|Reviews for Second Life|
| Espied7 chapter 26 . 10/20/2011
Brilliant analysis of the mind link. I'm impressed.
| Hodemi chapter 16 . 9/29/2011
I have to say this chapter has made me despise Remus Lupin even more if possible.
Of course its easy to despise and hate the man in canon for the way he abandoned Harry to the Dursleys and couldn't even bother once to check up on him and make sure he was being well taken care of.
However in this story the author has rewritten history to provide a reasonable excuse for this, as in he did try to rescue Harry but Dumbledork blocked this.
However in this chapter once again his true self shines through. His pathetic pride would be more important to him than being with and taking care of Harry. What a obnoxious prat. Lily and James would be turning in their graves.
| 1sunfun chapter 27 . 8/28/2011
A really, really good story.
| Marz1 chapter 1 . 7/4/2011
Good start but rather depressing.
| Hawkehunt chapter 21 . 7/4/2011
That was just so cute!
| buzzbumble chapter 28 . 6/24/2011
I love this story! I have checked out the other one and frankly yours is far better and they have basically did one chapter and no more wtf? How slack of them! I think yours still has some many possibilities ie:Evan messing with malfroy Sr with his knowledge of him , protecting harry from dumbledee,voldiemort, evan being the black heir by magic since sirius is dead etc etc!
| Reader-anonymous-writer chapter 28 . 5/21/2011
I will see the adopted story.
Quite complex Harry-Tom link, more complex than I would have thought.
I haven't expected that blood magic is legal in Great Britain. Why aren't courses in it offered in Hogwarts? Prejudice of Gryffindor Headmasters?
| Reader-anonymous-writer chapter 25 . 5/21/2011
Well... I would have thought that every press man has Occlumency barrier and protection against memory charms. Just... Stupid on Rita's part. Slytherin should know better than to trust the strong wizards whom she interviews. And if getting information out of Rita was as simple as reading unprotected mind, Lucius should have done it, too.
It's good Evan didn't tell an important piece of information to Rita, but I'm afraid Albus will figure out the 'bug' comment. Or is Albus really that obsessed with control over Potters? Maybe, it's because he wants all Gryffindor descendants under his thumb?
I hope Evan moves against Albus soon. And is it true that there are two Potters' cloaks of invisibility? If yes, it causes an amusing complication for the master of death - owner of three Deathly Hallows.
| Reader-anonymous-writer chapter 16 . 5/20/2011
I'm quite tired of Dumbledore's manipulations. Is he really that ruthless?
About time-space travel: I'm not surprised about alternate dimension, I'm surprised about some changes which happened before time travel and are hard to explain reasonably. And the scars intrigue me. Since goblins still couldn't remove Evan's scar, Evan still contains peace of soul of Voldemort from first/real universe, and this anchor should help him whenever he decides to return to his own time and place. The question is comparative time flow of these two universes. Voldemort would surely have tried to contact "swallowed into ground" Harry through scar, since Harry's Occlumency is non-existent. Evan wasn't contacted through the scar, so I infer that the alternative universes cannot contact each other in this way in order to allow Evan to return to original universe at the same moment he left, without creating paradoxes of information exchange.
So: Evan's scar will not hurt, time-flow of his universe can be considered frozen from his point of view, the prophecy affects only the young Harry, but Evan should be able to help him, Dumbledore should be attacked at the first sign of manipulation attempts, Harry can be sorted anywhere (Hufflepuff if he values his friends, Evan and Neville and Alice; Ravenclaw if he likes reading books, and he has some potential; Gryffindor if he foolhardily charges into deadly danger to protect others; Slytherin if he wants to be great and independent from Dumbledore's manipulations; when Harry finds out he can speak with snakes (Evan, don't keep this secret from him, or it will bite you later! for instance, when Harry discovers it for himself in front of whole school), he will be more inclined towards Slytherin (Evan, please, tell Harry about the Chamber of Secrets; it is a fascinating, important and dangerous place)).
I hope Harry will not be mindless cruel prankster. I'm afraid he will be, until one of his pranks harms somebody; broken arm wasn't enough to dissuade him from such rule-breaking activity. Though I understand that you and Evan want Harry to have a playful childhood, I would think that a familiar and friends and forest and broom flying will help him more than this acitivity of shocking the guardians with disorderly behaviour.
Maybe, Remus will help to direct Harry's excessive buoyancy and give him a more sensible view of the worldly matters.
| hypercell chapter 5 . 4/14/2011
What about his accent? He doesn't have an amerocan accent
| hypercell chapter 3 . 4/14/2011
If i was traveling to the past, i would forge a " time travel permit/licnse" and " sign it" by the " head of department of magical time movment" and the minister... Then i would show it to the aurors and say it's not /my/ fault they haven't legalizd time travlw yet, and would they like to hear from my time traveling lawyers? But your way is good too. And quite enteryaining to imagin. :)
| Targaryen chapter 3 . 4/4/2011
Wait...so Harry decided to plan out what he was going to do when back in the past, but didn't think up an identity? Wut?
| animato22 chapter 28 . 4/1/2011
| gaschalk chapter 12 . 3/21/2011
I like this story but you are falling into the same type of error other authors have done. Example "Alice gave and understanding 'ahh' sound" should be " Alice gave an understanding 'ahh' sound". I am not sure if the error is in the software checker or if the author is just not noticing that "an" comes before words starting with 'a,e,o,u'. Another error is a switch in gender. Using her instead of him or he when referring to Harry.
I do like your stories and please continue writing but lookout for the small errors that the mind will correct without the author realizing it.
| FairAris chapter 14 . 3/17/2011
I thought you did a good job with making a manipulative!Dumbledore. I am enjoying your story. I hope you are able to update.