|Reviews for The Demon Shinobi of Konoha|
| Tatsat chapter 3 . 10/25
Are you gonna complete this?
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/30
Work well together and please everyone?.. That's what you think Irukia thought?.. Probably, but I'd have to say he is a mental midget with an I.Q. score that is smaller then my shoe size, The only reason the teams lasted as long as they did was STUPID amounts of PLOT ARMOR! Enough that it was OBVIOUS to a ten year old! Seriously if the PLANET blew up, they (in their teams) would be found on the ONE chunk of space debris that had an atmosphere, vegetation, water and animals on it! It's absurd.
A number of angry faces? There was ONLY ONE GIRL changed in the line up! It's STUPID to think it would have much of an impact on a bunch of kids! Frankly ANY team built for ONE purpose ONLY is completely STUPID... Life doesn't WORK like that, you got to have people who's skills COMPLIMENT each other, or at LEAST compliment the team as a whole. Although before shippuden, I'm not sure what sakura brought to the table other then being "damsel in distress" for naruto to save. and sasuke and naruto are EXACTLY the same in fighting styles... PUNCH, PUNCH, PUNCH and if that doesn't work, PUNCH more. (pathetic really, unless you count naruto's inhuman stamina and ability to "fox out") team 8 with TWO tai jutsu users and one support (not medical.. Which two people that want to fight with their fists would NEED...just support) is ALSO kinda laughable. Considering their SUPPOSED to be taught by someone with very little skill in that field. Meanwhile team 10, (an interrogation team) is taught by a fighter... TRULY STUPID.
there is a grain of truth in every lie? Yeah, how about that the villagers of konoha are VERY stupid animals that need their tongues cut OUT at birth!
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/29
Danzo isn't a member of the council, he was FIRED after the uchiha massacre. (very publicly too, at least in front of the jounnin and anbu). Not really that bad a deal, considering what he did could be considered high treason, which usually gets you swinging at the end of a noose!
I always thought the Ino-Shika-Cho formation was an incredibly DUMB idea, simply BECAUSE of their fathers' fame, that kind of fame gets noticed in OTHER countries too, so it would make them devise ways of COMBATING that particular combo and others have had an ENTIRE GENERATION to know how to beat them! Forming it AGAIN almost guarantees that they WILL be killed (statistical CERTAINTY). Actually MOST of the teams were POORLY constructed... A "tracker team"?... with kiba's poor self-control do YOU think he'd just "sit and do nothing" when the target was found? *snorts* doubtful, he jump in head first and get the team killed. Besides what good are trackers when they can't DO anything to the target?.. A "IT" group? when chouji is the ONLY physical one there and the other two can't even MOVE when using their powers? Chouji the guy who doesn't want to hurt a houseplant? and team "Suicide"... two hot-heads (only one of which has a healing factor) that basically hate each other AND a mentally unstable girl(who is SUPPOSED to play "diplomat" and fails UTTERLY because she's DERANGED) plus ALL three are basically melee fighters! NONE of these teams are "balanced" in the SLIGHTEST. I think it's because the original author didn't take much time into thinking them up (probably why we don't see much of the others) and then stupidly gave a reason for being teamed. (without having a way to REALLY justify them, and SOMEHOW in a world of basically MUTANTS, not taking into account ANY of their personalities or interactions to each other).(would you team gl with sinestro? Or Dr. S with Dormammu? Lex Luthor and Superman? and NOT expect it to self-destruct after ONE mission, and NEVER WORK in any other circumstance?)
"will not change this so easily"?.. It should be "will not change this"... What exactly is the POINT of being a leader of ANYTHING if your "underlings" call the shots? Or for that matter what's the POINT of being a leader in a village of ASSASSINS if you can't use said assets to "remove" said over-pampered "underlings"? It makes me really curious as to WHY clan heads and the hokage himself let themselves be cowtoed by people that are essentially MUCH weaker then them, and have MUCH LESS standing. PUT THEM IN THEIR PLACES! Teach them an OBJECT lesson! Or to use a certain phrase "make an EXAMPLE of them"! Everyone (especially ELDERS) understand FEAR very, very well! I think ONE example by ANY clan head or hokage and the rest would fold like a house of playing cards! So really only ONE mass-murder would be needed. In fact the hokage would ALREADY be rid of the insufferable fools if Danzo hadn't been the one who pulled the "trigger" on the uchiha and of course it HADN'T been covered up (something that makes NO sense now, since enough time has past and there is only ONE, very WEAK*mentally, physically and politically* uchiha left)
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/29
Not revel his face or name?.. Does that ever make u wonder EXACTLY who the leaf is hiding all these secrets FROM? Because the bad guys seem to have NO DIFFICULTY in finding out ANYTHING they want, so the only people the hokage and others are hiding stuff from is THEIR OWN village! (which doesn't make a whole lot of sense, unless they know they are making a LOT of REALLY BAD DECISIONS... In which case you gotta wonder if it would be a BETTER idea to get NEW MANAGEMENT). I doubt even OROCHIMARU keeps so many secrets from sound!
BTW: failed in the number one rule, you spent to much time talking about your OC... Nobody CARES! If you MUST add an oc, you can only spend a single sentence, making them as generic and boring as possible then MOVE ON to the 'real' characters, that way nobody throws the story in the rubbish bin at the get-go. (sad fact BUT VERY TRUE)
How can there be muttering about never seeing naruto before, ALL THE CLAN HEADS have been training him for YEARS! They ALL know him! And council members? Why would they even be ALLOWED in there, considering it's a SHINOBI ONLY matter? If sarutobi can't put his foot down on something as BASIC as that, he PROBABLY SHOULDN'T be LEADER! (I get making drama, but not at the expense of making him look TOTALLY inept).
And finally, I agree with your reasons for not putting Hinata on kurenai's team, it was very thought out, I don't think many authors (including the canon author) really understand there is NOTHING kurenai can really teach the girl. Well, confidence, but she fails in that miserably even in canon. She'd much better be taught by a more combat-oriented teacher.
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/29
My head hurts, he can't tell anyone who he REALLY is, (but the first thing is saying who you are), and he can't say what he is, (but the first thing is saying what you want)... how does this establish bonds?... NOTHING about this makes sense.. just do the machine thing.. I AM.. *naruto*.. I AM blank.. you WILL DO THIS... why? Because otherwise you will be killed... SIMPLE.. why drag it out? Or make it complicated?
| Wolfone10 chapter 2 . 8/29
In canon naruto, his identity was hidden because his father had too many enemies.. and he couldn't defend himself.. in this one he's "FEARED" by most of the elemental nations, so his i.d. needs to be secret WHY?.. I am just not getting it here. MISSING nin are TERRIFIED of him, so WHO CARES if he says who he is!
AND FOR THAT MATTER, if he has to hide shouldn't Tsunade and sasuke? Considering the first is the SAME blood.. and the latter is well, NOBODY even cares except orochi?... Your logic is flawed.
(Tsunade can take care of herself) SO can naruto. SO I don't get it, unless it's a pathetic attempt to try to bind it to canon.. (in which case it's already broken and your making it seem even dumber). If naruto should be hid (even in canon) then shouldn't asuma and konohamaru be UNKNOWN to everyone? As they are the children of the 3rd currently in power and COULD be used against him.. BUT they are NOT... So this ENTIRE SECRET falls to pieces REALLY QUICKLY.
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/6
fuck update it already...
| BrightRaven -chris210racer chapter 3 . 2/7
More like an 8 year wait...
| Hidan chapter 3 . 1/7
IT was a very good chapter please keep writing.
| Guest chapter 3 . 5/12/2016
Last updated: 2009... wow, much longer than two years! This story is way too good to give up!
| JJ chapter 3 . 4/14/2016
It was sooo good. When will you next update? I, for one, can"t wait. Great story.
| my 2 guys chapter 1 . 3/31/2016
that was good keep the chapters coming
| Guest chapter 3 . 2/4/2016
An interesting twist for a story that's all wrapped up. Glad you caught the Minato name thing. I'm feeling Hinata might actually be in better shape than she was in canon. Simply because maybe she performs so poorly at home is cause her body doesn't have enough rest to recover and allow her to flow into her form. Pulling some D ranks and more balanced training may help her recharge so she can eventually go all out. At least that's my reasoning.
Not sure if you'll ever update again but if you decide to I think this story is awesome!
| Blacksoundwave chapter 1 . 11/20/2015
not bad. I really liked the fox out of the bag comment
| dark wolf of death chapter 1 . 10/24/2015
Love the story so far. I hope you continue it, I can't wait to see how they react when they see the age of their sensei.