Reviews for Rose's Story
Ravenwing679 chapter 1 . 3/4/2009
Wow. The monster paragraph of DOOM! Seriously, large paragrpahs are a bit disconcerting. You need to indent every time someone new it talking. Other than that, it's a good story. The dialogue is a bit awkward, and the plot is a bit...short. Keep writing, but consider the white space comment please. People like hite space. :)