Reviews for Dark Lord Potter Part 1
ArkhCthuul chapter 22 . 6/15/2020
Ah yes, another (or given its age maybe the first?) no dragon magical being animagus.

Animagi are animals. Full stop.
Not magical creatures.

Even if a gargoyle is interesting.

Also, why is Snape. Still so... Undecided?
ArkhCthuul chapter 19 . 6/15/2020
Sheer stupidity on thenwizengamots. Side.

They. Opened their houses wide for future problems.
But then again, that fits with ccwnon.

Good for switch to Ms norriss only important appearance though.
ArkhCthuul chapter 18 . 6/15/2020
It's. OccLumency.
Not occulmency

Aside from that, again too much umping from this. To that and too. Fast. Overall pacing with too little. Detail
ArkhCthuul chapter 16 . 6/15/2020
A bit too heavy on having grown up reacting as stupid as rilon.

And Ron, I mean wow. Who in their right mind who grew up in Wizarding society would even consider that? Not even regular Azkaban inmates wands were. Snapped... L
Guesticus chapter 13 . 6/15/2020
Not bad overall merely your insistence of. Doing just about everything via diqlogue makes it all seem rushed from time to time.

Let's. See where this goes.
Guesticus chapter 12 . 6/15/2020
All I can say about this chapter is:

Bwahahahahahahhaarg cough cough glurgh...
Guesticus chapter 9 . 6/15/2020
Well, your way of people who accidentally end their. Friendships acting is muc preferable to Canon.

Kudos.

Aside from some diqlogue consisting of too much "Albus" this "Minerva" that,. Good chapter.
ArkhCthuul chapter 7 . 6/14/2020
Snape is a moron.
And Dumbledore still hasn't caught on to what he wrought.

Ah well... At least flitwick and kitty are happy.
ArkhCthuul chapter 4 . 6/14/2020
Deus ex magics blood tests are obviously deus ex magics.

Black makes sense, as does slytherins. But having lily be an adopted Morgana descendant... I don't think I've seen that before. And the hair fits... Interesting.
ArkhCthuul chapter 3 . 6/14/2020
Not quite as rushed, but still 90 percent of the reactions are a wee bit too Digital. But since it's still setup... Let's. See whose family in addition to the gaunty he ALSO has some kind of connection to
ArkhCthuul chapter 2 . 6/14/2020
Hmmm jumpy, rushed and with very little. Details.

Feels like
Watching a movie at 15 times. Speed.

Too bad, cause wi
Th lucius and dracos reactions and the neat snake. You could have done a lot.

Sigh...
ArkhCthuul chapter 1 . 6/14/2020
Ah, one of those.

Where Dumbledore isn't just a meme following moron but actually malicious.

Always like the. Tonks involvement, and your title says it's. Gonna be a dark Harry.

Looks good so far. If. You are. Over the grimderp.
smartisha101 chapter 1 . 6/9/2020
but the story is interesting
smartisha101 chapter 10 . 6/9/2020
Tonks is soo unloyal. If she was my friend I might actually kill her for not keeping her mouth shut. Any little thing and she starts yapping Harry's secret. Snitches get stitches.
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