Reviews for Deus Ex Pokéball
KisekiRyuu chapter 1 . 11/10/2015
Made me cry.
So fantastic... Meeting Arceus himself.
And you have to admit, his (Connor's) arguments are compelling.
Love this story and I would have Favorite'd it if I had an account. Kudos to you!

Biancachu chapter 1 . 10/21/2015
Very cool and interesting.
Zek chapter 1 . 9/4/2015
Wow, that story was almost as depressing as Forsaken by lilpurplebird. Considering that story is about the Poke-apocalypse with a demon army trying to claim the world as their own and the only opposers mortal legendary pokemon, that is rather impressive.
kittylovesanime chapter 1 . 2/9/2015
this was a wild ride,but i'm really happy u wrote this!
GreenCAT the second chapter 1 . 12/27/2014
...somehow, i feel kind of sad about him not killing himself. i guess i'm just kinda bloodthirsty.
pocoorange chapter 1 . 10/24/2014
UnsungMelody2209 chapter 1 . 9/11/2014
Truely an amazing story. There are ample subliminal thought provoking revelations in this story and the clues you use to detail and explain certain events that are revealed in a later passage of the story is simply well thought out and beautiful. To read a part of a story and then further into the story come to the realization that "hey this thing connects with that thing and that's why it happens" to me is one of the most spectacular part of a story. The author allows just enough details mixed with just enough vagueness that the reader must find out on their own the underlying hints within a story.

This story was also incredibly long. A one shot with 21 thousand words. Impressive. The most impressive aspect is that you had managed to correlate 26 letters in to countless different combination, string them together and still manage to keep the readers interest throughout it all. That is a very impressive ability you have. I myself was only able to read for about an hour and a half yesterday which left me with most of the story already finished but the remainder of the day I could not focus because half of my brain was still pondering on when I could go and finish the story. So I woke up to finish reading it first thing this morning.

The story altogether is practically flawless. I had no issues with grammar, spelling, plot or anything. It all seemed to flow so well and there were no loose ends that left me with questions. Simply fantastic. One of the best stories I have read and you are a fantastic author too. I believe I am reading another one of you stories that you need to finish too so... Let's get to it haha. I look forward to reading more from you.
lalalala1 chapter 1 . 6/22/2014
I really liked this. It explored... is "philosophical elements" what they call it? So, Arceus doesn't want to have anyone know that he's the creator of the world, Mewtwo thinks that Legendary Pokémon should be kept a secret, but it doesn't say why, it's cut off by an ellipse. I think it's because both of them would be tired of being hunted down by humans or something, but I may be wrong... Anyways, this was an awesome story to read!
Lay Down Hunter chapter 1 . 3/29/2014
Awk, that was amazing, made me question almost everything I know about Pokemon... But still a very good story.
RoxaShadow chapter 1 . 11/27/2013
You are an amazing writing and need to be published... maybe you are.
pkmnfan11 chapter 1 . 1/28/2012
You sir, are a very good writer. I came into this story with low expectations and I am glad to report that they exceeded them and more. This is a gem in the Pokemon archive, keep writing.
Ark Zilong chapter 1 . 10/29/2011
This fic is just amazing
Mantinas chapter 1 . 7/6/2011
I like your psychological delvings. Especially this one, since the subject matter in this one-though not the same-was relivent to me recently.

You're a marvelous writer. I'm in awe of your work.

Good luck.

On a lighter note; "You'll never take me alive!"-this line made me laugh. No, it wasn't cheesy, I was glad such a classic was treated right.
Multiversity chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
This story deserves more comments. I can say without a shadow of a doubt that this is the best story I've read yet.
Consuelo Higdon chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
Well well well! I had stumbled upon this fanfic several times before, but I dismissed it each time, until I read the reply you made to my review and I realized it was yours! I'm very glad I finally read it, one more good story to ponder about.

I've always liked stories that are long but short at the same time... a bit contradictory, yes, but I'd rather find a story that's no greater than 10 chapters long with long chapters, or a collection of over 100 poems, than a story that's 100 chapters long with long, drawn out chapters that only become tiring for me. This story was by no means tiring, and in fact a great mind-boggler in the way its content was presented.

In truth, I had read this story last night as soon as I realized you wrote it, and the subject matter that was brought up had kept me awake up until midnight! My thoughts bounced dramatically from the genders you chose for the legendaries (I had yet to find a fanfic that portrayed all three of the lake guardians as female! A nice touch, if I do say so myself) to the actual arguments posed by Conner and Mewtwo, as well as my own interpretation of Arceus' character and behavior, up to the point where as soon as I woke up I had to reread this story just to calm my brain down for good.

It took me a while to sit down and actually review this story, and by now I've read all of your Pokemon fanfics to understand your points, opinions and characterizations of these legendary creatures that collectors only see as PC-fodder and the in-universe world regards as a pantheon to be obeyed without question. It's really a very complexing thing to think about, and are part of the reason why I'm so interested in Legendary Pokemon in the first place.

On the actual story itself, one thing that I've noticed is that the argument sort of builds up to an... anticlmactic end. It is difficult to explain, but perhaps it is just my familiarity with such heated arguments and debates ending uncivilly, with full-on yelling and screaming and clawing people's eyes out that just doesn't happen with your written arguments between characters. Maybe I'm just not used to civil endings to arguments, but I'm very glad that you're brave and intuitive enough to have disciplined and respectful endings to arguments rather than the explosive ends that I'm accustomed to. I'm glad you introduced me to this concept.

Otherwise, there is nothing that I can ever hope to aid you in improving on. Your sense of continuity that I see is rivaled only by the continuity I have found in the most unexpected of places, a webcomic by the name of 'The Adventures of Dr. McNinja'. It is a humorous tale for certain, but every little detail that has ever been brought up in each chapter has some sort of ramification later on in the virtual volumes, and everything is set in stone and reactive to eachother the very same way actual timelines behave towards each other. You'd be hard pressed to find a 'What Happened to the Mouse?' trope in Dr. McNinja, and you are even less hard pressed to find a 'WHttM?' in your own stories.

These examples of continuity I have also found in stories that have been completely improvised, such as another fanfic I have read on this very site titled 'The Unown Saga', a story that the author admits to having been completely improvised, yet I could find no hint of that aspect of the story. Continuity is something I find very favorable and a story, and you've delivered a higher level of it than I have seen before. For that I praise you, and I await your next Pokemon fanfic eagerly and with an open mind.

Bravo, FalconPain. Bravo.
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