|Reviews for Using You to Hold Me|
| Miss Hydrangea chapter 1 . 11/12/2008
Hm... this had strong moments (the last sentence was good), but it didn't seem to elicit any real feeling of angst so much as a slightly puzzled, yet detached view of things mixed with maybe a smidgen of regret...
Which feeling where you trying to convey?
In any case, I think you did capture the kind of relationship you were originally planning to have between Takumi and Hachi, although your story may benefit slightly from some of Takumi's view. Maybe?
| LianFex chapter 1 . 3/1/2008
I love the way you write (although I was a bit disturbed with all those bold letters). I love how realistic you made it sound and how you made it different from the stereotyped Hachi. I loved it and I think you deserved more reviews than these.
| Crazy Sardines chapter 1 . 1/29/2008
| Cold-BloodedKunoichi chapter 1 . 5/31/2007