|Reviews for Every Song Has It's Story|
| Monica chapter 5 . 2/19/2008
i know you said in ur profile th this 1 was done, but u also said in ur a/n their might be a ron/hermoine one. well if u r looking for an idea for wat about the song Girl Next Door by Saving Jane. it's on youtube just type it in like this: Harry Potter - Girl Next Door
| Lost-Hogwarts-Student chapter 5 . 11/13/2007
I thought you had talked about it differently but it was good none the less! Hoo-rah, I finally read it. Yeah.
| Liv Tinuviel chapter 5 . 11/6/2007
Ah! this one was superb! amazing! song goes perfectly...i never connected it to this situation and wow. just wow.
| JeanSyrots chapter 5 . 11/6/2007
OMGosh! I never imagined that song to fit like that, until i read it and it fit and it was so sad...i almost cried,(sniff) and Sirius, and it jsut fit so good and it was...oh Ale...don't blame it one Sirius! But i gues from Sirius piont of view then he did blame it on himself, so thats wht the song fits so sadly perfectly, jsut ...uurhg. So sad, but I loved it...more? (puppy eyes) luv JeanS
| Emily Slytherin chapter 4 . 10/10/2007
That last song was awesome!
| Erratic Amethyst chapter 4 . 6/11/2007
Love it! I my heck...that is my most absolute favoritest song fic ever! I love it! Wow...I love songfics now LOl
Love yu tonz
| shadowfang666 chapter 1 . 6/4/2007
ouch right in the...hehe love it that was cool
| JeanS chapter 4 . 5/29/2007
That was Hilarious! I loved it! Oh by the way, I'm sure u know "Shake-it-don't-break-it" Well I'll have to tell u, she introduced me to your fanfic! Ya and know what's better? She told me about u in person...ya...I go to school with her? She rocks huh? Don't get me wrong...yse I'm a girl and no I'm not a lessbian...ew...yuck...any who...I loved ur story...JeanS
| JeanS chapter 3 . 5/29/2007
I think u should keep to the shorter versions...Not A FLAMER!...just a suggestion. keep writing more...wait I should read ur other ones too huh...? I will ta ta for now. Prongsi-poo! I like that. (smiles) Lol JeanS
| JeanS chapter 1 . 5/29/2007
I loved it! That's like one of my favorite songs! It was perfect JeanS
| emeraldprincess92 chapter 4 . 5/22/2007
This was so cute and hilarious!
Loy of Luv,
| emeraldprincess92 chapter 3 . 5/22/2007
I love this also! :) This was so cute. I liked the ending!
| emeraldprincess92 chapter 1 . 5/22/2007
Yay! I remembered to review! :D I love this! It was so sweet. :) On to the next one!
| ShakeIt-Don'tBreakIt chapter 4 . 5/21/2007
lol you kept me on the edge of my seet! i loved it! i thought it was sweet in a way! keep up the great work! and now im going to type my first chappie so i can dedicate it to the one and only ALE! luv ya always:D
| SuGaRLiLy chapter 1 . 5/20/2007
Hey- I got your PM so I decided to hop on over and check out your writing.
This was a pretty interesting little songfic. You've got a good handle on the meaning and emotion behind the lyrics, and your characterizations seem decently developed. Your plot is infused with humor and longing. I liked the way in which you portrayed James.
I do, however, have a couple suggestions/ point of constructive criticism to offer up to you.
I would have liked to see a better 'song' to 'fic' ratio. Here it is decently balanced, but ideally, the song should serve more as a backdrop for the story that you are trying to tell. The song should fit the story, not vice versa. All in all, this wasn't bad, but I think that you could have fleshed out the story a bit and potentially slowed down the pace. It moved at a rather rapid clip. Slowing down the pace gives the reader more time to absorb what you are trying to convey (emotions, concepts, etc.).
I did notice a couple of typos/ punctuation errors, but, as always, these can be fixed with a nice helping of proofreading. You didn't have many errors, so I didn't find things too distracting, which was good.
The thing I did find a bit distracting sometimes was the syntax, or order, of your words.
"Lily walked up to him, fire blazing in her eyes and kicked him in an unwanted place."
'Unwanted' sound kind of awkward. It makes it sound as though there was a place on James' body which was not wanted by either him or Lily.
"After Sirius summoned him out, (after being shot a death glare by Remus,) dripping wet, James couldn’t help but smile at Lily’s smug look and mocking gesture"
I also found this sentence a bit too long and a bit confusing. I would consider getting rid of the bit within the parenthesis and making it its own sentence. By the way, the comma at the end of the phrase within parenthesis is unnecessary.
All in all, this really wasn't bad. It could definitely use a bit of polishing and fleshing out, but nice job.