|Reviews for Dead or Alive|
| jess.c.kong chapter 5 . 4/9
Overall the story was good; what I felt was well written was their feelings for each other and the love scenes. I like AUs but I felt the story lacked a few details, like why Iruka was being captured - is it assumed to be his adoptive family? If so, it'd make more since for him to be captured alive. I also felt some details were overlooked, like how Kakashi immediately thinks he doesn't want to kill him after he discovers his identity, but in the first chapter he identified the mission as capture, not assassination. So there could have been more complex dialogue to add conflict; like he had other options before going rogue. Also, I thought on their first night together Iruka topped Kakashi? But in their last night together he stated he was never topped by anyone and acted like it was his first time. And I feel like Kakashi wouldn't be that obtuse not to be more suspect of the man, but that's just me. I think with a few more scenes and informational paragraphs, the story would flow better. But I will commend you for how you wrote their feelings; it really sold their love at first sight.
| Ioga chapter 5 . 1/6/2011
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KakaIru is a cute pairing, and reversing the roles (somewhat) brought an interesting twist. All in all, I think this was the best of the stories I read from this forum thread, and it didn't have any instant turnoffs like bad language issues.
Now why wouldn't it have gotten the attention you thought it deserved? Hard to say; I can't say if mature-tagged stories attract or reduce the actual readership, but romance and a common pairing tend to be popular. I do think the summary of the story wouldn't have attracted me to it if I was here, mostly - it repeats the pairing what, five times including the fixed categorization? Going wild in summaries has typically indicated a rather wild approach to obeying grammar rules or any consistency with canon characters, so I tend to stick to the ones that are more droll ... and basically sane. But all in all, there is a limited number of readers, a limited number of reviews they'll produce, and sometimes all it takes is more time or active networking - like asking for review exchanges.
Minor nitpicks: Chapter 3 ends in one very long paragraph, which would be better to split into multiple paragraphs. I also have to file a complaint as a reader who reviews everything she reads: I greatly dislike "review or I will not post more" types of stories. I won't review a story multiple times in order to hit some magical number of reviews, and since I'm already there reading the author's note, it's just cold water in my face, saying that the rest of the story will not be missing because of an author's block but because the author wants to do trade. Getting those comments repeatedly while reading a single fic is even worse.
It's unnecessary to leave the demands for reviews at ends of intermediate chapters even though the fic is in fact past that chapter or even finished. It would be best to clean them out afterwards, they do nothing but create a feeling of a writer holding a story hostage to me.
With that political thing out of the way, though, this was a nice read. Thanks!
| melissa chapter 5 . 5/9/2009
| XxMysticMariexX chapter 5 . 10/11/2008
damn I can never get enough of your wonderful stories! This was absolutely beautiful LS, you never cease to amaze me. It's stories like these that encourage me to write more, to because as wonderful a writer as people like you.
I'm done kissing ass now lol XD .
| reeby10 chapter 5 . 1/21/2008
aw that was so sweet... and sad! but i liked! good job! :D
| ChibiAliChan chapter 5 . 12/11/2007
this is such a sweet, but sad, story... T_T
| xXxTylerxXx chapter 5 . 11/30/2007
Woo-hoo!Go kakashi get your man!
| xXxTylerxXx chapter 4 . 11/30/2007
Nice poor kakashi what will he tell tsunade?
| niver chapter 5 . 10/20/2007
That was a beautifully heartbreaking and perfect ending.
| dragonflylovesaxel chapter 5 . 10/19/2007
So cute! lovely story!
happy end for both and not so happy XD
great! i really love it ;3
| goldenkitsunehime13 chapter 5 . 10/18/2007
aw true love conquers all lol cute fic and hope i c more in ur profile! - (it's GKH13, i'm just too lazy to sign in)
| Inuyasha Uzumaki chapter 5 . 10/17/2007
I'm so stupid. I didn't realize it was updated really, XD But it was cute!
| Hanai-kun chapter 5 . 10/16/2007
Awwh. Sorry I haven't reviewed.
Really nice story.
The ending almost made me cry! xDD
It was close. xD
Really good story.
It was well written and the pairing is cute!
| miella allstar chapter 1 . 10/15/2007
such a sweet story it almost made me cry :)
| stardragon12 chapter 5 . 10/15/2007
Aww this is so sweet. My eyes are stining with pretty little tears of happiness XD This is really good writing, as usual, though Write on! XP I made a funny hehe