryannaB709 chapter 16 . 4/23/2016
fluff fluff fluffity fluff :)
BryannaB709 chapter 15 . 4/23/2016
Awww...
Sorry, I need to come up with a different response!
But it describes this story so well;
Just awww...
BryannaB709 chapter 14 . 4/23/2016
Awww... *blush*
So cute!
BryannaB709 chapter 13 . 4/23/2016
That was great! I like this turn of events!
That was an amazing idea, having Veruca push Charlene into the Chocolate River! I mean, it obviously was not a pleasant experience for Charlene, but it developed the story pretty well!
Kudos!
BryannaB709 chapter 12 . 4/23/2016
Wow. That was great!
BryannaB709 chapter 11 . 4/23/2016
Okay, I really didn't see that coming!
Good twist, though.
BryannaB709 chapter 10 . 4/23/2016
I love this story!
Just lovely!
BryannaB709 chapter 9 . 4/23/2016
I know that I'm not the only one who thought it was absolutely adorable how Charlene clings onto Willy's arm on the boat ride!
...
:)
BryannaB709 chapter 8 . 4/23/2016
I love it how he just unconsciously keeps close to her.
They're just drawn together!
BryannaB709 chapter 7 . 4/23/2016
I love how Willy softens his voice when he gets to Charlene with the names.
Willy/OC forever! :)
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