good start. i like the idea keep writing :)

Ok this has some AMASING potential. Keep up the great work and please post again soon .

I would love to see what you write next.

Thank you,

Terri

Need more please.

Sad.

wonderful.

keep going!

FC

O interesting. Me like

interesting start

i'm sure this story will continue to be interesting

cant wait to find out what happens

update soon

x

I like it

wahh.. so sad. continue

I can't believe they let a five year old on the bus all by himself. I feel bad for the boys, but won't Harry's leaving cause his brothers to worry. I think it will cause Ben more harm to his life if Harry left than if he stayed.

Well, the story looks promising. I'm looking forward to reading more of it.

In reference to the title of the story, I assume Harry's illness will somehow lead to him becoming a phoenix - as far as I understood it.

I was a little disappointed in Lily and James for abandoning their ill child. Maybe you could show their thoughts in some flashbacks later on to explain why they acted like this. (for example them being unable to deal with almost loosing their sons to Voldemort, to having them survive only to loose one of them to some strange illness without being able to doing anthing against it...) You know - make them appear slightly less cold-hearted.

And if I understood it correctly, they are actually both the defeaters of Voldemort, right? Or is this one of those cases where Dumbledore, or someone else, actually believes that only his brother Ben is the true prophesised child? (assuming the flame came from Harry (phoenix) and the bubble from Ben - when they were found only the bubble was mentioned. Maybe they thought that Ben was the real chosen one, who only protected his brother - and they kept this information from the public...) I would be one way to explain why they are not more distraught about his diminishing health...

There are many directions in which you can take the story. I'm looking forward to finding out where you'll take it. I hope you'll update soon.

i'm a whee bit confused. and i'm too lazy to log in. so if you deem me worthy, all mighty author, you can msg me at my profile. please?

Oh! A new story!

I love it already and no I am not just saying that. All of your ideas are really inventive and this one is really inticing already. I can't wait to read more of this and of all your other stories.

You seem to put a lot of planning into all of your stories and you create all your characters again in each story. I love your writing and I will continue to check your profile religiously eeryday (or a few times everyday) for updates.

Gemxx