|Reviews for Eden|
| terrier2468 chapter 50 . 6/16/2013
I don't even know what to write... I just... I have tears streaming down my face over the newly dried tracks of older ones...I have been so affected by this story, I literally feel an aching pain in my chest.. and as much as I'm sitting here in disbelief and typing this rambling review, I can't help but thank you profusely for it. I wish I could come up with the words to express to you just what you've done to me throughout the course of my reading this, but I don't know of any that would do that... I will never forget this story, that's for sure, and ANY story, whether available online, in a book store, through a megaphone or speaker, that affects me like this is one held to the highest esteem in my eyes. This is clearly one of them and always will be.
Now my mind has gone numb again and I'll stop typing more of this rant with what is I'm sure terribly embarrassing grammar mistakes, but I just couldn't leave the page without at least attempting to express how much the day or so of reading this story (as I simply couldn't stop) actually got to me and that I admire you so much for having created it.
Perhaps I'm just still too caught up in the overwhelming tidal wave of emotion this story threw at me, but I can't help but think that the pain-filled love from the story lives on through the readers in some way. I can't help but desire this pain, and can't imagine any other similar storyline ever coming close to beating this one out for number one.
Again, thanks ever so much.
AKA: the ever so grateful blubbering mess.
| krakenwise chapter 50 . 6/16/2013
I'm at a loss. Such a deep loss. What do I do now.
Definitely coming back to this one for re-reading. It's devastating, but wonderfully so. Is it terrible of me to think that way? I was scared, and holding onto random things for comfort, and screamed into lots of pillows. But it was good. I felt something, I guess. After a long time of no feelings, I've found that [well-written/directed] horror gives me fear, and I've latched onto it like a marooned privateer and her trusty raft of palm trees. Erm. I like being terrified, is what I'm saying. And you nailed it. The suspense, the actual terrors, the horrifying ends for certain characters - bang-on. Not to mention the excellent portrayals of the cast of the morbidly unlucky cast of this piece. But I think the review before mine quite covered that. ;)
Thanks for writing something I could deeply, honestly respond to.
Hope you're well.
| Guest chapter 35 . 6/14/2013
(A tiny bit of a vent because you've left me emotionally compromised and it's the ass-crack of dawn and I didn't sleep because of this story. And then I shower you with compliments! But sorry for the largely incoherent first bit. SORRY.)
Ah. This chapter was exceedingly frustrating, as have been the last few. Hermione has always been clever enough to cover up things. Under the influence of Veritaserum, I suspect she would have managed to circumvent the WHOLE truth, where possible? She could indirectly lie. Magical potions aside, it struck me as odd that she is so transparent, so quick to give away crucial details, when her enemies are present - yet, in the company of Ron, she apparently cannot voice the conclusion she comes to w/r/t Lucius: she hates him.
Yes, she needs him, and that's a supremely difficult thing to explain to Ron, but she loathes Malfoy nonetheless, and repeatedly blames him for the state she's in. Why would that be so hard to communicate to Ron, I wonder? She never really does, or not very explicitly. In fact, I don't think she's told Ron she hates Lucius outright, ever.
I mean, hell, she's been fully aware of the physical torture and manipulation all along, and how that's what is responsible for her "need" - but if she's going to give up the more-or-less ultimate truth (she needs, and sympathizes for, Lucius) to all these people, then she should also be able to give up the extent of her destruction, and be detailed about it. Yet, she only really mentions it? Her torture is a valid excuse for finally succumbing to Lucius' control, and I'm happy that Ron jumped at that, as reasoning for her submissive behaviour, but...still.
Perhaps because I'm not 100% on board with your idea of a less-than-100%-confident Hermione, all of these confrontations - with Ron, Avery, Dolohov, Bellatrix, Draco - feel slightly off-kilter. My bad? ;) Sorry.
And with that bit of unpleasantness confessed, I'm finally going to leave the glowing review I've been wanting to, for the last 35 chapters. ;)
Your writing is flawless. Maybe a typo here and there, but it's fantastic, it really is. Ditto the pacing that you set. I also really admire your portrayal of these characters. They're very much on point. Naturally, I take exception to Hermione specifically in the situations mentioned above, but honestly, I can't fault you for it, seeing as that's how you decided to make her from the get-go. And you've done a marvelous job of showing her resilience, in spite of it all. I anticipate a rather melancholy end for her, but all the same, I understand her, and she's as strong a character as she can be, under the circumstances.
Kudos and piles of good things to you, for your depiction of Lucius. Jesus christ. I have nothing to say. Spot on. A. Evil bastard with a complicated [ahem, racist] past, but truthfully depicted as such. Hermione's wavering hope that he'd otherwise make a half-decent person, if you just scrubbed away all that fanaticism and murder, was true to her character, as well.
I'm just really pleased that this is a realistic AU. I mean, I'm upset every time bad things happen, and I screamed and whimpered and gasped and stopped breathing MANY times during my reading of this - christ, but how awfully, wonderfully terrifying of you - and obviously it's thoroughly unpleasant for literally all the characters involved, but you did a stunning job of showing their realistic actions and reactions to the situations you throw at them.
TL;DR: I LOVE IT, HAVE A COOKIE AND ALL MY ADMIRATION, xxxx.
| RoaringLion51 chapter 50 . 6/9/2013
I AM CRYING! Oh my good, Lucius.. he's die!
| EN.Burton chapter 1 . 6/4/2013
I read this a long time ago, before I started sharing this account with my friends, but even after all this time I find myself completely taken and hypnotised by darkness. I cannot tell you if it's good or bad, but lets just say that I've been reading Fanfiction for a very long time, and never, NOT ONCE, have I felt like screaming and crying with or for the characters' pain. I really hate to admit it, but I get very uncomfortable and scared when reading/viewing rape/incest, and I'm not going to lie, said parts in this story did scare me, but as weird and twisted as this might sound to you, I'm glad I went through with it. It was all worth it in the end, even though the ending itself broke my heart into many tiny pieces.
You have a remarkable talent with words, emotions, and characters. And to think that these characters, this world, is not originally yours! I'm begging you. Publish something, ANYTHING. Honestly, I would buy all your work regardless of content, because your type of writing is very rare, and it's rewarding yet disappointing to stumble on such a jewel in Fanfiction.
Forgive me if my review was lacking in certain areas. I tried my best, I promise you I did, but this story robbed me of my words. I'm too speechless with awe and heartache to continue. However, Faustus (one of the friends sharing this account) had just begun, and will no doubt leave a far better review than mine. Until then, we look forward to your future updates.
| LittleLote chapter 50 . 5/30/2013
I almost stop reading after few chapters because I found it too harsh (with all the tortures etc) and recently rediscovered it with all the fans' video-clips posted on youtube!
(it made me think of "In The Dark" by the-shiny-girl, but I see your story was updated earlier... )
but finally I must say I'm not disappointed at all!
It was great: good plot, good characters... I like the triangle Ron/Hermione/Lucius.
I was a beat shocked when he died at the end but... I think I understand your point a view and this choice.
Anyway, nice one!
| Marine chapter 1 . 5/16/2013
I red this story in french ! Wonderfull ! I loved it so much ! Thanks for your talent :) xoxo
| JadeIceFire chapter 50 . 5/11/2013
Now that was a story.
I did have a time getting into the first bit of it, but it drew me in and held me down after that. I've spent the last two days reading this and I am so impressed with the way you ended it. So emotional and real. Some people mightn’t be able to see why she felt the way she did and all that, but there are some things you just have to go through in life to be able to appreciate the underlying tone of what you've created. It was amazing at the end, and I say hats off to you my friend. It stirred the ice of my heart even. For some reason I liked Avery but I honestly can't tell you why. Very well done!
| shadow chapter 28 . 5/4/2013
well... that was pretty messed up, think im going to stop reading this fic now.
| shadow chapter 16 . 5/4/2013
...are you fucking kidding me, she should've killed him!
| hundred chapter 1 . 4/27/2013
I don't know if you still read your reviews since this fic has been completed for some time now, but I wanted to let you know that it's the only one I come back to and re-read. I've read the whole thing through many times now. It's a powerful story and it feels very, very real.
| CarysJames chapter 50 . 4/18/2013
Oh God! Crying like a baby right now! Chapter 49 was just too emotional!
| Sparkline chapter 50 . 4/15/2013
I never did come to like Lucius. Pity him? Sure. But like him as a person? Want him for Hermione? Nope, never. Maybe I didn't look hard enough, as I also thought that Hermione was crazy for even falling for him, Stockholm Syndrome at its finest. She had sex with him to make her feel like a valid person. How is that love? It's quite easy to see why he would like Hermione, but I never did grasp why she loved him.
Dear god, I loved Ron in this one, I don't normally see Ron with Hermione (despite it being canon) but you made me love them, love him. But it's easy, isn't it? He's not Lucius.
I'll admit, during the beginning horrific torture scenes, I'd feel physically ill, when he touched her in the beginning, I'd feel squimish. So you did a brilliant job of writing the story. You have quite an impact when you write, making readers think about the story even when they're not reading it.
| 19Vany92 chapter 50 . 4/15/2013
Oh my God!Tears...tears everywhere!** I love this story,i love this couplet..i love everything that you have written about them!I admit..i can believe this is the end...the very end...i bit sad..but i fell,in this chapter,hope...:)
| Sparkline chapter 11 . 4/14/2013
Dear god, what I wouldn't give to read a chapter from Lucius's point of view.