NOw that is the cutest thing i ever read /!

This is too cute /!

THIS WAS A GREAT READ! loved it! im not a writer but i do enjoy reading. your writing has a really nice flow to it, almost making me feel like im watching tv instead of reading! but sometimes the flow is broken due to strange word choice

for example: Hinata smiled and glanced at her sleeping son in her arms before facing up to Neji. "I'm glad." I thought the use of 'facing up' here didnt really work out, theres a slight negative connotation to that where this sentence is obviously supposed to be positive.

mmm from this chapter theres also: With a sigh, he continued watching the two children just as Hinata did.
the continued is a bit strange here because it implies that he was watching the children all along including while talking to hinata, but it would be more natural if he was looking at hinata while talking to her in this situation since she grabbed his arm. so something on the lines of "went back to" would work better, although it still doesnt really have the right fit..
and "just as hinata did" was a bit strange i thought. although you need to keep the tense constant, saying that doesnt really fit with the situation. to me it implies that hinata is not with him (physical proximity). if youre trying to convey that hes looking at the kids with the same emotion/mindset as hinata, and they are watching together, i think one way it can be done is by expressing those two ideas separately. something like that xD

will be looking forward to reading your other works! :D

Neji nodded humorously. "Not too long ago, I would've been surprised too." As a last thought, Neji glanced at Naruto with a hidden respect. "After all, who better to be the best man to the Hyuga Head than the future Hokage?"

NEJIIIIII UR SO NICEEE X'D

aw.. hiashi is so cute

"No, it would not have. He's getting off easy as it is. Believe me, I had more worse punishments in mind, but they were somewhat bordering on the line of psychotic torture, so I had to loosen up a bit."

LOL this thing is so touching! my eyes keep watering up, but im sure that just because im cutting onions.. yeah.. imaginary onions

omigwad no! D:

OH MY GOD IM SO SCARED FOR HINATAAAA D:::::: please dont be a tragedy!

oooh neji has a plan!

damn

damn. that man has a thick skull... and average sized head

LOL that neji is so overprotective and in denial its friggin making me laugh my bums off

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AWWAAHHHHHHHHH SOOO CUUUUTTEEEE

LOL. this is hilarious