|Reviews for Legend of the Abyss Scrapped|
| Grappling Fancies chapter 3 . 8/9/2008
I just noticed that last chapter, Senel was brought to the inn, and Luke was left on the ground and not even accomodated. Well, I was thinking,"Poor Luke..." But I guess it's a little different for the Legendia people... Anyways, liked the battle scenes this chapter and last chapter(I forgot to mention it...)
| Grappling Fancies chapter 2 . 8/9/2008
Haha wow, nice one. And Jade going too far was simply awesome. Keep writing.
| SacredAngelicSong chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
aww luke and tear. so cute senel. sheesh so dense xD
im likeing the story so far. must continue :D
| anime shadow alpha chapter 4 . 11/13/2007
It's getting very interesting. Keep up the good job.
| anime shadow alpha chapter 3 . 11/12/2007
It took somr time but it was worth the wait. Update soon.
| anime shadow alpha chapter 1 . 9/2/2007
Okay sorry about the wrong suggestion, but if it's how to start the fight, may I suggest the Legendia group having locked Luke in the Jail under Will's house, and him trying to get free bringing about the battle. Hope this suggestion is okay
| anime shadow alpha chapter 2 . 8/24/2007
Good story, can't wait for an update. As for ideas I would suggest making a point of the inexistence of fonons in the legendia world during the battle, hope you update soon
| drachemeister chapter 2 . 8/24/2007
I like the concept of this - my favorite tales heroes switching places - but I think it's poorly executed.
First, you need to spell check or get a beta. I've seen some weird errors.
With the "I love you" things (or whatever you can call it for Chloe and our now super-ultra dense Senny XD), I suggest building up to them. Just...little things throught the day or something.
You could do with a bit more description too, instead of a huge conversation. You only get descriptive during battles, and that actually bored me (dont' worry about this though, most battle scenes do) _ I don't like reading huge paragraphs describing Indignation, as I already know what it looks like. Something shorter would've worked, and then you could've been more descriptive on how much pain Senel was feeling.
Also, please, please, PLEASE do not say that Guy took little damage (it can fit at times, but not there). Say he barely felt it or something. We're not talking in-game terms that he took 345343453 damage.
I like to know more about what's going on inside the characters' heads *hint hint*
You've interested me enough to wait for the next chapter, but you shouldn't keep repeating the same mistakes
| Young Wizard Link chapter 2 . 8/23/2007
The idea is good and the plot isn't too bad. However, the only thing I can critize about is the way you wite the story. All it needs is a little work and will eventually become a good story to read. Also, the whole thing seems a little bit rushed when it came to the 'fighting against Senel' part, but maybe it's just me.
Nevertheless, I'd like to see what happens next.
P.S. The only idea that I can give you with 'Luke's battle against the Legendia side' is to start out the battle with only a few of the characters trying to deafend themselves while telling Luke it was all a big misunderstanding until Will shows up to stop the battle by merely hitting him on the head before going into his usual long lecture about what really happend.
| Sleix chapter 1 . 8/11/2007
I can't wait to see what happens!
| XxXInuyasha's Little AngelxXx chapter 1 . 5/21/2007
really well written,im liking it so far
| Draketh chapter 1 . 5/21/2007
Excellent job combing the stories there! keep up the good work! also it will be quite curious how things go on the story with the change of both Senel and Luke this seems like fun! ehehehhehehe good luck! Hope to see update soon
| Kirei Yume Tenshi chapter 1 . 5/19/2007
aw i was sad that it had to end but i like it. Tear and luke confessed thier luv! And Chloe and Senel...still need to work thins out ...sadly but chloe would do sumthin like dat! anyways update soon plz i wanna find out wat happened nxt!