|Reviews for A new start|
| mangagirl18 chapter 3 . 9/20/2008
Wow! That was a really great story!
| Cyrix chapter 3 . 4/24/2007
Okay heres a thought, I still can't understand what you are writing here. But I know what is happening after struggling through it. Maybe you will get more reviews if you fix up your story a bit so it won't be so hard to understand and read. Just a friendly advice. :] Update!
| Cyrix chapter 2 . 4/20/2007
Whoa Whoa Whoa, hold up! First, it is hard to read with all the dialogues mixed together. Second, everything is going so quick, it is hard to follow. Finally, maybe double spacing the text can help.
Other than those, you have a great story going here! I can't wait to find out what happens next!