Reviews for KOTOR: The Power of Choice
StarWarsFan1 chapter 1 . 1/11
Good start man or woman I dont know
SugarWoman chapter 46 . 1/11
Good story I hope you decide to finish it one day. :)
yuquit8yearsago chapter 46 . 1/11
YOU SHOULD FUCKING UPDATE COME ON ITS BEEN 8 YEARS AND I KNOW YOUR STILL AROUND BECAUSE I SAW SOME OF YOUR FAVORITE ARTIST AND STORIES TO BE SOMEWHAT RECENT. why am i writing this in all caps, ill stop. by the way i dont care about how good this looks, i really dont. if you do finish this series you should and more of the people you almost forgotten about like nomi and hk-47. i really did like the fight of revan vs atris, nomi, kavar, jolee, and kaera. by the way i kinda liked kaera and you didnt really have her in the later chapters beside the fight and the imprisonment thing. and stop being british. they live in space they arent british, SO STOP SAYING BLOODY EVERY 2 CHAPTERS. well i guess that british thing doesnt really matter now because you aren't finishing this story and i liked it one of my favorite fan fic shit. it was unique, i never seen a story where revan still had his memories and i was good. and it has some of the most favorites and followers ive seen in a fanfiction. even if you arent continuing this you should continue it. wait that didnt make any sense. well i know you arent gonna read this and i just wasted about 5 minutes of my life for convinced a "dead" person to continue writing this fiction thing and it is most likely not gonna happen. on 1 out of a million will this fic continue. that didnt really make sense too damn. i know i told you i liked the fight between revan and nomi and shit and i thought revan was really badass there even if he lost and shit but him surviving a skewering and a blaster wound and standing up to face the jedi even more is really badass and i was enjoying it until you decided to have nomi force push him into a wall and end the fight. i would really like a rewrite of this but a litter faster because you know what you are writing about and dont have to plan anything except for a few new stuff like maybe new characters, revan being a bit darker, more on bastila and revan but not exactly because revan still needs to be darker, not forgetting characters(like nomi who was in 2 chapters and the fight i liked and appeared in none of the other ones), more carth too since he was only featured in small section of the later chapters, more fights and more kaera because again stop forgetting characters and add them back in, more atris and have revan like fight her again becaussse he really hates her and i want to see how the fight goes, remake the fight so it goes into more detail and make it go on longer and add more injuries to revan to make him evan more badass when he keeps getting back up after each one major or minor, and have him force choke the pilot on for one of the jedi like kaera lightsaber throw at his hand and cut of a few fingers most likely his left because i think he uses his right hand more but he can also use his left and shit to choke him. i know this is really pointless and a waste of about 10 or 15 minutes. i havent been counting. add more references in it too to make it a little less dark and add some humor(references like monty python and the holy grail bridge of death and the bridgekeeper). and back to that fight scene again(i really like if you cant tell) you should actually injure some of the jedi too to make revan not entirely helpless(i know you had him cut kaeras thigh and cut atris' arm but you know more injury but not life threatening but shit like small lightsaber cuts here or there on revan and the jedis) and i know i already told you this but imagine revan getting up after getting shot and moving into kill atris and nomi for pushes him again but what if he was strong enough to get back up and continue fighting the jedi with his lightsaber(by the way revan did not have an azure lightsaber he had a violet one and a crimson one) and having forgot about the pilot the pilot shoots him again but in the arm this time but it doesnt matter which arm since he could use both and and revan having lost both of his lightsabers is fighting unarmed against the jedi but since anger is driving him to forget about pain and numbness and the jedi dont want to kill him and while he is fighting he manages to elbow someone like jolee and steal his lightaber and continue to fight because he most likely would have continued fighting since he is one of the greatest sith/jedi to ever live beside people like yoda and star wars 7 luke but they arent far off. and having forgotten the pilot yet again do to his anger tries to shot him in the leg to help the jedi and hits and slows revan down a lot but he still going and he kills the pilot but force lightning or choke but loses some of his fingers(non important ones like ring and pinkie fingers) and gets evan more angry while the jedi try to knock down the zombie revan (because of all of his injuries) and fail(by the way revan has lost a lot of his blood) because revan is angry and anger fuels the siths desire to hurt and maybe try to kill the jedi but fails because half of his strength is gone and revan gets evan more and when he learns bastila has been captured he knocks the jedi down with a strong enough force push to try to escape to where the ebon halk was while the jedi are following him to try to convince him to give up and not fighting him because of the condition he is in and when he find juhani was right he get evan more and tries to fight the jedi and manages to hit a few of then while they are trying to knock him out (and by the way again i dont agree with you about how he is not good in the slighted in all seven jedi forms and have hole everywhere i his forms, its not realistic(well saying revan having multiple injuries and still standing evan with a couple broken ribs, 3 blasterbolt holes, lots of lightsaber cuts and a lightsaber hole from nomi and still fighting as if he had only the skewer hole in him is realistic at all but badass and thats all that counts(not really))but he should really be a master in almost all forms except a couple but not far off from mastery because he would not have survive the frontlines of the mandalorian war and even being the dark lord of the sith). and while all this is going on everyone is terrified and in shock of how revan is still standing and not dead yet from the amount of blood he lost and of course this is not a silent fight because eveyone is slightly worried that he might die and revan speeches and a few badass sentences from his like "Not like father. I can't die like father." you get the point. and this goes on for a while because the anger from bastila is kinda healing him very little though stopping the blood from escaping the wound because of the adrenaline from anger. and after a little bit more he hears bastila say something through their bond and tries to leave because he realizes he could have been trying to find bastila while fighting, but the jedi cuts him off and try to surround him but gradually backs off while he gets closer. revan tries to convince the jedi that finding bastila is more important than capturing him but thay dont listen. and after recieving another thing from bastila and a vision of what happened he tries to run a place where he can buy a ship because he knows where she is through their bond. i just realized i wasted about 35 ish minutes on this. but the jedi still follow him and threaten him with their lightsabers but are still concerned and worried and fearful and confused about him and the guy who sells ships wont sell him one because he is injured and the jedi are using mind trick to get the shop keeper away and try to persuade revan to follow them to their ship so he can heal and answer a few of their questions but it doesnt work but he pretends it does and follow them to their ship and he betrays them and fights them weekly because of the tons of injuries he has and they realized they just lead him to their ship as he retreats to the cockpit and tries to insert coordinates to the place where bastila was but he cant because the jedi cut him off and force him into the medbay where juhani treats his injuries while juhani tells them of her friends(mission, zaalbar,(by the way you keep spelling zaalbar and zalbaar) and canderous) and one of the jedi goes and gets them and canderous sees how many injuries revan has and is still awake and not unconscious or very dead and respects him even more because of that and sees that the jedi have bruises everywhere and knows that means he fought unarmed against lightabers and only got a few scratches from them and respects him even more... again. and again all thing while revan saying badass shit and injuring the jedi slightly like mildly deep cuts like atris' cut on her arm and also becoming good a few time like he had a few chances to kill nomi or kaera but instead they remind him of bastila again because of his slightly delusional state and he spared them and the jedi try not to kill him while he attacks them with the force and lightsabers and show some concern or how much he is being injured and some fear of... how much he is being injured. i dont really know this is just an outline of and idea that i just kept writing and only took me an hour to write this long paragraph that i dont know if i can fit it in the review section. oh and another idea have the jedis trie to use force stasis in the battle but revan was fighting against it no matter how painful it was like in the first few chapters(i forgot which) he fought against a force disrupter collar no matter how much pain there was and actually ripped it off same way he fought against the force stasis and broke free from it much to the shock and terrified jedis and continued fighting them. theres also pictures of revan you can use to help visualize the scenes. hust search darth revan and you should see pictures of a cloaked revan and pictures of revan in silver armor like shit like what you were getting at in the taris mission. and one more thing i dont agree on how revan was shot by carth after escaping taris and not taking it like a cham
THEKILLER742 chapter 36 . 1/12
hey wouldnt it be awesome if he also knew parkour and shit
THEKILLER742 chapter 43 . 1/11
Its been currently 9 years 9 months and 1 day since you first posted the first chapter
It took you 2 years 7 months 4 weeks and 1 day to release all 46 chapters
And it actually been 7 years 1 month and 2 days since you released the last chapter
And I know your alive because I looked on your account and one of your favorite stories is called New Beginnings and it was released on November 19, 2013 and I know you didn't just stumble onto it when it came out so I'm guess you found it somewhere it 2014 or 2015 and its been updated last Halloween so I'm kinda guessing that your still alive and just gave up and writing which is pretty sad because this was a good story and is one of the most favorite and followed story in the Star Wars game fanfic section
THEKILLER742 chapter 44 . 1/11
i didnt really like the ending much too should have had more things with taya kenobi since you didnt finish her story or kaeras and carths
what happened to dustil
oh and during the fight between revan and nomi/kaera/kavar/atris/jolee, why didnt bastila just tell revan through their bond that the sith were boarding the ebon hawk after he go shot with the blasterbolt
THEKILLER742 chapter 46 . 1/11
come on finish it its been 8ish years
and its been going along great except the fact that you keep forgetting about characters and make revan weaker than he actually was and im not gonna spend an hour and 15 minutes stating my thoughts again
THEKILLER742 chapter 32 . 1/11
sorry i uploaded 3 of the same reviews i looked on the review thing when i posted the first one and it wasnt there so i posted it again and the same thing happened again and you know the rest by the way 11/10 best sw franchise fic and shit
THEKILLER742 chapter 4 . 1/11
hi YOU SHOULD FUCKING UPDATE COME ON ITS BEEN 8 YEARS AND I KNOW YOUR STILL AROUND BECAUSE I SAW SOME OF YOUR FAVORITE ARTIST AND STORIES TO BE SOMEWHAT RECENT. why am i writing this in all caps, ill stop. by the way i dont care about how good this looks, i really dont. if you do finish this series you should and more of the people you almost forgotten about like nomi and hk-47. i really did like the fight of revan vs atris, nomi, kavar, jolee, and kaera. by the way i kinda liked kaera and you didnt really have her in the later chapters beside the fight and the imprisonment thing. and stop being british. they live in space they arent british, SO STOP SAYING BLOODY EVERY 2 CHAPTERS. well i guess that british thing doesnt really matter now because you aren't finishing this story and i liked it one of my favorite fan fic shit. it was unique, i never seen a story where revan still had his memories and i was good. and it has some of the most favorites and followers ive seen in a fanfiction. even if you arent continuing this you should continue it. wait that didnt make any sense. well i know you arent gonna read this and i just wasted about 5 minutes of my life for convinced a "dead" person to continue writing this fiction thing and it is most likely not gonna happen. on 1 out of a million will this fic continue. that didnt really make sense too damn. i know i told you i liked the fight between revan and nomi and shit and i thought revan was really badass there even if he lost and shit but him surviving a skewering and a blaster wound and standing up to face the jedi even more is really badass and i was enjoying it until you decided to have nomi force push him into a wall and end the fight. i would really like a rewrite of this but a litter faster because you know what you are writing about and dont have to plan anything except for a few new stuff like maybe new characters, revan being a bit darker, more on bastila and revan but not exactly because revan still needs to be darker, not forgetting characters(like nomi who was in 2 chapters and the fight i liked and appeared in none of the other ones), more carth too since he was only featured in small section of the later chapters, more fights and more kaera because again stop forgetting characters and add them back in, more atris and have revan like fight her again becaussse he really hates her and i want to see how the fight goes, remake the fight so it goes into more detail and make it go on longer and add more injuries to revan to make him evan more badass when he keeps getting back up after each one major or minor, and have him force choke the pilot on for one of the jedi like kaera lightsaber throw at his hand and cut of a few fingers most likely his left because i think he uses his right hand more but he can also use his left and shit to choke him. i know this is really pointless and a waste of about 10 or 15 minutes. i havent been counting. add more references in it too to make it a little less dark and add some humor(references like monty python and the holy grail bridge of death and the bridgekeeper). and back to that fight scene again(i really like if you cant tell) you should actually injure some of the jedi too to make revan not entirely helpless(i know you had him cut kaeras thigh and cut atris' arm but you know more injury but not life threatening but shit like small lightsaber cuts here or there on revan and the jedis) and i know i already told you this but imagine revan getting up after getting shot and moving into kill atris and nomi for pushes him again but what if he was strong enough to get back up and continue fighting the jedi with his lightsaber(by the way revan did not have an azure lightsaber he had a violet one and a crimson one) and having forgot about the pilot the pilot shoots him again but in the arm this time but it doesnt matter which arm since he could use both and and revan having lost both of his lightsabers is fighting unarmed against the jedi but since anger is driving him to forget about pain and numbness and the jedi dont want to kill him and while he is fighting he manages to elbow someone like jolee and steal his lightaber and continue to fight because he most likely would have continued fighting since he is one of the greatest sith/jedi to ever live beside people like yoda and star wars 7 luke but they arent far off. and having forgotten the pilot yet again do to his anger tries to shot him in the leg to help the jedi and hits and slows revan down a lot but he still going and he kills the pilot but force lightning or choke but loses some of his fingers(non important ones like ring and pinkie fingers) and gets evan more angry while the jedi try to knock down the zombie revan (because of all of his injuries) and fail(by the way revan has lost a lot of his blood) because revan is angry and anger fuels the siths desire to hurt and maybe try to kill the jedi but fails because half of his strength is gone and revan gets evan more and when he learns bastila has been captured he knocks the jedi down with a strong enough force push to try to escape to where the ebon halk was while the jedi are following him to try to convince him to give up and not fighting him because of the condition he is in and when he find juhani was right he get evan more and tries to fight the jedi and manages to hit a few of then while they are trying to knock him out (and by the way again i dont agree with you about how he is not good in the slighted in all seven jedi forms and have hole everywhere i his forms, its not realistic(well saying revan having multiple injuries and still standing evan with a couple broken ribs, 3 blasterbolt holes, lots of lightsaber cuts and a lightsaber hole from nomi and still fighting as if he had only the skewer hole in him is realistic at all but badass and thats all that counts(not really))but he should really be a master in almost all forms except a couple but not far off from mastery because he would not have survive the frontlines of the mandalorian war and even being the dark lord of the sith). and while all this is going on everyone is terrified and in shock of how revan is still standing and not dead yet from the amount of blood he lost and of course this is not a silent fight because eveyone is slightly worried that he might die and revan speeches and a few badass sentences from his like "Not like father. I can't die like father." you get the point. and this goes on for a while because the anger from bastila is kinda healing him very little though stopping the blood from escaping the wound because of the adrenaline from anger. and after a little bit more he hears bastila say something through their bond and tries to leave because he realizes he could have been trying to find bastila while fighting, but the jedi cuts him off and try to surround him but gradually backs off while he gets closer. revan tries to convince the jedi that finding bastila is more important than capturing him but thay dont listen. and after recieving another thing from bastila and a vision of what happened he tries to run a place where he can buy a ship because he knows where she is through their bond. i just realized i wasted about 35 ish minutes on this. but the jedi still follow him and threaten him with their lightsabers but are still concerned and worried and fearful and confused about him and the guy who sells ships wont sell him one because he is injured and the jedi are using mind trick to get the shop keeper away and try to persuade revan to follow them to their ship so he can heal and answer a few of their questions but it doesnt work but he pretends it does and follow them to their ship and he betrays them and fights them weekly because of the tons of injuries he has and they realized they just lead him to their ship as he retreats to the cockpit and tries to insert coordinates to the place where bastila was but he cant because the jedi cut him off and force him into the medbay where juhani treats his injuries while juhani tells them of her friends(mission, zaalbar,(by the way you keep spelling zaalbar and zalbaar) and canderous) and one of the jedi goes and gets them and canderous sees how many injuries revan has and is still awake and not unconscious or very dead and respects him even more because of that and sees that the jedi have bruises everywhere and knows that means he fought unarmed against lightabers and only got a few scratches from them and respects him even more... again. and again all thing while revan saying badass shit and injuring the jedi slightly like mildly deep cuts like atris' cut on her arm and also becoming good a few time like he had a few chances to kill nomi or kaera but instead they remind him of bastila again because of his slightly delusional state and he spared them and the jedi try not to kill him while he attacks them with the force and lightsabers and show some concern or how much he is being injured and some fear of... how much he is being injured. i dont really know this is just an outline of and idea that i just kept writing and only took me an hour to write this long paragraph that i dont know if i can fit it in the review section. oh and another idea have the jedis trie to use force stasis in the battle but revan was fighting against it no matter how painful it was like in the first few chapters(i forgot which) he fought against a force disrupter collar no matter how much pain there was and actually ripped it off same way he fought against the force stasis and broke free from it much to the shock and terrified jedis and continued fighting them. theres also pictures of revan you can use to help visualize the scenes. hust search darth revan and you should see pictures of a cloaked revan and pictures of revan in silver armor like shit like what you were getting at in the taris mission. and one more thing i dont agree on how revan was shot by carth after escaping taris and not taking it like a c
THEKILLER742 chapter 3 . 1/11
yo YOU SHOULD FUCKING UPDATE COME ON ITS BEEN 8 YEARS AND I KNOW YOUR STILL AROUND BECAUSE I SAW SOME OF YOUR FAVORITE ARTIST AND STORIES TO BE SOMEWHAT RECENT. why am i writing this in all caps, ill stop. by the way i dont care about how good this looks, i really dont. if you do finish this series you should and more of the people you almost forgotten about like nomi and hk-47. i really did like the fight of revan vs atris, nomi, kavar, jolee, and kaera. by the way i kinda liked kaera and you didnt really have her in the later chapters beside the fight and the imprisonment thing. and stop being british. they live in space they arent british, SO STOP SAYING BLOODY EVERY 2 CHAPTERS. well i guess that british thing doesnt really matter now because you aren't finishing this story and i liked it one of my favorite fan fic shit. it was unique, i never seen a story where revan still had his memories and i was good. and it has some of the most favorites and followers ive seen in a fanfiction. even if you arent continuing this you should continue it. wait that didnt make any sense. well i know you arent gonna read this and i just wasted about 5 minutes of my life for convinced a "dead" person to continue writing this fiction thing and it is most likely not gonna happen. on 1 out of a million will this fic continue. that didnt really make sense too damn. i know i told you i liked the fight between revan and nomi and shit and i thought revan was really badass there even if he lost and shit but him surviving a skewering and a blaster wound and standing up to face the jedi even more is really badass and i was enjoying it until you decided to have nomi force push him into a wall and end the fight. i would really like a rewrite of this but a litter faster because you know what you are writing about and dont have to plan anything except for a few new stuff like maybe new characters, revan being a bit darker, more on bastila and revan but not exactly because revan still needs to be darker, not forgetting characters(like nomi who was in 2 chapters and the fight i liked and appeared in none of the other ones), more carth too since he was only featured in small section of the later chapters, more fights and more kaera because again stop forgetting characters and add them back in, more atris and have revan like fight her again becaussse he really hates her and i want to see how the fight goes, remake the fight so it goes into more detail and make it go on longer and add more injuries to revan to make him evan more badass when he keeps getting back up after each one major or minor, and have him force choke the pilot on for one of the jedi like kaera lightsaber throw at his hand and cut of a few fingers most likely his left because i think he uses his right hand more but he can also use his left and shit to choke him. i know this is really pointless and a waste of about 10 or 15 minutes. i havent been counting. add more references in it too to make it a little less dark and add some humor(references like monty python and the holy grail bridge of death and the bridgekeeper). and back to that fight scene again(i really like if you cant tell) you should actually injure some of the jedi too to make revan not entirely helpless(i know you had him cut kaeras thigh and cut atris' arm but you know more injury but not life threatening but shit like small lightsaber cuts here or there on revan and the jedis) and i know i already told you this but imagine revan getting up after getting shot and moving into kill atris and nomi for pushes him again but what if he was strong enough to get back up and continue fighting the jedi with his lightsaber(by the way revan did not have an azure lightsaber he had a violet one and a crimson one) and having forgot about the pilot the pilot shoots him again but in the arm this time but it doesnt matter which arm since he could use both and and revan having lost both of his lightsabers is fighting unarmed against the jedi but since anger is driving him to forget about pain and numbness and the jedi dont want to kill him and while he is fighting he manages to elbow someone like jolee and steal his lightaber and continue to fight because he most likely would have continued fighting since he is one of the greatest sith/jedi to ever live beside people like yoda and star wars 7 luke but they arent far off. and having forgotten the pilot yet again do to his anger tries to shot him in the leg to help the jedi and hits and slows revan down a lot but he still going and he kills the pilot but force lightning or choke but loses some of his fingers(non important ones like ring and pinkie fingers) and gets evan more angry while the jedi try to knock down the zombie revan (because of all of his injuries) and fail(by the way revan has lost a lot of his blood) because revan is angry and anger fuels the siths desire to hurt and maybe try to kill the jedi but fails because half of his strength is gone and revan gets evan more and when he learns bastila has been captured he knocks the jedi down with a strong enough force push to try to escape to where the ebon halk was while the jedi are following him to try to convince him to give up and not fighting him because of the condition he is in and when he find juhani was right he get evan more and tries to fight the jedi and manages to hit a few of then while they are trying to knock him out (and by the way again i dont agree with you about how he is not good in the slighted in all seven jedi forms and have hole everywhere i his forms, its not realistic(well saying revan having multiple injuries and still standing evan with a couple broken ribs, 3 blasterbolt holes, lots of lightsaber cuts and a lightsaber hole from nomi and still fighting as if he had only the skewer hole in him is realistic at all but badass and thats all that counts(not really))but he should really be a master in almost all forms except a couple but not far off from mastery because he would not have survive the frontlines of the mandalorian war and even being the dark lord of the sith). and while all this is going on everyone is terrified and in shock of how revan is still standing and not dead yet from the amount of blood he lost and of course this is not a silent fight because eveyone is slightly worried that he might die and revan speeches and a few badass sentences from his like "Not like father. I can't die like father." you get the point. and this goes on for a while because the anger from bastila is kinda healing him very little though stopping the blood from escaping the wound because of the adrenaline from anger. and after a little bit more he hears bastila say something through their bond and tries to leave because he realizes he could have been trying to find bastila while fighting, but the jedi cuts him off and try to surround him but gradually backs off while he gets closer. revan tries to convince the jedi that finding bastila is more important than capturing him but thay dont listen. and after recieving another thing from bastila and a vision of what happened he tries to run a place where he can buy a ship because he knows where she is through their bond. i just realized i wasted about 35 ish minutes on this. but the jedi still follow him and threaten him with their lightsabers but are still concerned and worried and fearful and confused about him and the guy who sells ships wont sell him one because he is injured and the jedi are using mind trick to get the shop keeper away and try to persuade revan to follow them to their ship so he can heal and answer a few of their questions but it doesnt work but he pretends it does and follow them to their ship and he betrays them and fights them weekly because of the tons of injuries he has and they realized they just lead him to their ship as he retreats to the cockpit and tries to insert coordinates to the place where bastila was but he cant because the jedi cut him off and force him into the medbay where juhani treats his injuries while juhani tells them of her friends(mission, zaalbar,(by the way you keep spelling zaalbar and zalbaar) and canderous) and one of the jedi goes and gets them and canderous sees how many injuries revan has and is still awake and not unconscious or very dead and respects him even more because of that and sees that the jedi have bruises everywhere and knows that means he fought unarmed against lightabers and only got a few scratches from them and respects him even more... again. and again all thing while revan saying badass shit and injuring the jedi slightly like mildly deep cuts like atris' cut on her arm and also becoming good a few time like he had a few chances to kill nomi or kaera but instead they remind him of bastila again because of his slightly delusional state and he spared them and the jedi try not to kill him while he attacks them with the force and lightsabers and show some concern or how much he is being injured and some fear of... how much he is being injured. i dont really know this is just an outline of and idea that i just kept writing and only took me an hour to write this long paragraph that i dont know if i can fit it in the review section. oh and another idea have the jedis trie to use force stasis in the battle but revan was fighting against it no matter how painful it was like in the first few chapters(i forgot which) he fought against a force disrupter collar no matter how much pain there was and actually ripped it off same way he fought against the force stasis and broke free from it much to the shock and terrified jedis and continued fighting them. theres also pictures of revan you can use to help visualize the scenes. hust search darth revan and you should see pictures of a cloaked revan and pictures of revan in silver armor like shit like what you were getting at in the taris mission. and one more thing i dont agree on how revan was shot by carth after escaping taris and not taking it like a c
THEKILLER742 chapter 2 . 1/11
it me again. YOU SHOULD FUCKING UPDATE COME ON ITS BEEN 8 YEARS AND I KNOW YOUR STILL AROUND BECAUSE I SAW SOME OF YOUR FAVORITE ARTIST AND STORIES TO BE SOMEWHAT RECENT. why am i writing this in all caps, ill stop. by the way i dont care about how good this looks, i really dont. if you do finish this series you should and more of the people you almost forgotten about like nomi and hk-47. i really did like the fight of revan vs atris, nomi, kavar, jolee, and kaera. by the way i kinda liked kaera and you didnt really have her in the later chapters beside the fight and the imprisonment thing. and stop being british. they live in space they arent british, SO STOP SAYING BLOODY EVERY 2 CHAPTERS. well i guess that british thing doesnt really matter now because you aren't finishing this story and i liked it one of my favorite fan fic shit. it was unique, i never seen a story where revan still had his memories and i was good. and it has some of the most favorites and followers ive seen in a fanfiction. even if you arent continuing this you should continue it. wait that didnt make any sense. well i know you arent gonna read this and i just wasted about 5 minutes of my life for convinced a "dead" person to continue writing this fiction thing and it is most likely not gonna happen. on 1 out of a million will this fic continue. that didnt really make sense too damn. i know i told you i liked the fight between revan and nomi and shit and i thought revan was really badass there even if he lost and shit but him surviving a skewering and a blaster wound and standing up to face the jedi even more is really badass and i was enjoying it until you decided to have nomi force push him into a wall and end the fight. i would really like a rewrite of this but a litter faster because you know what you are writing about and dont have to plan anything except for a few new stuff like maybe new characters, revan being a bit darker, more on bastila and revan but not exactly because revan still needs to be darker, not forgetting characters(like nomi who was in 2 chapters and the fight i liked and appeared in none of the other ones), more carth too since he was only featured in small section of the later chapters, more fights and more kaera because again stop forgetting characters and add them back in, more atris and have revan like fight her again becaussse he really hates her and i want to see how the fight goes, remake the fight so it goes into more detail and make it go on longer and add more injuries to revan to make him evan more badass when he keeps getting back up after each one major or minor, and have him force choke the pilot on for one of the jedi like kaera lightsaber throw at his hand and cut of a few fingers most likely his left because i think he uses his right hand more but he can also use his left and shit to choke him. i know this is really pointless and a waste of about 10 or 15 minutes. i havent been counting. add more references in it too to make it a little less dark and add some humor(references like monty python and the holy grail bridge of death and the bridgekeeper). and back to that fight scene again(i really like if you cant tell) you should actually injure some of the jedi too to make revan not entirely helpless(i know you had him cut kaeras thigh and cut atris' arm but you know more injury but not life threatening but shit like small lightsaber cuts here or there on revan and the jedis) and i know i already told you this but imagine revan getting up after getting shot and moving into kill atris and nomi for pushes him again but what if he was strong enough to get back up and continue fighting the jedi with his lightsaber(by the way revan did not have an azure lightsaber he had a violet one and a crimson one) and having forgot about the pilot the pilot shoots him again but in the arm this time but it doesnt matter which arm since he could use both and and revan having lost both of his lightsabers is fighting unarmed against the jedi but since anger is driving him to forget about pain and numbness and the jedi dont want to kill him and while he is fighting he manages to elbow someone like jolee and steal his lightaber and continue to fight because he most likely would have continued fighting since he is one of the greatest sith/jedi to ever live beside people like yoda and star wars 7 luke but they arent far off. and having forgotten the pilot yet again do to his anger tries to shot him in the leg to help the jedi and hits and slows revan down a lot but he still going and he kills the pilot but force lightning or choke but loses some of his fingers(non important ones like ring and pinkie fingers) and gets evan more angry while the jedi try to knock down the zombie revan (because of all of his injuries) and fail(by the way revan has lost a lot of his blood) because revan is angry and anger fuels the siths desire to hurt and maybe try to kill the jedi but fails because half of his strength is gone and revan gets evan more and when he learns bastila has been captured he knocks the jedi down with a strong enough force push to try to escape to where the ebon halk was while the jedi are following him to try to convince him to give up and not fighting him because of the condition he is in and when he find juhani was right he get evan more and tries to fight the jedi and manages to hit a few of then while they are trying to knock him out (and by the way again i dont agree with you about how he is not good in the slighted in all seven jedi forms and have hole everywhere i his forms, its not realistic(well saying revan having multiple injuries and still standing evan with a couple broken ribs, 3 blasterbolt holes, lots of lightsaber cuts and a lightsaber hole from nomi and still fighting as if he had only the skewer hole in him is realistic at all but badass and thats all that counts(not really))but he should really be a master in almost all forms except a couple but not far off from mastery because he would not have survive the frontlines of the mandalorian war and even being the dark lord of the sith). and while all this is going on everyone is terrified and in shock of how revan is still standing and not dead yet from the amount of blood he lost and of course this is not a silent fight because eveyone is slightly worried that he might die and revan speeches and a few badass sentences from his like "Not like father. I can't die like father." you get the point. and this goes on for a while because the anger from bastila is kinda healing him very little though stopping the blood from escaping the wound because of the adrenaline from anger. and after a little bit more he hears bastila say something through their bond and tries to leave because he realizes he could have been trying to find bastila while fighting, but the jedi cuts him off and try to surround him but gradually backs off while he gets closer. revan tries to convince the jedi that finding bastila is more important than capturing him but thay dont listen. and after recieving another thing from bastila and a vision of what happened he tries to run a place where he can buy a ship because he knows where she is through their bond. i just realized i wasted about 35 ish minutes on this. but the jedi still follow him and threaten him with their lightsabers but are still concerned and worried and fearful and confused about him and the guy who sells ships wont sell him one because he is injured and the jedi are using mind trick to get the shop keeper away and try to persuade revan to follow them to their ship so he can heal and answer a few of their questions but it doesnt work but he pretends it does and follow them to their ship and he betrays them and fights them weekly because of the tons of injuries he has and they realized they just lead him to their ship as he retreats to the cockpit and tries to insert coordinates to the place where bastila was but he cant because the jedi cut him off and force him into the medbay where juhani treats his injuries while juhani tells them of her friends(mission, zaalbar,(by the way you keep spelling zaalbar and zalbaar) and canderous) and one of the jedi goes and gets them and canderous sees how many injuries revan has and is still awake and not unconscious or very dead and respects him even more because of that and sees that the jedi have bruises everywhere and knows that means he fought unarmed against lightabers and only got a few scratches from them and respects him even more... again. and again all thing while revan saying badass shit and injuring the jedi slightly like mildly deep cuts like atris' cut on her arm and also becoming good a few time like he had a few chances to kill nomi or kaera but instead they remind him of bastila again because of his slightly delusional state and he spared them and the jedi try not to kill him while he attacks them with the force and lightsabers and show some concern or how much he is being injured and some fear of... how much he is being injured. i dont really know this is just an outline of and idea that i just kept writing and only took me an hour to write this long paragraph that i dont know if i can fit it in the review section. oh and another idea have the jedis trie to use force stasis in the battle but revan was fighting against it no matter how painful it was like in the first few chapters(i forgot which) he fought against a force disrupter collar no matter how much pain there was and actually ripped it off same way he fought against the force stasis and broke free from it much to the shock and terrified jedis and continued fighting them. theres also pictures of revan you can use to help visualize the scenes. hust search darth revan and you should see pictures of a cloaked revan and pictures of revan in silver armor like shit like what you were getting at in the taris mission. and one more thing i dont agree on how revan was shot by carth after escaping taris and not taking i
THEKILLER742 chapter 1 . 1/11
10/10 best star wars fic ever
OriksGaming chapter 2 . 7/29/2016
Your formatting needs work, and there are quite a few minor spelling or punctuation errors which ruin my immersion into the story.
MaDmAN12435 chapter 43 . 5/3/2016
Since part two isn't that far along, I'll just talk about part one.
I like this. A lot. The character diversion from the source game is nicely fleshed out, the motivations for said characters that you added worked well, as did the things you added and changed about the main timeline of the game, like Darth Bandon being the one to capture Bastila, and I enjoyed reading the majority of the dialog, apart from the dustil/carth scene, which felt somehow more forced than the games made it out to be.
My only real problem other than the above scene is that the genoharadan only got a small reference, and no real "screen time."
Also I know that the whole "will of the force" argument cancels out this point: but honestly Revan is very lucky all throughout this story, and that combined with his power kind of removes most of the suspense. Apart from that, very well done What-If type story. Bravo.
~tHE MaDmAN
BrettVT chapter 43 . 4/21/2016
I have read a lot of Kotor Fanfiction and this story is absolutely breathtakingly awesome. I felt like it was a little rushed towards the end but what a great ending. Easily one of the best Fanfiction's i've ever read and a true masterpiece. I've enjoyed all of your other stories as well but this one tops the list for me personally. Thank you for this.
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