Reviews for Using You to Hold Me
Miss Hydrangea chapter 1 . 11/12/2008
Hm... this had strong moments (the last sentence was good), but it didn't seem to elicit any real feeling of angst so much as a slightly puzzled, yet detached view of things mixed with maybe a smidgen of regret...

Which feeling where you trying to convey?

In any case, I think you did capture the kind of relationship you were originally planning to have between Takumi and Hachi, although your story may benefit slightly from some of Takumi's view. Maybe?
LianFex chapter 1 . 3/1/2008
I love the way you write (although I was a bit disturbed with all those bold letters). I love how realistic you made it sound and how you made it different from the stereotyped Hachi. I loved it and I think you deserved more reviews than these.


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Crazy Sardines chapter 1 . 1/29/2008
Nice fic..
Cold-BloodedKunoichi chapter 1 . 5/31/2007
Pretty good