|Reviews for My Last Breath|
| Hawkeye1991 chapter 1 . 11/21/2013
I have read your story about 4 times now and every time it makes me cry. The powerful love that Raph and Donnie show towards each other is beautiful and so emotional that to me this one of the best story on this site. Well Done :D
| Assassin's Grrrrl chapter 1 . 9/7/2013
I cried it was that awesome 3
| madagascarmaster chapter 1 . 12/13/2012
| No More Love chapter 1 . 8/24/2012
good story but sad too, at least Donny didn't suffer as bad as he could have
| ChubbyTabby chapter 1 . 11/3/2011
NO! That was so sad!
Awesome story, by the way - you're a really good writer.
| Enigma chapter 1 . 12/1/2008
You captured each aspect, each character perfectly. You have some serious talent, my friend. One thing I would change if I were you is change purple dragons to foot ninjas. I know I'm nit-picking, but it would make better sense since the foot use weapons like katanas while the purple dragons use unfair weapons like guns. But it is totally up to you. :)
I'm sure I'm giving a spamming review for the fact that this story is AMAZING and everyone already stated that this is one of the greatest death-fics ever. In my opinion, I think it really is the greatest. I really don't think that I've read a better one.
As my friend and I discussed, it takes some major writing skills and a true grasp of the characters' feeling to make a succesful death-fic, and you pulled it off with flying colours. You even made countless people cry!
All in all, I think you should be exceedingly proud of yourself! Sorry for the long review! :)
| Anna Kaiya Freeman chapter 1 . 5/31/2008
Like a baby.
I've read a couple fics about Donnie dying, but have to say... this was probably the most powerful.
| BubblyShell22 chapter 1 . 3/3/2008
Great story and very sad. Poor Raph! That had to be hard for him to do. You are truly a good writer.
The Bubbly One,
| Rose of Hope chapter 1 . 12/2/2007
w-wow...oh my-oh my god. This was beautiful...you should make a sequel...how life would be and if Raph keeps his promise.
| Elsiah chapter 1 . 6/16/2007
I've been wanting to get around to reading this one for awhile and wow, I'm so glad I did. I think I was shaking almost the entire time while reading. Such a powerful piece. Wonderful job.
| LadyDragonRain chapter 1 . 5/10/2007
Wow...just...wow... look at me I'm blubbering. *Sniffles*
Such a wonderful story.. you captured Donatello and Raphael so well. Heart wrenching, moving, captivating.
| L. A. Solvang chapter 1 . 5/9/2007
I'm not always fan of deathfics that are written just for the sake of death, but this one had a certain something to it that I liked. The ending was great, "it should be raining", and I'd like to think Raph keeps his word to Donatello... but you never know.
| sonofwolf chapter 1 . 5/7/2007
D: so sad...
| anypenname chapter 1 . 5/5/2007
So sad (T_T)! Poor Don, it's just like him to always be thinking of everyone else...
Beautiful story. Great job on it!
| Mandy chapter 1 . 5/5/2007
*sniffles* that was sad but a very good answer to the fic challenge.
I saw grammer errors here and there but they were easy fixes, such as:
the blood pouring out faster (than) Raphael could block
I suggest getting a beta reader to catch little things like that ;) It really helps and it's easy to find one on the stealthy stories forum :)
Ooh, the part where Raph finally ended Don's life was very touching.
I really liked this little fic _