I don't know how to explain this but your writing is just not "there". It's cute but also clichy.

This is beautiful.

your writing is really good, i really enjoyed it! but sadly it was highly unrealistic, most of the mains were ooc. I can tell you really like hinata, but truthfully Hinata is not the type to inspire unconditional devotion of the heart with every boy she meets, she's rather meek and weak but not pathetic which is what i like about her, but i dont see how Kiba, Naruto, Sasuke, Hideki can all fall for her in the same story. Kiba's love for her would most likely be sibling-platonic, Naruto on some level yes, Sasuke would def be annoyed by her weakness to even consider her mate worthy. but i like the whole forbidden/ love-hate Hyuuga-Hyuuga affair, it's pretty awesome! keep it up though, your narrative skills warrant praise.

This is cuteness to die for overdosis, I'm becoming addict!

Heyoo,

I'm a huge fan of this pairing, and I absolutely adore the way you write. I mean, it's just so clear and runs smoothly and it's just amazing! I really enjoyed this chapter, and I'm definitely reading on! XD

Best of wishes,

- PrincessOfTheSakura

Hee hee so cute cute

...*tsk* Neji.

OMG u made me cry it was perfect just perfect nothing can describe the story other than the word perfect , perfect ,perfect I wish u can do anthore NejiHina fanfiction and a side paring NaruSaku
It was the best NejiHina I've ever read I hope u can do anthore one please !

PS I love happy endings :')

U really made me emotional therepoor neji ... And hinata :(

But love it. :)

Amazing I have always been waiting to read a story like that. Amazing

Uwaaah! It's so cute! Eheheh, time to continue on to the next chapter! *zooms away like the wind*

It's my birthday today…YAY! I love U Hinata…3

*Crys*YYYYY?

hinata im getting so frustrated with her just, fight him already

ive read a lot these kind of scenes but this one was just WOW it was amazing im talking but neji and hinatas kiss scenes BTW