Reviews for Of Durmstrang Rewrite
jCOOLn chapter 2 . 3/27
I liked the story, its just those large paragraphs that contain so much individual conversations and motions make it a bother to read. Other than that though I am enjoying the story so far.
Drinking 101 chapter 4 . 3/4
That scene where they get drunk? When you are used to drinking, and even sometimes when it's your first time if you have enough muscles, you can't get totally pissed out of only one third of a bottle of whiskey, I'm not even sure if a whole bottle of whiskey would let a sixteen year old get to that state of drunkenness. Furthermore, alcohol cannot get a person to imagine things, you can't see things distorted of see things that aren't there with alcohol, you just see things a bit blurry and can't understand the concept of dimensions and distances, you lose hand eye coordination and all of your inhibitions. I'm inclined to believe that the bottle was laced, as only some drugs would have the effects you described (they are illegal so I'm not telling you drug recommendations over the Internet). Still, mixing drugs with alcohol usually makes people (it happens to the people I know at least) end up in a comatose state. That's what happened to Harry at the end, when he blacked out, I'm sorry to tell you but blacking out from alcoholic intake is not like in the movies, you can drink and not remember parts of the night and still be safe, however when you pass out (not fall asleep, but pass out, as in your eyes rolling backwards and stuff), then you need to be taken to the hospital ASAP, since you could be in a coma, something that is incredibly dangerous and for which they would need to get some liquid thing pumped into you via an elbow syringe that doctors stick in there, also, depending on what you were having the night before, going into a coma (which is what happens when you pass out from alcohol) can make the doctors have to pump your stomach. I'm telling you this just so you know, since I gathered from that scene that you didn't have much experience with alcohol and it's effects. Other than that amazing story, congratulations!
Guest chapter 13 . 1/4
Why won't you finish the story
unknown chapter 13 . 10/31/2014
I hate you. Why didn't you finish the story?
Mackenzied3333 chapter 13 . 8/29/2014
please upload
willam and jack and jake chapter 6 . 7/25/2014
willam and jack and jake chapter 5 . 7/25/2014
nice very well done
willam and jack and jake chapter 4 . 7/25/2014
willam and jack and jake chapter 3 . 7/25/2014
lol nice
willam and jack and jake chapter 2 . 7/25/2014
very nice
willam and jack and jake chapter 1 . 7/24/2014
Guest chapter 13 . 7/16/2014
will there be more ?
bill560682 chapter 7 . 7/10/2014
fans of dumbledore i like to tell them that no matter how light sided you write dumbledore you can not get past the fact that he has kept 3 high ranking spots when people like malfoy have wanted to get rid of him and the only way to do that is to have more dirt on people then the dark families and be willing to use it to keep his jobs. the first thing voldimort would do is gather all the dirt his dark followers have to get rid of those in the government he does not like such as dumbledore but dumbledore is still in power which proves he has more dirt then all the dark families put together and is not affaid to use it.
bill560682 chapter 6 . 7/10/2014
now added to be last post ron being the hogwarts champion we all know ron would take full advantage of this by finding out he gets an automatic pass in all his classes for being in the tournament so he would go to none of his classes. an of course being a champion he can not get detention due to needing to spend all the time he can getting ready for the tasks. so of course you know ron is going to do stupid stuff like telling off snape due to the fact he can not get detention for it, not thinking about the fact he still has several years at the school. an of course he is going to ignore curfew just because he can. an of course ron being ron would not have a clue about the second task because he did not get the golden egg from the dragon. so of course he is going to whine about why no one told him what the second task would be. an of course since ron had no idea about the second task has no clue how to beat it so just ends up sitting on the dock whining about how unfair this is for the whole hour while the other champions finish the task, so at the end of the second task ron has a total of 3 points which were pitty points given by englands judges for the dragon task an the other champions are up around 75 to 85 points each. an of course if there is a 30 second per point delay between starters then it would be 40 minutes after the first person enters that ron can even get started. an of course draco would bet against ron and brag about how much gold he made by ron being stupid and a we are talking draco bets 10,000 galleons against ron and turns it into 500,000 just from the first task, due to the fact he bet ron would wet himself and run away.
bill560682 chapter 1 . 7/9/2014
now the first thing the weasley twins should do is talk to the other students from the other schools and find out who the pranksters at those schools are so they can spread their products to 2 new schools not just hogwarts. also they should try to find out if anyone knows members of other schools like salem so they then open up that school as a market for sales too. they should also figure out that about 95% of their business will be owl order and consentrate on that rather then a shop in diagon alley.

if you want to do something very few only 1 author as far as i know has ever done put ron's name as the hogwarts champion just so you can make a fool out of him. first by having the papers misspell his name as rob weltley and have that name stick threw out the contest. then when it comes time to face the dragon rob weltley is so scared he ends up dropping his wand and running away to go hide under his bed. so as a result he becomes the school joke to the point he has to go to the yule ball with his sister and even she dumps him after the first dance because he keeps stepping on her feet.
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